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Thin Ice (Sunshine Challenge) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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A graceful glide Across the ice— A current rushes underneath A quiet cut The silent slice Icy eyes of winter’s weep. A solo dance Of figure eight Ellipsis-- Balances of fate— To wear a smile As ankles ache The cracking sound Of ice that breaks— But I landed on my feet… * * * “Skating Away (On The Thin Ice Of A New Day)” by Jethro Tull (excerpt) “…’cause you were bred for humanity, and sold to society. One day you’ll wake up, In the present day— A million generations Removed from expectations Of being who you really want to be… Skating away Skating away Skating away on the thin ice of a new day…” |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
lets bungle in the jungle... it's alright by me yeah.. war child -- dance the day -- and dance the night away...! nice ice-breaker serenty...cool!  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
its appropriate some one so COOL does a poem about ice "a silent slice" ooohh i like that line ... way cool me twin..yeppers you are later-skater-gator lol love ya me |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
An old "Schoolhouse Rock" song went through my mind as I read this. . . Superb my friend. . . --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wanna thank me three old hippy friends...lol...wanted to quote the whole song...is truly some of the most awesome poetry I've ever heard....and Sunshine, thank you for the inspiration...Love to all... |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
This doesn't get you out of the Alley topic... Song of the Week dear!  [This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 09-26-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
With the cold breath of locomotive within rif's of time You skate upon the ice of frozen lime. As Rupert's reply went to one in print And Jerry Garcia was not but heaven sent |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
serenity, there wasn't a moment you were skating on thin ice with this little gem Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ 'The silent slice' ... darn near says it all ! Beautifully done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
bumping because I can....and I feel like it!!  your stars you asked for |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Chris--it didn't get me out of the house, either, but close enuff.. Mark---m'angelheart, thanks, for the grace of your friendship, (and the stars...I LIKE seeing stars!) Kethry--thanks, I have been enjoying reading your work very much as well. Marge---(((((((((MOM))))))))))) |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Serenity, this dance on ice on blade of skate you have penned so beautifully... "the quiet cut the silent slice icey eyes of winter's weep" awesome choice of words...  Coco |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wow...Coco...I humbly thank you m'friend. It's always startling and flattering to have one dusted off from the back. I do thank you. |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Great poem can feel the cold on my but as if I'd have just fallen and gotten up. Nice Rich |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Very COOL!!! Brings back the Peggy Flemming aspirations... Love the way you weave my friend~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Serenity... this skated by me the first time, so glad I caught it's return to the ice... well done... challenge well met! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
My friend, serenity. This excerpt is a work of art in itself, and the rest just adds to the beauty.... "A graceful glide Across the ice... A current rushes underneath A quiet cut The silent slice Icy eyes of winter’s weep." jwesley |
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