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Wilfred Yeats
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0 posted 2000-09-24 11:53 PM


(Minor rewrite of a fantasy written last year)

     I am drenched
     Wet to the core
     Your words like humid heat
     Upon my mind and heart

     Visions of your love
     Your unabashed desire
     Matching mine so freely given
     Further fuel the raging fire
     Into a blast that matches
     Fatman or Little Boy's result

     Standing tall,
     Watching the seductive twinkle
     In your eyes
     Trembling, sweating, reaching
     Out to you
     As clasping fingers
     Merge hands tracing thighs'
     Sinews straining to desire

     Music strings
     Vibrating to passion's touch
     Heard in two hearts
     Now recumbent on the shore
     Toes teasing toes
     Hips meshed with hips
     Shadows in the full moon's
     Gentle light
     Roiling as a single shape
     Exchanging kisses
     Sparking flints on steel
     Steaming frothy waves
     Trying to cool
     The unquenchable pair

     Two voices clearing
     Different notes
     Create harmonics
     Above the reach of either

     Sung words subside to sighs
     Music of breaths
     Yielding to breaths
     Coruscating
     Like sparklers
     Desires are met, realized
     Zones redden, swell, flush
     Yield in symphonic notes
     Created by
     Full orchestras
     Playing a fevered score

     So the unresolved need
     Becomes fulfilled
     Ache falls prey
     To soaking rain
     Nourishing
     Two parched souls

     Two alien worlds
     Fall in orbit coinciding
     Dancing as music yields
     Wash through arroyos
     Waking dormant life
     Life erupts from cracked soil

     Strumming the pain with soft fingers
     Duet a balm bringing peace

     Whispered prayers that rose
     Heavenward
     Returned a bounteous reward

     It is your name

     Played it again
     And Again


~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning.

~ Billy Wilder

© Copyright 2000 Wilfred Yeats - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-09-25 12:10 PM


Gee, Bill, stop beating around the bush and tell her how you feel!   This is romantic writing at its finest, sir...
Temptress
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2 posted 2000-09-25 01:40 AM


Beauty is at its best when you pen words here.


My name isn't Baby, and I don't want to cyber.

Martie
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4 posted 2000-09-25 02:01 AM


Bill--This is so full of passion and longing..beautifully written and sensual...in other words...HOT!
Janet Marie
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5 posted 2000-09-25 03:26 AM


YOWZERS...this is hot stuff..
quite a fantasy sir...
now i think it will be all ours  
heres to making it come true..
powerful work ....
you wrote it so that it builds up the intensity which is way cool
take care
jm

Elizabeth Santos
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6 posted 2000-09-25 05:06 AM


Wonderfully written. You have a prolific and creative passionate pen, each poem is differently expressed. Just beautiful
Liz

Wilfred Yeats
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7 posted 2000-09-25 10:14 AM


'deer-

LOL - I DO love your subtlety - I think she's getting my message - my feeling are not purely intellectual - the good part is it is built on a great friendship

Temptress-

I'm glad you recognized how much I appreciate her in all her facets - Thank you

Martie-

When I am fantasizing - this kind of though almost always becomes a part of my dreaming -
I'm so glad you liked it Thank you

Janet M-

Making it come true - may take a lifetime - but I find it so powerful - My efforts will never abate - I'm glad you like the way I wrote it. Thank you

Liz-

As love and passion have many facets - Writing to them in their infinite variety becomes easier - I can only hope she loves my words as much as I love her.


~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning.

~ Billy Wilder

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8 posted 2000-09-25 10:22 AM


Why Mr. Yeats...did you have a very long weekend?...

look forward to when you post...they're always quite "the read"...

Chanson
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9 posted 2000-09-25 11:31 AM


A poem with music AND fireworks.
It doesn't get any better than this  

Enjoyed the display, Wil.
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...chanson~

Music, tonal clear & pure,
Caresses the harshest of curves.
-Song of Gesture



[This message has been edited by chansondegeste (edited 09-25-2000).]

Corazon
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10 posted 2000-09-25 11:35 AM


wow I echo all of the above, this is GREAT!
what a way to express your feelings  

Jenn E
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11 posted 2000-09-25 12:04 PM


This was so intense and full of passion.....I found myself reading faster and faster just to get to the end of it.
A very romatic write......and enjoyable read.

Jenn E

Wilfred Yeats
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12 posted 2000-09-25 02:02 PM


Karilea-

Actually - the weekend was filled with family - this was posted late at night with all asleep. ~S~ Thanks  

Chanson -

it's good without fireworks too ~G~ - thank you  

Corazon-
Yes sincere - only way to be - thank you

Jenn E -

(trying to imagine faster & faster ) ~G~

thanks

  




~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning.

~ Billy Wilder

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13 posted 2000-09-25 05:38 PM


oh dear lord, as I remember this....*g*

wonderful write bill...*S*

GE

Paula Finn
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14 posted 2000-09-28 04:13 PM


Sigh...I have so missed reading you...you know what your words do to this womans heart
Wilfred Yeats
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15 posted 2000-09-28 11:43 PM


Green Eyes -

I'm sincerely flattered you remember - never see you online any more - are you always in privacy? Thanks ~S~

Paula -

I'm glad My words please you ~WG~

Mark Bohannan
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16 posted 2000-09-28 11:46 PM


We shall just call you Mr. Bill the Commander of Hearts.  Excellent penning once again sir.
Wilfred Yeats
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17 posted 2000-09-29 08:27 AM


Mark-

OK - it is getting deep here - the roles will now reverse - the pot will call the kettle~S~
(thanks)

Kethry
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18 posted 2000-09-29 04:55 PM


You have, with this poem, earned the title of Wilfred the Great. Excellent and passionate work.
Keth.


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Wilfred Yeats
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19 posted 2000-09-29 11:32 PM


Kethry -

I'm not certain I want any such titles bestowed - I played "king of the hill" on snow piles too many times as a kid growing up in Buffalo's winters. but - thank you just the same

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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20 posted 2000-09-30 01:48 PM


Excellent!  I loved this one!

Wilfred Yeats
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21 posted 2000-09-30 02:00 PM


To recieve an 'excellent' from a PF poet of renown is high praise indeed thank you very much

~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning.

~ Billy Wilder

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