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ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

0 posted 2000-06-08 12:12 PM



Get ahead everytime you're able
take the finer things from the table.
Take your gains take your profits
steal your own cause from those who lost it.
Run every kind of game you can bleed.
you'll still have nothing when you leave.

Put your faith in all your gold cards
mention them proudly when things go hard.
Fake your records fake your facts
take another page from your income tax.
Score on everything you can get for free,
you'll still have nothing when you leave.

Ths sun still shines above the dark clouds.
Birds in the sky all have a nest house.
Get out and look about from mountain to sea
there's,no simple things that you don't need
and you'll still have nothing when you leave.


Celtrue2000@E3B1G9

© Copyright 2000 Eric Lewis True - All Rights Reserved
Cuddlez
Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422
Walla Walla, WA 99362
1 posted 2000-06-08 03:22 PM


I think I get this poem and then I dont... Theres a saying that I heard.. Make peace with the world, but if you disagree, yell and punch hard once, then make peace again... I think this ties in anyway.. It was what came to mind )

 Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go.

Cuddlez
Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422
Walla Walla, WA 99362
2 posted 2000-06-08 03:24 PM


Never mind. I read the poem two times more and now I really get it... I love it.. Take what you want, but the sun will still shine and I'll be alive even if I'm hurt

 Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go.

X Angel
Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521
Oregon
3 posted 2000-06-09 11:34 PM


Wonderful poem, very true and written well too boot! Kudos!
~Heather

Tennessee Angel
Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661
Tennessee
4 posted 2000-06-09 11:40 PM


I absolutely love this!!  It has a great message and it just flowed so easily.  I just had to smile while reading because I recognized characteristics of people I know.  There's a song that this reminded me of:
"There's no hurry and I won't worry.
The world's not passing me by.
The Lord, He knows just where each day goes
and He won't leave me behind.
So I won't be taking a single thing
that my heart can't carry inside.
Oh, I'm going home
and I'm only taking my time."

 "That man has shown himself great who has never grieved in evil days and never bewailed his destiny." --Seneca

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
5 posted 2000-06-10 04:03 AM


Thank you all for your kind words.

 

Munda
Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
6 posted 2000-06-10 04:13 AM


No matter how many earthly materials we gather, the true treasure is found within.
Wonderful poem !

brian madden
Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
7 posted 2000-06-10 05:43 AM


a wonderful poem, true "you'll still have nothing when you leave." we were born naked and shall in a way die naked. Everything we surround ourselves with shall be worthless.

a lot of wisdom in this poem.  



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"I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Libraries gave us power
Then work came and made us free
What price now for a shallow piece of dignity"
Nicky Wire, A design for Life.

manic street preachers
"Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany
Culture, alienation, boredom and despair"

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.



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