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sarahC
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since 2000-06-07
Posts 84
Michigan

0 posted 2000-06-08 03:02 AM


he's off again
to a far away land
my patriotic man

the nights get lonely
when he's away
waiting for the day
he will return
the knock on the door
three stars on his collar
I turn away

It can't be true
he promised a safe return
he said it was a worthy cause
I still wonder what he was fighting for
"To serve our country",
he told me when we were young
"secure a future
for you and my sons."

Now I'm alone
my country stole him from us
a war in a foreign land
now he returns to the dust

I scream out his name in the night
noone around to hear
just my babies
alone in their beds
how I hold them so dear

well he's safe now
no more wars to fight
how i wish he was here to hold me
tenderly
yet tight

I know he is looking down on us
sprinkling his angels dust
from the heavens he protects

the wars he's fought
still have not ended
his worthy cause is not amended
my hero has gone away
let me go with him now I pray.......



 

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Ethan Halo
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since 2000-04-28
Posts 793
on the roof again
1 posted 2000-06-08 03:17 AM


this was very interesting. i've never read a poem like this one. very deceiving title =) i liked it. it was sad and mournful without being extremely heavy. i dig it.

 We all got somethin' we need to atone for.

sarahC
Member
since 2000-06-07
Posts 84
Michigan
2 posted 2000-06-08 08:11 AM


Thank you Ethan...it isn't really true to my life but I was inspired by the many stories I have heard of loves lost due to combat, families left behind....Thank you I am glad you liked it.
Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
3 posted 2000-06-08 09:19 AM


sarahC, this is really wonderful writing.  So sad when a soldier dies.  How is any country served when a young man dies??  I could go on and on about this but here is not the place.  
Your poem was really nice! Lots of sensitivity and expression.
dh


 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.


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