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Corinne
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0 posted 2000-09-23 03:00 PM




Crust of Moon

Labor of another day
Sunlight splashed room,
Insistent, inevitable
Like phases of the moon.
Bring on the buzz
Whirligig beetles in June.
Lunar vanishing
Sings a familiar tune.

Questions crystallize
In clouded mirrors of blue
Transported from fog
Waning does imbue.
Voices of the ancients
Whisper of taboo,
But demands of the day
Render thoughts untrue.

Only when the starlight
Catches the mind unaware
Truly know the distance
Between here and there.
The face collapses
No longer hiding despair.
Lay awake for tomorrow
Pretending not to care.

© 2000 Corinne Bailey


[This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 09-23-2000).]

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Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2000-09-23 03:05 PM


Very nice to see another one of yours pop up.  I love the way you ended this in it's final verse.  The whole piece is superb in flow and presentation.

Only when the starlight
Catches the mind unaware
Truly know the distance
Between here and there.
The face collapses
No longer hiding despair.
Lay awake for tomorrow
Pretending not to care.


Janet Marie
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2 posted 2000-09-23 03:31 PM


Questions crystallize
In clouded mirrors of blue
Transported from fog
Waning does imbue.
Voices of the ancients
Whisper of taboo,
But demands of the day
Render thoughts untrue.

Only when the starlight
Catches the mind unaware
Truly know the distance
Between here and there.
The face collapses
No longer hiding despair.
Lay awake for tomorrow
Pretending not to care.

==============
very COOL poem C,..
i love the title..
and the cryptic feel of this one ...
added to the unique imagery made for a
very pleasureful read..
way cool...way  
jm

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2000-09-23 03:42 PM


Corinne,
Beautiful work, enjoyed the read.

Corinne
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4 posted 2000-09-23 06:45 PM


Mark, you are too kind, thank you.

JM, thank you!  It was a response to another poem, kinda-sorta.

Thank you, Seymour!

Corinne

brian madden
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5 posted 2000-09-23 07:07 PM


Only when the starlight
Catches the mind unaware
Truly know the distance
Between here and there.
The face collapses
No longer hiding despair.
Lay awake for tomorrow
Pretending not to care.

Wow beautiful piece Corrine, I sense both great joy and sadness within the verse.

"an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree
the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women".
Patti Smith

Denise
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6 posted 2000-09-23 08:07 PM


Beautifully done, as always, Corinne!

Denise

Corinne
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7 posted 2000-09-23 10:19 PM


Thank you very much, Brian!

Denise, thanks!

Corinne

Balladeer
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8 posted 2000-09-23 11:05 PM


Nighttime can do that to one....great writing, Corinne
Marge Tindal
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9 posted 2000-09-24 08:29 AM


Corinne~
I saved this one for this morning -
The title is so intriguing -

'Lunar vanishing
Sings a familiar tune.'


What an interesting concept - 'Crust Of Moon'
Something in it speaks to me.
I'll have to figure out why.

I so enjoy reading you.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Corinne
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10 posted 2000-09-24 02:54 PM



Thank you, Balladeer!


Marge, you are too kind.  The feelin's mutal, poetress!

Corinne

Parker
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11 posted 2000-09-24 05:20 PM


Corinne, another wonderful piece by your amazing pen. Laced with creptic meanings..  


Parker

Sudhir Iyer
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12 posted 2000-10-16 10:23 AM


Beautiful work, Corinne...

Always a pleasure to read your works...

Regards,
Sudhir

Robert Joseph
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13 posted 2000-10-16 11:14 AM


Only when the starlight
Catches the mind unaware
Truly know the distance
Between here and there.
The face collapses
No longer hiding despair.
Lay awake for tomorrow
Pretending not to care

Corinne, I had reflections of days and nights passing in the phases of the moon, and the numerous thoughts that can sift through the soul. Very much enjoyed.

Robert Joseph

[This message has been edited by Robert Joseph (edited 10-16-2000).]

Alan
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14 posted 2000-10-16 11:43 AM


Very nice.  Great flow.  I enjoyed the read.
Wilfred Yeats
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15 posted 2000-10-16 12:11 PM


Everyone (nearly) has copied your last verse - so I won't altho I could  - You should know from this - the genius you exposed with it, and how many hearts and minds where you struck a familiar chord - myself included  
wayoutwalt
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16 posted 2000-10-16 12:40 PM


yuh moonbeam me up scotty this was great!
Victoria
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17 posted 2000-10-16 12:43 PM


love wayoutwalts response haa..nicely written..

                     ~Victoria~

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

ma miller
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18 posted 2000-10-16 01:19 PM


very nice read, Corinne ... ditto on the last verse
Elizabeth Santos
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19 posted 2000-10-16 01:38 PM


Very beautifully written verse
The title is enticing and the poem is captivating. And very unique. Well done
Liz

Corinne
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20 posted 2000-10-16 03:15 PM


Thank you all for your very sweet words.

Corinne

Irish Rose
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21 posted 2000-10-16 04:12 PM


Corinne,
Some really great phrasing in this one, great imagery too, I love the theme and the way you wove it altogether.


Kathleen



Elizabeth Cor
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Over the river and through the woods
22 posted 2000-10-16 06:17 PM


Corinne, Fabulous title. It's such a pleasure reading anything you post, every piece is so well written. I like this especially because of it's somber wistful undertones... just and overall wonderful piece. And I LOVE the last stanza.


~ Beth

Corinne
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23 posted 2000-10-17 08:12 AM


Thank you, Irish Rose and Elizabeth Cor!

Corinne

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