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Corazon
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since 2000-02-02
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0 posted 2000-09-23 01:13 PM




conscientious people don't like
being late for work
I know, I know what's a few minutes here
a few minutes there
but for me, I can't help it,
it upsets the whole day
when I am twenty minutes late
its like the wheels of time
slipped forward a cog
no longer matching
they grind and slip
and the day is forever changed
but I have found a way to fix it
and the gears slip nicely back into place
I just plan to end my day
twenty minutes late.
Its the same way with my life
without you
my heart slips and catches
and the days don't slip easily
into the nights
nothing goes right anymore
everything I do is a cog or
maybe even two
off
but for this
I haven't found a fix
how do I compensate time
for your leaving
so I won't miss you
so much?

© Copyright 2000 zoe d. - All Rights Reserved
Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
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In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2000-09-23 03:28 PM


I don't know that there is a way to compensate for that time other than expending more time to heal.  Sort of a catch 22 in that one.  Your penning is so brilliant in this piece.
Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
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Tamarac Fla
2 posted 2000-09-23 03:46 PM


Corazon,
And the answer is put it in its place like everything else. Enjoyed the poem.

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Listening to every heart
3 posted 2000-09-23 10:24 PM


AHA! Now I know why my job at 8:00 gets me there at 7:00...

Karilea
When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


Corazon
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4 posted 2000-09-25 09:15 AM


thank you so much, I stay awake at night writing these, and then almost forget that I posted them, and so to come in and see your comments is a smile for sure  
suthern
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5 posted 2000-09-25 10:06 AM


The last 4 lines are a complete poem... If you learn the answer, please share it! *S* This is great!
Wilfred Yeats
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since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704
Wilmington, Delaware
6 posted 2000-09-25 10:32 AM


I love the way you went about expressing these thoughts - For me it was like coming around a corner in a desolate area to find a garden - and once more I echo suthern's words
LngJhnAg
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since 1999-07-23
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Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion
7 posted 2000-09-26 01:02 PM


Corazon... here's a suggestion - try spending time with Toerag or Balladeer - they'll make it seem like hours and hours in just a few minutes.  If you spend enough minutes with them, you can get a whole day out of it.
Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
8 posted 2000-09-26 04:42 PM


Corazon,
some days are like that disjointed and out of whack what can you do, but see it through
if that doesn't work change your tack.
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

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