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Unreachable Touch

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SpitFire
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0 posted 06-08-2000 12:20 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for SpitFire

Unreachable Touch

Unnattainable relation.
Unreachable touch.
Too much has been lost...
atleast I know this much.

Too much time has gone on by,
too many things you've missed,
too many smiles you didn't see,
and bruises you failed to kiss.

The effect of you is everlasting,
the pain you caused is strong.
Taken all the hope we had
then told us we were wrong.

The horrific displays of anger,
still burning in my heart,
still tearing up my insides,
so wrong of you from the start.

The fear you instilled still lingers,
the cloud in my sky still there,
the foreverness of all you've done,
still burning over here.

Unreachable touch.

© Copyright 2000 SpitFire - All Rights Reserved
RSEvans
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1 posted 06-08-2000 12:30 PM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

This poem has so much raw emotion!  Beautifully written and very expressive.  A very angry retort.  
Marge Tindal
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2 posted 06-08-2000 01:32 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

SpitFire~
I found this to be a well written piece
from a heart that certainly has felt pain.
I felt tender touching from a bruised
heart.  
No anger seen here by me ...
just painful memories.

I hope you reach beyond the pain
and find happiness.
*HUGS*
~*Marge*~




 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Cuddlez
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3 posted 06-08-2000 03:10 PM       View Profile for Cuddlez   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cuddlez

It doesnt sound like this touch is still unreachable.. I loved the depth of this piece. It is soooooo pretty. I dont like many pieces like this but this piece was definetely the exception...

 Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go.
EagleOne
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Between a laugh and a tear...


4 posted 06-08-2000 04:50 PM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

Wow SpitFire! This is indeed a very powerful piece, charged with much emotion and pain. I hope that the pain will ease for you, Take Care!

 God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown


Nate Dogg
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5 posted 06-08-2000 05:01 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

This is a great piece as I could feel your pain pouring from out this poem. Great job!

 Nathan
Ethan Halo
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on the roof again


6 posted 06-08-2000 05:07 PM       View Profile for Ethan Halo   Email Ethan Halo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ethan Halo's Home Page   View IP for Ethan Halo

i know these feelings so well! you've got a good theme, the unattainable craving, and it's well expressed. very raw and real. i dig it.

 We all got somethin' to atone for.
amazon_lover
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7 posted 06-08-2000 05:08 PM       View Profile for amazon_lover   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for amazon_lover

love and hate, passion and dispassion, life and death, all mixed feelings,full of flow straight from your heart.

Sincerely
A_L
Aimster
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8 posted 06-08-2000 05:32 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

SpitFire~
I am really enjoying watching the
different styles of writing you can
display. This one here is a gem. It has
a lot of in depth emotions entwined into
one powerful intense piece! It is apparent
to the reader that this comes from a
deep place of strong feelings. You write
them out exceptionally well. A shadow of
sadness lingers in this but also anger.
Good poem, very good my friend.
take care,
amy  


 "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."



Dark Angel
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9 posted 06-08-2000 05:35 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Powerful piece Spitfire and filled with so much pain. A great poem! Take care.  

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)


SpitFire
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10 posted 06-08-2000 09:29 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~RSEvans,...thank you for reading...and replying with such kindness.  Take care.

~Marge,...aww thanks for the hugs and for reading.  Oh, and for the hoping. Thank you.

~Cuddlez,...an exception???...well thank you dear. ...for liking...and reading.

~EagleOne,...Thank you for the hoping and for reading and replying....really...thanks.

~Nate Dogg,...Why thank you....for reading and for feeling it. Take care.

~Ethan_Halo,...thank you for taking the time. Sorry though that you know these feelings. Ouch.  Thanks for diggin'.

~Amazon_Lover,...thank you, thank you for your reply...it all fell out....of my heart...as you said.

~Aimster,...oh thank you.  Thank you so much for your in-depth reply.  And your kind and encouraging words.

~Dark Angel,...thank you for the reading. and for the powerful...very cool. Take care.

*Peace.
Lone Wolf
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11 posted 06-08-2000 10:02 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Spit Fire,

Powerful words from your wounded heart my friend.  I hope that you find comfort for your pain...soon.  You deserve to be happy.  Well written!  

HUGS,
LW


 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith
Tennessee Angel
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12 posted 06-08-2000 10:06 PM       View Profile for Tennessee Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tennessee Angel

I really enjoyed reading this poem because there was SO much intense emotion in it!  You did an excellent job portraying exactly what you were feeling.  Great work!

 "That man has shown himself great who has never grieved in evil days and never bewailed his destiny." --Seneca
Alle'cram
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13 posted 06-08-2000 10:22 PM       View Profile for Alle'cram   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alle'cram

SpitFire,  You did a superb job expressing  feelings. Very powerful emotions expressed.
Good job.   marcy
insect
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14 posted 06-08-2000 10:43 PM       View Profile for insect   Email insect   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for insect

WOW!!
This is an excellent piece!
Loved it.
Love your poems.
Love to *sk8.

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