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A Chill
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A Chill |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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A Chill In near silence Save the creaking Of rotting wood, The fog enshrouded boat Lists, drifts, No wind to fill up her sails, A single lantern swings, A lone sailor on watch, No fog horn to his aid. Taking on water, she is, And unbeknownst to him, A face, a silhouette, has come aboard for deliverance. It must carry for miles, The screaming. Now the seagulls Cover him, Swooping, Cawing Devouring. By the time he is found Putrefying, Unidentifiable Fish food, He who delivered Sails solo, Hungry again, Searching lonely seas, In Alaskan channels, Where man Befriends Man. © 2000 Corinne Bailey All Rights Reserved |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ship-wrecked sailor, seeing life's deathly trailor, Woes spread, tragedy unfathomed, desolate dread, Lonely, battered, Former fighter, Devoured baiter. Many a ship's battle he fought, Now, its all come to naught, All his glory is now laid waste, Sea-gulls, vultures, suck life post-haste. Busy-bodies from far and yonder, Even sharks stay, await in wonder, The solo musical performance of death, Alaskan melancholy, frost-bites, a sorrowful wreath... ........... Corinne, just see what you have inspired... Never in this life had I imagined to write this one, and words just flowed right to the last word, is it good, maybe yes, maybe not, but then I don't care much, for I have seen a brilliant piece of poetry in front of me here.... Thanks for this one, Corinne... Take Care and regards, Sudhir. < !signature--> My heart is pounding, my stomach's inside out I'm feeling kind-a-shaky, my mind is full of doubt All I ever think about, is fearing fear itself, Wish I could unscrew my head and put it on the shelf Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight, Don't know what I'm looking at, the lights are all too bright My brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor Sweep 'em up. Throw 'em away, don't want 'em anymore Clouds race across the sky, day turns into night, Still there are the questions, no answers in sight Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight, Starin' out the window, everything is just too bright Brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor, Wish I could unscrew my head, and kick it out the door... You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange ~ Strange ~ Joe Satriani (Flying in a Blue Dream) [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 06-09-2000).] |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
OKay.......I got the chills.....hehe I got to stay away from the water  I like this very much It takes only a minute to get a crush on someone, an hour to like someone, a day to love someone, but it takes a lifetime to forget someone. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Sudhir! If I've inspired you, then it was worth writing. I think we should write about all kinds of topics, even those that are foreign to us, even if it makes us uncomfortable to do so. Thanks again for your sweet words, and I loved you poem, post it separately, too, to make sure everyone here sees it, okay? Thank you also, First_Knight! Corinne [This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 06-09-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Lady Corinne, Glad you liked my bit, your wish is my command... regards great poetess of much acclaim, sudhir |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corinne, you'd better stop reading those scary books. Your going to scare us out of our poetry shorts.... Great chills batman, this lady go me willy..lol parker |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Incredible! That something so streamlined could generate so many images for me. Very powerful and haunting. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
That one sent a shiver straight down my spine, very haunting. I am going to crawl under the table now and picture pretty things like sunsets and rabbits. A wonderful poem, intense and haunting. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers "Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany Culture, alienation, boredom and despair" "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Remind me not to piss you off, okay?---hey I'm smiling over here....I like your style... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ I agree with your idea of exploring .... and you're quite the navigator ! Enjoyed the image in this one. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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shilpi Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 73 |
Corinne, I have been directed by Sudhir to read yours first....and boy, am I glad I did that!! Its a wonderful one, the picture was so vivid and chilling ..... shilpi |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Quite a tale you wove!! To put so much life into so few words!! This tale would have taken me pages...thus loosing much, You sailed strong with this!! Thank you for sharing it |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Sudhir, just glad to see such a lovely response to yours, my friend! Parker, lol - what does "this lady go my willy" mean? Thank you, Trew, very kind words! Brian, didn't mean to scare ya, ok, I did! And thanks, btw! Serenity, aye, me matey! Marge, Shilpi and Butterfly, thank you! |
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