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StarPryncess17
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ALONE

There was a time when I was innocent
There was a time when you really did care
I never questioned your love, I wouldnít dare
The pain in my eyes you couldnít see,
I thought it was ok, you didnít know what you were doing to me
You didnít know the pain I had to bare
I sat by myself, with a feeling all too rare
There was no one to tell me it would all be fine
And there was no one to listen and just be kind
I was alone and no one could fill the empty space;
The space inside that once held a love so strong,
Now just faded like an old, played out song.
You told me you loved me, you told me that you cared.
And now I see that you only lied, and here I sit, alone and scared.


~*~This poemwas written for my dad, who has in the last couple of months turned my life upside down. I would like to hear what everyone thinks. Thanks! ~*~
© Copyright 2000 Jessica Lynn - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 06-10-2000 03:35 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Star~
Sad, but honest emotions.
~*Marge*~


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Little_Spyro
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2 posted 06-10-2000 04:14 PM       View Profile for Little_Spyro   Email Little_Spyro   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Little_Spyro

Yeah, kinda downbeat...but that's not what matters, this is a beautiful piece of work, Pryncess!  

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I don't really understand this poem...but it is an excellent display of your emotions..it brings thoughts to my mind of my exwife's estrangement from her father and my poor relationship with my father expecially for the last three years of his life when I moved to Europe and wouldn't communicate with him.   James
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4 posted 06-10-2000 04:32 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

Jessica~
oh how i can relate to this poem,
sadly enough. my father and i have
always been so close, but lately
all we do is fight. i hate it. i am
growing up now (23 yrs old) and he
is having a very hard time letting go,
yet at the same time is almost pushing
me out the door. it has left me feeling
very confused because this is a hard
enough time in my life as it is. the one
good thing about my dad and i though is
we are able to communicate. i liked this
poem quite a bit even if it was pretty
melancholy. my advice to you is to sit down
with your dad and have a real heart to
heart with him. you'd be suprised at what
it can do and what possible new doors
it might open.
take care.
amy  


†"Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."





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StarPryncess17
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Thank all of you for your advice!

Marge~definately depressing I must say. but what can I say it's what I felt when I sat down and wrote it...thanks for your reply.

Spyro~all I can say is THANK YOU!! it makes me feel a lot better about my work!

James~this is about how my father and I used top be very close, but then he chose his girlfriend over me. before my parents got divorced my father and I were best friends until they got divorced, then that one word tore my whole world apart. and the rare feeling, well let's just leave it at the fact that it was a desperate attempt to stop my problems in life.(which I regret VERY deeply) :0 thanks for your reply!

Amy~THANK YOU for understanding!!!!! Not many people do. My heart is very empty. my father and I stayed close for a while after they got divorced, however then he met his girlfriend when I was probably 10 or so and well, let's just say he had a choice and he chose her. I would never ask him to chose but she did (and it was b/c I hated her for reasons we'll just leave unknown and I didn't want to be around her, so she said it's jess or me) He broke my little heart and I didn't know what to do. as a 15 year old girl I was sooooo lost and confused that was when I wrote this and now that I look back I see that the ulcer I received from it all wasn't worth it. thanks for understanding!

Love you all~Jessica~



 "Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves."
"Bleeding hearts release tears of fire"
"work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last"
 
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