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Marina
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since 2000-02-10
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Pickering, Ontario

0 posted 2000-09-25 02:30 PM


Go To Hell!


Wake up to reality
And stop your dreaming
We are over and finished
I suggest you start believing

I don’t want to be with you
A new love is what I’ve found
So stop trying to hurt me
And quit hanging around

You thought you could control me
But I’ve got a newfound feeling
So move out of my way
I’m going dancing on the ceiling

This is what I am trying to say
Just in case you couldn’t tell
I am tired of being polite
So just…GO TO HELL!




It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley



© Copyright 2000 Marina Crossley - All Rights Reserved
doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
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Virginia
1 posted 2000-09-25 02:45 PM


well, that just about says it, doesn't it? i think whoever you intended this for should get this message loud and clear. feel better?  
Corinne
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since 1999-10-28
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state of confusion
2 posted 2000-09-25 02:53 PM


This has a rhythm and beat like a rock song, punchy and to the point.  Givin' 'em hell, yes she is!

Corinne

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
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In the winds of Cherokee song
3 posted 2000-09-25 02:54 PM


Damn girl.....I do believe that whoever this is for is half way there now.  When you pack a punch you really pack it.  Nothing hidden in this one.
jlocke
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CC,TX
4 posted 2000-09-25 03:06 PM


You tell 'em!  

Love is the law, love under will.



2dalimit
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Mississippi coast
5 posted 2000-09-25 03:17 PM


OK! OK! He is pretty dim witted, if he don't take the HINT.
Melton

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

6 posted 2000-09-25 03:19 PM


OH girl....Im gonna tell...
such a potty mouth...
have you been hanging around with that gemini
shadows chick again..
she always was a bad influence on you  
and Im just glad I can say..
you dont see me acting like this in the forums (hehe) LOL
well who ever this is meant for should get the message...
if not--tattoo it on their forehead LOL  
later-evil-woman-gator..*winkie winkie*

Local Rebel
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since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia
7 posted 2000-09-25 03:22 PM


I can see it now... a whole new line of Hallmark breakup cards!!!!  perfect!  
CMGrimm
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since 2000-02-14
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USA
8 posted 2000-09-25 03:25 PM


lol...
JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
9 posted 2000-09-25 04:44 PM


Oh how I like reading this Marina..sometimes it hard to move on but when your ready you don't want anyone getting in your way...you did another one similar to this a ways back...yes...after you tell someone nicely and they don't get the message I guess its time to bring out the big guns...James
TerryW
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since 2000-03-23
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Louisville, Mississippi, USA
10 posted 2000-09-25 04:53 PM


Marina~
     Well, I don't think that message could be missed.     That was very clear and to the point.

(Just promise me this -- don't ever lst me get on the receiving side of one of those messages, ok???       )


Love Ya~
     Terry

~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

branden726
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since 2000-09-25
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Bay City, MI
11 posted 2000-09-25 05:32 PM


Hey i love the poem keep it up and i hope u did give this to the person u wrote it for if i was ever gave a poem like that i'd stay clear away  
Irie
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since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State
12 posted 2000-09-26 01:21 AM


Hey marina....
Seems I've read this once before, then again,
maybe it was just my own thoughts.  Hehe
Way to go girl.....tell 'em and tell 'em good!  



~Sheri

Temptress
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Mobile, AL
13 posted 2000-09-26 03:28 AM


LOL! I think this should do nicely as a wake up call!   Sometimes they just don't get it do they?

My name isn't Baby, and I don't want to cyber.

Temptress
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14 posted 2000-09-26 03:28 AM




[This message has been edited by Temptress (edited 09-26-2000).]

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
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In the winds of Cherokee song
15 posted 2000-09-26 04:04 AM


When one still "PLAYS" with hearts after all has been said and done then HELL is exactly where "his" soul should reside.

[This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 09-26-2000).]

Jon Mewett
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16 posted 2000-09-26 04:52 AM


The big guns are out.......some people just can't see the early warning shots I guess.


Strong stuff indeed

Jon

Marina
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Posts 2245
Pickering, Ontario
17 posted 2000-09-26 01:33 PM


Thank you to everyone!!!!    

I feel much better now....no really I do!!  LOL    

Marina


It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley



ggrn3
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since 2000-08-17
Posts 433
Nahunta Georgia U.S.
18 posted 2000-09-26 11:47 PM


Marina
  I just had to respond.  You expressed your feeling really well in this one.  You told him exactly how you felt and if he was close enough, you'd probably spank him w/ a belt.  You let him know that on the pass you did not want to dwell, so you told him exactly where to go, and that was directly to HELL.
                Do not pass GO
           Do not collect 200 dollars.

Garfield

Marina
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since 2000-02-10
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Pickering, Ontario
19 posted 2000-09-27 10:29 PM


Garfield, LOL......thank you very much!!!


Marina


It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley



Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
20 posted 2000-09-27 11:37 PM


~Marina
This was hillarious! You tell him how it is girlie...you have now given me the strength to tell someone in my life something along the same lines. thank you. great read~
amy  

"The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences"

Martinque
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21 posted 2000-09-28 11:49 AM


You go Girl!!!  LOL
Love the passion in this.

Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24
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Redlands,CA,USA
22 posted 2000-09-28 12:10 PM


There's something to be said for bluntness.  Nothing like being hit with a club to clear out the cobwebs.
Marina
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Pickering, Ontario
23 posted 2000-09-28 10:31 PM


Amy, thank you.  You go girl!!!  LOL  

Martinque, thank you very much for your reply.  

Andrew,thank you.  You know sometimes.......  well you know!     LOL

Marina


It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley



Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
24 posted 2000-09-28 10:43 PM


Some people need to be instructed ... after explanations bounce
Enjoyed

Parker
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ON
25 posted 2000-10-02 05:14 AM


Marina, so this title got my attention..... but after a few reads.... whats your point exactly?...  

James

Marina
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Pickering, Ontario
26 posted 2000-10-02 02:16 PM


Rex, thank you very much.  

Well James, you know me.......always beating around the bush!!    LOL  


Marina


It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley



Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
27 posted 2000-10-02 02:17 PM


What Bush??????/  Where.....does it need trimming.
Martie
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28 posted 2000-10-02 02:25 PM


Marina--You got the words alright...way to go!....
rosepetals25
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29 posted 2000-10-03 01:11 PM


Marina,

    How in the world did I miss this????  I loooved it! Full of attitude and spunk  

~~Tara aka rp25 :o)

LngJhnAg
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Posts 3508
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30 posted 2000-10-03 01:44 PM


Marina - this poem is worthy of response.  great sentiments here - expressed very forcibly.
susanbartee
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Channelview, TX USA
31 posted 2000-10-03 01:50 PM


Marina...couldn't have said it better myself.  I can totally relate.  Some people just don't get it.  You try to tell them nicely as to not hurt them, but finally you just have to S P E L L  it out for them. Great job.  

Love is only love, if you are loved in return!!

SEA
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with you
32 posted 2000-10-03 02:06 PM


Marina~ THIS ROCKS!!! -SEA
Gemini
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33 posted 2000-10-03 02:27 PM


Marina-I liked, have been there once or twice myself, you captured it.  Janet Marie-Glad you specified Gemini Shadows!, have thought about it, but never said it in this way, nicely put!
WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
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Illinois
34 posted 2000-10-03 02:59 PM


It seethes from the page! You tell em!
Sometimes ya just gotta be blunt!

<*\\\><

I know not what the future holds,
but I know Who holds the future.

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
35 posted 2000-10-03 05:03 PM


Marina,
blunt, brutal and totally awesome.
Be well
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Marina
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since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245
Pickering, Ontario
36 posted 2000-10-03 07:30 PM


I am amazed at the how many of you are posting to this poem and I am really getting a kick at of all of your comments!!!!  LOL  

Thanks to all of you again for letting me let off some steam!!!   lol       

Marina


It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley



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