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nando
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since 2000-06-09
Posts 87
Vaxjo, Smaland, Sweden

0 posted 2000-06-09 05:43 PM


Eternal

"The all of this life
The everything of me
The touch of my wife
When she´s touching me
The beauty of youth
The wisdom of age
Sharing it all on this lifetime-stage


The promises made
The thrill of the new
The outside will fade
Like fresh fallen dew
But hear as I say
That I cherish this fall
I see inside now, loving it all"

Well I actually posted this in Svens reply, but I´ll put it out "for real" so my contribution is fulfilled...Well, for the moment anyway...

A short but powerful dedication to the one I hope I will spend the rest of my life with....

-nando-



 Ask me how to live your life, and this to you I´ll say: make your choises true and wise, so that when tomorrow will arise, you´ll smile at yesterday...

© Copyright 2000 Robert Hafredal - All Rights Reserved
Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
1 posted 2000-06-09 05:48 PM


nando,
Love is expressed in a very solemn way, in a very brilliant way too...

Join the band-wagon  
We are into grand wooing of the maidens here....gosh there is a wicked metal band called IRON MAIDEN ... LOL

Sven here comes another knight with a shiny armour, where are you????

Regards to you nando,
Sudhir

 My heart is pounding, my stomach's inside out
I'm feeling kind-a-shaky, my mind is full of doubt
All I ever think about, is fearing fear itself,
Wish I could unscrew my head and put it on the shelf
Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight,
Don't know what I'm looking at, the lights are all too bright
My brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor
Sweep 'em up. Throw 'em away, don't want 'em anymore
Clouds race across the sky, day turns into night,
Still there are the questions, no answers in sight
Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight,
Starin' out the window, everything is just too bright
Brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor,
Wish I could unscrew my head, and kick it out the door...
You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange
You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange

~ Strange ~ Joe Satriani (Flying in a Blue Dream)

nando
Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 87
Vaxjo, Smaland, Sweden
2 posted 2000-06-10 06:28 AM


Thanx Sudhir, you make my day...

i salute thee...

-nando-


 Ask me how to live your life, and this to you I´ll say: make your choises true and wise, so that when tomorrow will arise, you´ll smile at yesterday...

A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart
3 posted 2000-06-10 06:48 AM


beautiful words, a knight who loves the inside..for the outside will fade away, strong words of wisdom and truth! nando...  Welcome to passions!

[This message has been edited by A Romantic Heart (edited 06-10-2000).]

nando
Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 87
Vaxjo, Smaland, Sweden
4 posted 2000-06-10 10:52 AM


Thank you "A Romantic Heart"

Sometimes I wonder whether life, or at least love, would be more fair if everyone was blind...

I Appretiate your point of view, and hope you will comment on my poems in the future too, I´m really wery NEW here...

THANX
-nando-


 Ask me how to live your life, and this to you I´ll say: make your choises true and wise, so that when tomorrow will arise, you´ll smile at yesterday...

Sven
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since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
5 posted 2000-06-10 12:07 PM


Welcome Brave Knight Nando from the land to the North
We are glad to have you along as we ventrue forth!
This joust welcomes all Knights who pursue Romance
For we know that it's worth just one chance.

Thy poem has spoken of many a Brave Knights dream
To pledge himself to one that he would call his Queen
To take her in his arms and hold her for all time
Is a dream for which all Knights surely do pine. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


brian madden
Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
6 posted 2000-06-10 02:05 PM


A wonderful and lovely poem.
very romantic.

The promises made
The thrill of the new
The outside will fade
Like fresh fallen dew



 ------------------------
"I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Libraries gave us power
Then work came and made us free
What price now for a shallow piece of dignity"
Nicky Wire, A design for Life.

manic street preachers
"Outside open mouthed crowds Pass each other as if they're drugged
Down pale corridors of routine Where life falls unatoned "

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.




nando
Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 87
Vaxjo, Smaland, Sweden
7 posted 2000-06-10 06:03 PM


Thanx

Sven: your poetic abilities amaze me, thank you for your "reply-poem"

Brian: Thanx for comments and the extra verse you added, we could be a team

-nando-


 Ask me how to live your life, and this to you I´ll say: make your choises true and wise, so that when tomorrow will arise, you´ll smile at yesterday...

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
8 posted 2000-06-12 05:54 PM


Magnificant writing...love the flow, the romance, the hope, and the beauty of this. James
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