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Can You And I? (Repost of one of my favorite poems for challenge)

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Lost Dreamer
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0 posted 06-09-2000 08:32 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Can You And I?

Can you begin at the base
of my mountain
slowly climb till reaching the cliff
at the utmost top?
If I suggested you jump would you,
could you,
or would you hold onto what you
started with till the end?

Could you deep sea dive the depths
of my ocean
concurring the schools of fish
currently in control?
Would you drown if my oceans depth
was to deep
or would you rise to the surface for air
now and then?

Can you diagnose and repair my computer's
main frame
replacing mother board and ram memory
gone bad?
Will it require erasing all the memories
of the past
to reboot and start my repaired main frame
all over again?

Can a locksmith you become unlocking
stubborn doors
or are keys a hindrance to you
preferring openness?
If I locked myself out would you
come rescue me
or would your priorities leave me
finding other measures?

Would you allow me to scale your mountain
memorizing every ridge
bungee jump within your security till daylight
turns to night?
Could I reach the peak and still see
the beautiful valley below
through eyes that embrace nature
piece by piece?

Can I surf the tides of your ocean
starting with the highest
as it's intense wave caresses
my imagination?
Could I savor the lowest tide caressing
the evening
relaxed in the softness of the sandbar
below the water's rule?

Can I play on the keys of your computer
make them come alive
with the touch of my fingertips
creating romance?
Can my computer and your computer
network together
creating a powerful mega force
no one can corrupt?

Can I become a master key
in your life
unlocking all the closed doors
so freedom can reign?
Can I use my key to unlock
our fantasy's
making way for two single worlds
to become one?

Can you and I climb the tallest mountain
together hand in hand
guiding each other through the journey
like there's no tomorrow?
Can you and I hang glide over the valley
below our sky line
floating away further into our destiny
forever together?


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Aimster
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since 02-19-2000
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1 posted 06-09-2000 11:38 AM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

*sigh* this one is a keeper
for sure. i can see why it's one
of your favorites. your work always
holds for me such honesty and pure
emotion. elegantly written.
take care.
amy  


 "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."



Lost Dreamer
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2 posted 06-09-2000 06:54 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Amy: Thank you very much for reading and enjoying. I'm also happy my poetry touches you, that's an honor to any poet.  
Munda
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since 10-08-1999
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3 posted 06-10-2000 04:48 AM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

Definitely a favourite ! Great writing Gloria !
brian madden
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since 05-06-2000
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ireland


4 posted 06-10-2000 05:28 AM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

wonderful poem. I hope he said yes to all of these questions, if so then it has to be true love.

Would you allow me to scale your mountain
memorizing every ridge
bungee jump within your security till daylight
turns to night?
Could I reach the peak and still see
the beautiful valley below
through eyes that embrace nature
piece by piece?



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"I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Libraries gave us power
Then work came and made us free
What price now for a shallow piece of dignity"
Nicky Wire, A design for Life.

manic street preachers
"Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany
Culture, alienation, boredom and despair"

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.


 
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