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Alan
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since 2000-09-12
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right next door

0 posted 2000-09-24 12:45 PM


To touch your firm body
To caress your soft skin
To absorb the essence of you
To taste the moisture of your skin

To feel your skin under my touch
With it’s cool smoothness
To feel you quiver as I kiss your hips
To feel your warmth with my lips

To bite you
To taste your delectable juices
To feel them running down my chin
Is it a terrible sin

To kidnap you from your home
Just to make you mine
For just a few minutes of messy rapture
And just throw you away under an old pine

For one to make a feast
Out of a helpless piece
It never will end
So is the life of a peach


© Copyright 2000 Alan - All Rights Reserved
CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043

1 posted 2000-09-24 12:59 PM


Delicious and sensational...
Superb writing...

Coco

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
2 posted 2000-09-24 01:00 AM


Argh! Alan you were this close  [  ] to having this moved to Adult! LOL Very cute sir.  
Jenn E
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since 2000-08-02
Posts 589
Kelowna, BC, Canada
3 posted 2000-09-24 01:17 AM


LMAO!!!!!! I was thinkin..Ohhhh Boyyyyy this is good but mannn is he in trouble!! GREAT TWIST in the end...........PERFECT acually!!!!  I can't stop giggling here.......LOL......Man...I liked this......

LOL....maybe you should give the "Adult" section a try....you would be really good...  

Jenn E

Alan
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since 2000-09-12
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right next door
4 posted 2000-09-24 04:28 AM


Coco thank you

Poet DeVine......I will watch myself next time. Thank you for the warning.

Jenn E Thank you ...I had fun doing it..But how can I be in trouble over eating a peach? hehe As for the adult section I am in there somewhere.



brian madden
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ireland
5 posted 2000-09-24 07:43 AM


I don't really go for peaches, plums are quite nice fresh from the tree   but even though the last line ties the piece up it is too late for my mind...half way through the second verse my mind hopped into the adult forum, now where can I get a peach tree like that...*evil grin* Wonderful poem Alan, reading it made me hor... I mean...hungry.

"an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree
the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women".
Patti Smith

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
6 posted 2000-09-24 02:35 PM


Oh Alan, I was disappointed, I thought you were ... eating an apple. *Laughs* Great write.

Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

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