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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
ALONE There was a time when I was innocent There was a time when you really did care I never questioned your love, I wouldn’t dare The pain in my eyes you couldn’t see, I thought it was ok, you didn’t know what you were doing to me You didn’t know the pain I had to bare I sat by myself, with a feeling all too rare There was no one to tell me it would all be fine And there was no one to listen and just be kind I was alone and no one could fill the empty space; The space inside that once held a love so strong, Now just faded like an old, played out song. You told me you loved me, you told me that you cared. And now I see that you only lied, and here I sit, alone and scared. ~*~This poemwas written for my dad, who has in the last couple of months turned my life upside down. I would like to hear what everyone thinks. Thanks! ~*~ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Star~ Sad, but honest emotions. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Yeah, kinda downbeat...but that's not what matters, this is a beautiful piece of work, Pryncess!  Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I don't really understand this poem...but it is an excellent display of your emotions..it brings thoughts to my mind of my exwife's estrangement from her father and my poor relationship with my father expecially for the last three years of his life when I moved to Europe and wouldn't communicate with him. James |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Jessica~ oh how i can relate to this poem, sadly enough. my father and i have always been so close, but lately all we do is fight. i hate it. i am growing up now (23 yrs old) and he is having a very hard time letting go, yet at the same time is almost pushing me out the door. it has left me feeling very confused because this is a hard enough time in my life as it is. the one good thing about my dad and i though is we are able to communicate. i liked this poem quite a bit even if it was pretty melancholy. my advice to you is to sit down with your dad and have a real heart to heart with him. you'd be suprised at what it can do and what possible new doors it might open. take care. amy  < !signature-->"Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." [This message has been edited by Aimster (edited 06-10-2000).] |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Thank all of you for your advice! Marge~definately depressing I must say. but what can I say it's what I felt when I sat down and wrote it...thanks for your reply. Spyro~all I can say is THANK YOU!! it makes me feel a lot better about my work! James~this is about how my father and I used top be very close, but then he chose his girlfriend over me. before my parents got divorced my father and I were best friends until they got divorced, then that one word tore my whole world apart. and the rare feeling, well let's just leave it at the fact that it was a desperate attempt to stop my problems in life.(which I regret VERY deeply) :0 thanks for your reply! Amy~THANK YOU for understanding!!!!! Not many people do. My heart is very empty. my father and I stayed close for a while after they got divorced, however then he met his girlfriend when I was probably 10 or so and well, let's just say he had a choice and he chose her. I would never ask him to chose but she did (and it was b/c I hated her for reasons we'll just leave unknown and I didn't want to be around her, so she said it's jess or me) He broke my little heart and I didn't know what to do. as a 15 year old girl I was sooooo lost and confused that was when I wrote this and now that I look back I see that the ulcer I received from it all wasn't worth it. thanks for understanding! Love you all~Jessica~ "Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves." "Bleeding hearts release tears of fire" "work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last" |
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