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A Chill

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Corinne
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0 posted 06-09-2000 05:03 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Corinne

A Chill

In near silence
Save the creaking
Of rotting wood,
The fog enshrouded boat
Lists, drifts,
No wind to fill up her sails,
A single lantern swings,
A lone sailor on watch,
No fog horn to his aid.

Taking on water, she is,
And unbeknownst to him,
A face, a silhouette,
has come aboard
for deliverance.

It must carry for miles,
The screaming.

Now the seagulls
Cover him,
Swooping,
Cawing
Devouring.

By the time he is found
Putrefying,
Unidentifiable
Fish food,
He who delivered
Sails solo,
Hungry again,
Searching lonely seas,
In Alaskan channels,
Where man
Befriends
Man.

© 2000 Corinne Bailey
All Rights Reserved


© Copyright 2000 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
Sudhir Iyer
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1 posted 06-09-2000 05:14 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Ship-wrecked sailor,
seeing life's deathly trailor,
Woes spread,  
tragedy unfathomed,
desolate dread,
Lonely, battered,
Former fighter,
Devoured baiter.

Many a ship's battle he fought,
Now, its all come to naught,
All his glory is now laid waste,
Sea-gulls, vultures, suck life post-haste.

Busy-bodies from far and yonder,
Even sharks stay, await in wonder,
The solo musical performance of death,
Alaskan melancholy, frost-bites, a sorrowful wreath...

...........

Corinne, just see what you have inspired...
Never in this life had I imagined to write this one, and words just flowed right to the last word, is it good, maybe yes, maybe not, but then I don't care much, for I have seen a brilliant piece of poetry in front of me here....
Thanks for this one, Corinne...

Take Care and regards,
Sudhir.


 My heart is pounding, my stomach's inside out
I'm feeling kind-a-shaky, my mind is full of doubt
All I ever think about, is fearing fear itself,
Wish I could unscrew my head and put it on the shelf
Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight,
Don't know what I'm looking at, the lights are all too bright
My brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor
Sweep 'em up. Throw 'em away, don't want 'em anymore
Clouds race across the sky, day turns into night,
Still there are the questions, no answers in sight
Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight,
Starin' out the window, everything is just too bright
Brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor,
Wish I could unscrew my head, and kick it out the door...
You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange
You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange

~ Strange ~ Joe Satriani (Flying in a Blue Dream)


[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 06-09-2000).]
First__Knight
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2 posted 06-09-2000 05:36 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

OKay.......I got the chills.....hehe  I got to stay away from the water    I like this very much  

 It takes only a minute to get a crush on someone, an hour to like someone, a day to love someone, but it takes a lifetime to forget someone.

Corinne
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3 posted 06-09-2000 05:39 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Thank you, Sudhir!  If I've inspired you, then it was worth writing.  I think we should write about all kinds of topics, even those that are foreign to us, even if it makes us uncomfortable to do so.

Thanks again for your sweet words, and I loved you poem, post it separately, too, to make sure everyone here sees it, okay?


Thank you also, First_Knight!

Corinne

[This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 06-09-2000).]
Sudhir Iyer
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4 posted 06-09-2000 05:40 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Lady Corinne,
Glad you liked my bit, your wish is my command...
regards great poetess of much acclaim,
sudhir
Parker
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... the old black rum


5 posted 06-10-2000 01:27 AM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Corinne, you'd better stop reading those scary books. Your going to scare us out of our poetry shorts....

Great chills batman, this lady go me willy..lol

parker
Trew
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6 posted 06-10-2000 05:50 AM       View Profile for Trew   Email Trew   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Trew

Incredible! That something so streamlined could generate so many images for me.  Very powerful and haunting.
brian madden
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7 posted 06-10-2000 06:01 AM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

That one sent a shiver straight down my spine, very haunting. I am going to crawl under the table now and picture pretty things like sunsets and rabbits.

A wonderful poem, intense and haunting.



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"I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Libraries gave us power
Then work came and made us free
What price now for a shallow piece of dignity"
Nicky Wire, A design for Life.

manic street preachers
"Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany
Culture, alienation, boredom and despair"

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.


serenity blaze
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8 posted 06-10-2000 06:26 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Remind me not to piss you off, okay?---hey I'm smiling over here....I like your style...
Marge Tindal
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9 posted 06-10-2000 07:38 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Corinne~
I agree with your idea of exploring ....
and you're quite the navigator !
Enjoyed the image in this one.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

shilpi
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10 posted 06-10-2000 08:14 AM       View Profile for shilpi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for shilpi

Corinne, I have been directed by Sudhir to read yours first....and boy, am I glad I did that!!

Its a wonderful one, the picture was so vivid and chilling .....

shilpi
Butterflies_dont_cry
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11 posted 06-10-2000 08:20 AM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Quite a tale you wove!!  To put so much life into so few words!! This tale would have taken me pages...thus loosing much, You sailed strong with this!! Thank you for sharing it  
Corinne
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12 posted 06-10-2000 10:35 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Sudhir, just glad to see such a lovely response to yours, my friend!

Parker, lol - what does "this lady go my willy" mean?

Thank you, Trew, very kind words!

Brian, didn't mean to scare ya, ok, I did! And thanks, btw!

Serenity, aye, me matey!

Marge, Shilpi and Butterfly, thank you!


 
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