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Severn
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0 posted 06-09-2000 10:51 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn

It is remarkable

     and you

I catch that word
turn it inside

     shivered out

and I have scuffed the fallen leaves
stared at the sky darkly covered
with clouds of my own mind

    wandered wondering
    where
    it is I am

felt the dirt beneath me
like my soul

     a fitting emptiness I see
     all around

so many faces
revolve my edges
unknowing
they canít see the sunlit air
as I

     you stand
     occupying spaces
     I familiarised long ago

it is remarkable
it is floodly fallen

     a dream

to here I will run
and the wind will bend
an open sky
might carry me

     it is the beat
     of one day

soon I say
when next to the space of years

   it is release
   relived
  
and relieved



 'One day maybe you will see the land
Touch skin with sand
You've been swimming in the lonely sea
With no company

Oh, don't you want to find?
Can't you hear this beauty in life?
The roads, the highs, breaking up your life
Can't you hear this beauty in life?'

~The Verve~

© Copyright 2000 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


1 posted 06-09-2000 11:03 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

"when next to the space of years"

Yes. A lot of tiem related subjects here lately. Interesting to say the least. This line K., (and of course I loved all of them) caught me up. It shows in one breath the virulence of relativity. When a space of an instant is shadowed by the whisper of a decade, that instant seems not so deafening anymore, not so heavy.

Much to ponder here little butterfly. And I will of course, because your words always do that to me!
Janet Marie
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since 01-22-2000
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2 posted 06-09-2000 11:30 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

HI BUTTERFLY SLIPPERS ICON SHARER  

what is remarkable is this poem...
its presentation is perfect
and its emotions
are pure and hauntingly beautiful
excellent writing Kam,
truly effecting words
later-slipper-gator
jm

 I think I could need - this in my life
I think I'm just scared - that I know too much
I can't relate and that's a problem
I'm feeling ...
If you're gone - maybe it's time to go home
There's an awful lot of breathing room
But I can hardly move
If you're gone - baby you need to come home
cuz there's a little bit of something me...
In everything in you.
~MB20~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~

netswan
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since 03-28-2000
Posts 1395
Washington


3 posted 06-09-2000 11:38 PM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

This is lovely and has great imaginary
imagery

~netswan
Balladeer
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4 posted 06-09-2000 11:46 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

You certainly do know how to set a mood, Kamla....another exquisite piece  
serenity blaze
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5 posted 06-10-2000 12:45 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Wow...understated and powerful at the same time....like "floodly fallen"....mmmm...
reads like a feather and hits with a bang...
"remarkable"  yerself, here...
Dark Angel
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since 08-04-99
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6 posted 06-10-2000 12:42 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Kamla, both this poem and yourself are remarkable!!!    

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)


brian madden
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since 05-06-2000
Posts 4532
ireland


7 posted 06-10-2000 12:51 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

I read this twice, each time I was left shunned.

you stand
     occupying spaces
     I familiarised long ago

it is remarkable
it is floodly fallen

a wonderful poem, great atmosphere.    


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"I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Libraries gave us power
Then work came and made us free
What price now for a shallow piece of dignity"
Nicky Wire, A design for Life.

manic street preachers
"Outside open mouthed crowds Pass each other as if they're drugged
Down pale corridors of routine Where life falls unatoned "

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.



Marge Tindal
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8 posted 06-10-2000 04:47 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Kamla~
Absolute beauty in your words.
Gifted you are.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Trew
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since 06-10-2000
Posts 371
Ottawa, Canada


9 posted 06-10-2000 05:02 PM       View Profile for Trew   Email Trew   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Trew

There are just so many images.
Beautifully sculpted.
Especially fond of "felt the dirt beneath me like my soul".
Just great...
 
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