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I just want anyones take on it

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Samha
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0 posted 06-07-2000 09:40 PM       View Profile for Samha   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Samha

(read please)


read please

written really really late......

Seeing you like this is  truly something to behold
you have no idea what is going on right now
you are just moving perfectly
just existing, beautifully moving, each step is bold

Tracked deep behind I hope to catch a glimpse
hopping you will see me
praying you will notice
realizing that you , only you move like that

Simply I follow, follow your face, your eyes, the flow of your hair
you follow the noise, you follow the sound and the party
you don’t care, because you don't know
I follow the noise, I follow your heartbeat, your breath in the cold air

The deepness of the woods here, the silent pillars of the tree line
they remain silent but profound , not unlike me
they, however have tact, they are proud in their silence
I am scared in my silence, I fear you see
the trees

Face to face now, and I am still quiet, still breathing quick
you are perfect, now you know someone thinks so
Now you know someone will do more than simply follow
I followed you into the blackness of the woods
now we move into the thick

Traceing the features on your face, watching your eyes
following your eyes
seeing myself in your eyes
My mind is raceing over wether you like what you see in your eyes
The rain began to fall, poinient for us both
the air was sweet now, no longer dead
the stagnant air is alive and damn sexy
sweet air is soothing, I calm down, you open up

I shook when you first put your hand on me, put your perfect hand on me
me, not anyone else, I am the one here

I am what is going on here
we are what is going on at this point , you are all that I can see

the sceneries are growing in thier beauty
the world has slown down for us
the minuets hours, the days months, and this moment as long as we say
the center of the universe has decided to
dress up an make itself known
the rain falls , we fall, on my coat, drenched and soaked
we play, in the rain, becuase we known something
we are the center of the universe
but more importantly each others hopes

smiling, beautifully, your beautifull when your still
but when you smile
when you smile we both now
and we kiss again
and again

rolling about we stay warm
the trees know no harm
we feel love like no other
mkeing love to one another
in the rain, the thick of the woods
I did what I never could




[This message has been edited by Samha (edited 06-09-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Samha - All Rights Reserved
netswan
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since 03-28-2000
Posts 1395
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1 posted 06-07-2000 11:13 PM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Welcome to Passions, Samha!

What a lovely love poem ---

~netswan
Aimster
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since 02-19-2000
Posts 4367
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2 posted 06-07-2000 11:20 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

Samha~
wow! let me take a moment to
catch my breath! this was simply
wonderful! you write with wild vivid
imagery and at an amazing emotional
depth. welcome to passions...i look
foward to reading more of your work.
take care.
amy  


 "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."



Breathe~
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since 02-05-2000
Posts 319
Washington...


3 posted 06-07-2000 11:53 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

Wow!

That seems to be all I can manage at this moment...This is just Wonderful!   )


 I love the time
and in between
the calm inside me
in the space
where I can breathe...

Sarah McLachlan
sarahC
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since 06-07-2000
Posts 84
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4 posted 06-08-2000 12:06 AM       View Profile for sarahC   Email sarahC   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sarahC

very good....it really brought me into it...I felt like I was there with you!!!
good poetry...keep it up!  
Ethan Halo
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since 04-28-2000
Posts 820
on the roof again


5 posted 06-08-2000 03:35 AM       View Profile for Ethan Halo   Email Ethan Halo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ethan Halo's Home Page   View IP for Ethan Halo

Samha-
great way to make an entrance. welcome. this was so descriptive and...real.  the line that stuck with me afterwards:
"the stagnant air is alive and damn sexy "

i dig it. keep up the awesome work. i look forward to hearing more from ya.


 We all got somethin' we need to atone for.


[This message has been edited by Ethan_Halo (edited 06-08-2000).]
Sudhir Iyer
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since 04-26-2000
Posts 7206
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium


6 posted 06-08-2000 03:46 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Samha,
WELCOME TO PASSIONS and have a nice time in this family...

You have started your foray into this world of poetry with a nice lilting poem...glad to have read it...

Regards, sudhir
P.S. a few spelling errors, mere typos could be corrected...
meanwhile enjoy this pink floyd song...



 Hey you, out there in the cold,
Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me?
Hey you, standing in the aisle,
With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me?
Hey you, don't help them to bury the light.
Don't give in without a fight.
Hey you, out there on your own,
Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me?
Hey you, with your ear against the wall,
Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me?
Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone?
Open your heart, I'm coming home....

by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall
Saintly15
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7 posted 06-08-2000 09:45 PM       View Profile for Saintly15   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Saintly15

Wow babe, that was super great, i hope to read more of your stuff sometime!
Corinne
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since 10-28-1999
Posts 5247
state of confusion


8 posted 06-08-2000 10:26 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Welcome to Passions, Samha!  Some beautiful words here, just needs a bit of cleaning up, spell check-wise.

Corinne
 
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