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Master
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0 posted 2000-06-09 04:09 PM


Forgive me Love for this disgrace
The love I feel is just unheard of
The way I love makes lovers sort of
Appear as lacking love and taste

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amazon_lover
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1 posted 2000-06-09 04:55 PM


love lacks taste and love.. strange isn't ..i guess its not a disgrace..may be it lacks vivacity..but still there's love..thats not a disgrace..

Sincerely
A_L

Sudhir Iyer
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2 posted 2000-06-09 04:59 PM


Love hath no disgrace,
Only abound is grace...

Love hath various forms,
Maybe yours is just not one of the norms...

Master, but you do love many a soul,
That serves love's purpose, life's goal.

Regards, sudhir...

 My heart is pounding, my stomach's inside out
I'm feeling kind-a-shaky, my mind is full of doubt
All I ever think about, is fearing fear itself,
Wish I could unscrew my head and put it on the shelf
Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight,
Don't know what I'm looking at, the lights are all too bright
My brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor
Sweep 'em up. Throw 'em away, don't want 'em anymore
Clouds race across the sky, day turns into night,
Still there are the questions, no answers in sight
Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight,
Starin' out the window, everything is just too bright
Brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor,
Wish I could unscrew my head, and kick it out the door...
You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange
You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange

~ Strange ~ Joe Satriani (Flying in a Blue Dream)

Master
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3 posted 2000-06-09 07:40 PM


You've missed the point, try to read it again!
Tennessee Angel
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4 posted 2000-06-09 08:00 PM


I'm not too proud to say that I don't get it at all, Master.  I really like it...I just don't get it.  

 "That man has shown himself great who has never grieved in evil days and never bewailed his destiny." --Seneca

Master
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5 posted 2000-06-09 09:03 PM


It's quiete simple,

Forgive me Love for this disgrace --
the capital "L" suggests that I'm addressing the feeling of love, not just my love but love in general.

The love I feel is just unheard of --
self-explanatory

The way I love makes lovers sort of
Appear as lacking love and taste... --
"Compared to the love I feel, other lovers seem to lack true love... My love disgraces other loves..."


My explanation sounds corny, just try to read it over, maybe you'll see what I mean.

[This message has been edited by Master (edited 06-09-2000).]

Sven
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6 posted 2000-06-10 01:55 AM


Master,
       this poem indeed shows us your heart. . . and the depth of love that you feel. . . it's an excellent response to the challenge. . .

You have done well here Brave Knight. . . well done indeed. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Master
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7 posted 2000-06-10 03:00 PM


Thank you Sven and great challenge!
Corinne
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state of confusion
8 posted 2000-06-10 07:39 PM


I got it, Master, sans explanation.

And it says more to me than all the other "who's hot" poems I've read of late here.

Also, the fact that you said it so succinctly, a sign of true talent.

Corinne

Master
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9 posted 2000-06-10 09:09 PM


Thank you Corinne, it wasn't too confusing was it?
X Angel
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10 posted 2000-06-11 12:40 PM


I got it BEFORE I read the other explanations! Great Poem Master!
~Heather

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