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Silver Shine You Were Mine

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SpitFire
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0 posted 09-24-2000 09:55 AM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for SpitFire

Silver Shine You Were Mine

Silver shine
you were mine when
meeting at the breaker
meant too many things.
When tangled tassles
blew from you and
smiles took a ride on
salted air wings.
You were mine then
and again in the snowy
pastures flat and full
of nature's pull and
simple sang through
mouths untied, I tried and
you flew with feathers
built of fear.
I never cared, for
tasteless times and
meaningless hours, for
happy showers of false.
I never ate the seeds on
hours latest trial
or swallowed fights
with fists of salt or sin.
You were mine on
yesterday's blanket
on rewindings of tomorrow's
day of things my way of
hammered prints in satin
tins in tastings of the day.
Silver shine,
you were mine then.



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Sunnyone
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1 posted 09-24-2000 10:00 AM       View Profile for Sunnyone   Email Sunnyone   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunnyone's Home Page   View IP for Sunnyone


Hi SF.....
           I loved it from beginning to end, but this phrase is still singing in my head:
  "you were mine on yesterday's blanket"
What a great line, one to think on.......
              This was a great read!!


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!


Kethry
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2 posted 09-24-2000 02:27 PM       View Profile for Kethry   Email Kethry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kethry

Fire
you outshine yourself.

Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song


3 posted 09-24-2000 02:30 PM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

You have forged yourself an armour of shining words in this piece.  Loved it all but expecially the following words.

I never cared, for
tasteless times and
meaningless hours, for
happy showers of false.
I never ate the seeds on
hours latest trial
or swallowed fights
with fists of salt or sin.
You were mine on
yesterday's blanket
on rewindings of tomorrow's
day of things my way of
hammered prints in satin
tins in tastings of the day.
Silver shine,
you were mine then.
Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 09-24-2000 02:33 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

SpitFire,
Enjoyed the read.
Lone Wolf
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5 posted 09-24-2000 02:40 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

SpitFire,

So good to see you my friend.  This was a wonderful piece.  So beautiful and your dear sweet heart shines through so bright.  Loved this one!!  

Lone Wolf


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats
EagleOne
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6 posted 09-24-2000 05:10 PM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

A great read! It made me think of some times long past.

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.
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7 posted 09-25-2000 12:37 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

SpitFire~
This is so pretty and wistful ...

'You were mine on
yesterday's blanket
on rewindings of tomorrow's
day of things my way of
hammered prints in satin
tins in tastings of the day.
Silver shine,
you were mine then.'


What lovely visuals you've captured and shared.
~*Marge*~


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tracie66
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8 posted 09-25-2000 02:06 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Hey little spitfire I's so pleased to see you to  
Well this piece of poetry from you is just awesome...what a great piece..well done
Love tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

redheart angrybraids
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9 posted 10-17-2006 09:22 AM       View Profile for redheart angrybraids   Email redheart angrybraids   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for redheart angrybraids

i love it, thank you.
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