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Master
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0 posted 06-09-2000 04:09 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Forgive me Love for this disgrace
The love I feel is just unheard of
The way I love makes lovers sort of
Appear as lacking love and taste
© Copyright 2000 Andrey Kneller - All Rights Reserved
amazon_lover
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1 posted 06-09-2000 04:55 PM       View Profile for amazon_lover   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for amazon_lover

love lacks taste and love.. strange isn't ..i guess its not a disgrace..may be it lacks vivacity..but still there's love..thats not a disgrace..

Sincerely
A_L
Sudhir Iyer
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2 posted 06-09-2000 04:59 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Love hath no disgrace,
Only abound is grace...

Love hath various forms,
Maybe yours is just not one of the norms...

Master, but you do love many a soul,
That serves love's purpose, life's goal.

Regards, sudhir...

 My heart is pounding, my stomach's inside out
I'm feeling kind-a-shaky, my mind is full of doubt
All I ever think about, is fearing fear itself,
Wish I could unscrew my head and put it on the shelf
Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight,
Don't know what I'm looking at, the lights are all too bright
My brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor
Sweep 'em up. Throw 'em away, don't want 'em anymore
Clouds race across the sky, day turns into night,
Still there are the questions, no answers in sight
Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight,
Starin' out the window, everything is just too bright
Brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor,
Wish I could unscrew my head, and kick it out the door...
You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange
You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange

~ Strange ~ Joe Satriani (Flying in a Blue Dream)
Master
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3 posted 06-09-2000 07:40 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

You've missed the point, try to read it again!
Tennessee Angel
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4 posted 06-09-2000 08:00 PM       View Profile for Tennessee Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tennessee Angel

I'm not too proud to say that I don't get it at all, Master.  I really like it...I just don't get it.  

 "That man has shown himself great who has never grieved in evil days and never bewailed his destiny." --Seneca
Master
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5 posted 06-09-2000 09:03 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

It's quiete simple,

Forgive me Love for this disgrace --
the capital "L" suggests that I'm addressing the feeling of love, not just my love but love in general.

The love I feel is just unheard of --
self-explanatory

The way I love makes lovers sort of
Appear as lacking love and taste... --
"Compared to the love I feel, other lovers seem to lack true love... My love disgraces other loves..."


My explanation sounds corny, just try to read it over, maybe you'll see what I mean.

[This message has been edited by Master (edited 06-09-2000).]
Sven
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6 posted 06-10-2000 01:55 AM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Master,
       this poem indeed shows us your heart. . . and the depth of love that you feel. . . it's an excellent response to the challenge. . .

You have done well here Brave Knight. . . well done indeed. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Master
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7 posted 06-10-2000 03:00 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thank you Sven and great challenge!
Corinne
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8 posted 06-10-2000 07:39 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

I got it, Master, sans explanation.

And it says more to me than all the other "who's hot" poems I've read of late here.

Also, the fact that you said it so succinctly, a sign of true talent.

Corinne
Master
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9 posted 06-10-2000 09:09 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thank you Corinne, it wasn't too confusing was it?
X Angel
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10 posted 06-11-2000 12:40 AM       View Profile for X Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for X Angel

I got it BEFORE I read the other explanations! Great Poem Master!
~Heather
 
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