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Very Last Dance
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Very Last Dance |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very Last Dance I wonder if she will ever let go of a five year relationship that's been over for two. And I wonder if it is really over til we both find Love with someone new. Yes I do believe our finest moments long ago passsed us by and for sure the time has come and gone to say the final goodbyes. You can rest assured no matter how hard you may wish or try I'm still not wanting to be your friend and will never again gaze softly into your eyes. I would have given my life to you but that was when I still believed your heart was true. I have no doubt we'll never work this out. So please try to see it my way and stay away. I refuse to waste one more minute of my life in this way. The truth is I'd rather try with someone new than risk another hearbreak with you. I gave you all those years to prove you could be mine in return you complained and critized me most all of the time. You came pretty close to destroying me until the yearning in my heart broke me free. And now you desire another chance! Well now I do declare it's time for you to contact Fred Astaire because we will never tango again absolutely or perchance. In case you don't know it that day has long since passed when we danced our very last dance. Jameslee@September25,2000 [This message has been edited by jmlee12345 (edited 09-26-2000).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
So vividly spoken, I thought you were talking to me Excellent writing, very smooth and natural Bravo! Liz |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
It is sad when someone you onced loved very deeply won't let go of the past. I know this feeling very well. But there comes a time when you just know it is over and you have " danced your last dance". Great writing here James. Well said. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
Your so right jmlee, keep to your heart that's where your brand new life starts, she tried to loose you but you've made it out and somewhere out there. There's someone who will love you the way you should be loved! I really liked this poem I agree with Elizabeth it's as if you were talking to me and I could hear you so clearly. [This message has been edited by Rosebud1229 (edited 09-25-2000).] |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
I feel the strength in you just POURING out of this. A very good write with a very clear mesaage......Enjoyed this much.  Jenn E |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Elizabeth, Marina, Rosebud and Jenn thank you very much...James |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
james this is another of your amazing poems, very well written. Such a great read, and you're quite right when someone won't let go it's always hard. Take care Marsha |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Marsha you are so nice to me....thank you....James |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
James...oh my friend what a powerful goodbye you have written here...would that I had your strength |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
I think fred only had eyes for Ginger..and as good as he could dance i think she probably loved another..enjoyed James.. ~Victoria~ fox trotting away haa.. A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
This is such a sad piece...James..it was very well done! Nathan |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Paula this strength came to me thru the passing of time and after much reflection and a strong desire not to be hurt anymore within the confines of this relationship...I had to accept the fact that I made a mistake...and it was very hard to let go of my feelings...this is a process that is hard to begin...but once the decision is finally made we receive the strength to make it thru...we always receive the strength...it is always waiting for us to grasp it... Victoria thank you for the wonderful commments and I would very much like to see your foxtrot...ha...James |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
You have expressed yourself very powerfully and very well here. "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Nicely done!!!!!!! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
James~ Wisdomed words are these - 'The truth is I'd rather try with someone new than risk another hearbreak with you.' The next dance begins when you are ready. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Thank you Eagle, vandana, and Marge. Yes Marge the next dance has already begun...with a new partner mind you...James |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
James~ I hear you on this one my friend......new dance~ new partner....Good for you! -SEA |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
jmlee, I understand exactly where you are coming from. Please though, if she did want a Very Last Dance, take it, you will almost certainly feel good within. "I would have given my life to you but that was when I still believed your heart was true". Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Thank you Sea and Daniel... Daniel my pain and anger tell me we have already danced our last dance and that is acceptable to me. As I journey down life's road I know my thoughts and my heart will change...so I am only speaking for today but tomorrow I will find where my heart has taken me...named my youngest son Daniel Nathanael...love the name Daniel...James |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
a goodbye is always sad, you spoke very clear and with a lot of strength,.... excellent penned (((warm hug)) Charisma |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Thank you Charisma...James |
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