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A lover pleading, "Please say Yes" (For Sven's love poem challenge -Attempt #2)

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Sudhir Iyer
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0 posted 06-09-2000 01:20 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

I was deciding whether to post this for the Sven's challenge or not. I thought might be unfair if I post 2 for the challenge. So a gentlemanly gesture from this obnoxious, rustic one, I submit this one as a tribute to love...

May the romance sparkle tender dazzlers in each heart, kindling in a way that makes loving souls shine ...


A lover pleading, "Please say Yes"
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Eyes sparkle like stars, I see at night,
So sweet are they, I think I might
fall in love while, I fight what's true,
Night or day all I see, in my eyes, is you.

Early dawn or dusky sunsets fine
lilting shades of vermilion in the sky,
So bright does your face shine,
I wish, with coupled wings, we could fly

Waiting here to hear a 'yes' from you
I ask from you nothing more
Than to return the love that I offer you
Needing love's reassurance, nothing more

~

Tender skin so smooth like the velvet skies,
To touch it before I hear 'yes', I am afraid,
Might ruin the texture, bringing tears in my eyes
This silken skin, I will caress, if the light moves to green from red

Assure you this love shall live
Till the sun and moon combine,
For my love is much too strong and divine,
To you, all I have, my heart, my soul, I will give

If you later may betray me, leaving me alone,
Be sure that still this love will never be gone,
'Cause I will remain of no one else but you
Forever, my heart will always belong to you.

~

From you, all I wish to hear tonight is "I love you"
If I don't hear these words, 'tis true,
I shall be left in the cold, lonely and blue,
To see then the colour in my eyes, you shall have to say, "I love you".

The evening breeze blows, fate's
whispering your pleasant name,
While this heart eagerly anticipates, waits
A desperate soul says 'its high time you came'.

For that I love you, nature is to blame
Not my fault, that you were made this way,
Tender at heart, beautiful in soul, a rousing flame
Sunrise or sunset, the brilliance in any dazzling ray.

~

Though 'love is blind' I've heard them say,
The love that I have for you can be easily seen
that it is so eager, so keen.
What else to you my dear, can I say,
Except that you are the only one for me,
And that your eyes sparkle like the stars I see.

Pleadingly yours,
I remain,
Awaiting your 'Yes'!
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10/06/2000 - Heeding to my head turning, I decided to announce this for the contest. Sir Sven and other grand knights, On guard...
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 My heart is pounding, my stomach's inside out
I'm feeling kind-a-shaky, my mind is full of doubt
All I ever think about, is fearing fear itself,
Wish I could unscrew my head and put it on the shelf
Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight,
Don't know what I'm looking at, the lights are all too bright
My brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor
Sweep 'em up. Throw 'em away, don't want 'em anymore
Clouds race across the sky, day turns into night,
Still there are the questions, no answers in sight
Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight,
Starin' out the window, everything is just too bright
Brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor,
Wish I could unscrew my head, and kick it out the door...
You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange
You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange

~ Strange ~ Joe Satriani (Flying in a Blue Dream)




[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 06-10-2000).]
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Jeffrey Carter
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1 posted 06-09-2000 01:23 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Man, oh, man

I'm definitely glad that this is not a competition. No one would stand a chance next to this one.

The fair maiden's are sure to be swooning over this.  

 All my love,
Jeffrey

I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

amazon_lover
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2 posted 06-09-2000 01:37 PM       View Profile for amazon_lover   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for amazon_lover

nice poem for a lovely maiden.. a lot of commitment to love....a plea done with dignity and faith..

Sincerely
A_L
Sudhir Iyer
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3 posted 06-09-2000 04:51 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Jeffery,
You are being too lavish...
Thank you...

A_L,
Thank you for your beautiful words...

Regards, sudhir.
Sudhir Iyer
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4 posted 06-10-2000 04:17 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Whilst I see so many great knights posting up their sentiments in pure romantic words, I feel a touch insecure now... lovely ladies here are surrounded by brave knights challenged by sven....

Tentatively pushing this up for all you fair ladies to see and read...please say 'yes'      ...

Should I or should I not, put this up for the challenge, I still wonder, questions causing many a pang in my muddled head...

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5 posted 06-10-2000 07:28 AM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

This one should have been posted for the challenge, so full of romantic words, words women love to hear...
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6 posted 06-10-2000 08:45 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Oh yes, YES!

 Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

shilpi
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7 posted 06-10-2000 09:08 AM       View Profile for shilpi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for shilpi

YES YES YES......!!!!!!!

To all thy questions,
My lips outline yes,
Ohh fear not, all will bend,
Unchalleged, thou shall stand,
For thee has no equal....

lol !!   I'm sure I've confused the thou's and thee's......

Sudhir, each time I read your poem, I feel I can never feel the emotions better than this, but I'm wrong all the time !!!

Have a wonderful day 'n take care
shilpi

p.s I'm having a very difficult time selecting the stanza i like the best....every  word says soooooo much !!
Kit McCallum
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8 posted 06-10-2000 09:13 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Just lovely Sudhir ... big heavy sigh ... wonderful poem!

Best wishes,
/Kit
Sudhir Iyer
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9 posted 06-10-2000 11:57 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Romantic heart, I heed to your behest, my mind has been made up, I will announce this one in for the contest...Thanks for your precious words...

Karilea, Thank you.

Shilpi, the words that your spend as gifts of appreciation are too profound for me... thank you.

Kit, Thank you ...

thanks a lot to all,
My warm regards.

 My heart is pounding, my stomach's inside out
I'm feeling kind-a-shaky, my mind is full of doubt
All I ever think about, is fearing fear itself,
Wish I could unscrew my head and put it on the shelf
Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight,
Don't know what I'm looking at, the lights are all too bright
My brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor
Sweep 'em up. Throw 'em away, don't want 'em anymore
Clouds race across the sky, day turns into night,
Still there are the questions, no answers in sight
Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight,
Starin' out the window, everything is just too bright
Brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor,
Wish I could unscrew my head, and kick it out the door...
You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange
You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange

~ Strange ~ Joe Satriani (Flying in a Blue Dream)
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10 posted 06-10-2000 12:17 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Brave Knight Sudhir, thou hast indeed penned a poem of love
That sings as to the angels up in heaven above
A poem of love's gentle pleading
To a heart that is in want of being

Please Brave Knight, do not sell thy skills short
Thou hast indeed held thine own in this poetic sport!
With words like this to hold for all to see
Methinks that I should be worried about you, instead of you being worried about me!!

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

brian madden
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11 posted 06-10-2000 12:24 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

The evening breeze blows, fate's
whispering your pleasant name,
While this heart eagerly anticipates, waits
A desperate soul says 'its high time you came'.

For that I love you, nature is to blame
Not my fault, that you were made this way,
Tender at heart, beautiful in soul, a rousing flame
Sunrise or sunset, the brilliance in any dazzling ray.


A wonderful poem, I gladly bow before your poetic might.


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12 posted 06-10-2000 12:31 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Well, Sudhir,

you've captured what women want to hear, they want those 3 simple words...not to be lies.


corinne
Sudhir Iyer
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13 posted 06-11-2000 10:17 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Sven, brian, Corinne,

Thanks a lot for your kind words...

Thank you.

Sudhir
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14 posted 06-15-2000 07:08 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

"The silken skin I will caress, if the light turns to green from red."  I am also awaiting a greenlight with much anticipation.  Very soft and warm poem displaying your soft and tender heart.  May God bless you with the sweetheart of your desires.  James
 
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