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Balladeer
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0 posted 2000-06-07 08:35 PM



My friend, I fear you'll never see
The ripe old age of 93
But that don't matter anyhow
To me, you're ripe enough right now!

At 93, your home will be
A cardboard box in some alley.
Trapping rats for barbeque
As cats come by to whizz on you.

Whenever someone passes by
You'll scream "A handsome man was I!"
"I used to write sweet poetry!!
How dare you stare and laugh at me?!"

"I know my hair is full of ants
But I once worked in nuclear plants!
This wretched creature you now see
Had this whole world depend on me!"

"I was a SAILOR!", you'll go on...
"Who loved to see the crack of dawn!
'Til Dawn was seen by Lorelie
Who packed her bags and said goodbye."

"Don't look at me with pitied eyes!
Some folks considered me quite wise!
(Of course, this last part wasn't true
But what's a beggar supposed to do?)


"I know, to you, I may seem strange
But I'm not...hey, you got some change?
I need some tuna for my cats
And bait to catch those tender rats."

"Sure, walk away, you stoopid bums!
I'm still a man, whatever comes.
Messing with one man put me here...
Oh, how I curse you, Balladeer!!!"


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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2000-06-07 09:34 PM


LOL ouch!!
oh come on Balladeer dont hold back
say what ya REALLY feel...
oh you two boys need a good spanking...
and Im just the woman to give them to you  LOL LOL
KIDDING JUST KIDDING    NOT!!!
later ****disturber-gator LOL
jm

Poet deVine
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2 posted 2000-06-07 09:45 PM


Excellent response!!! I like it..quite like the first days here...
Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
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3 posted 2000-06-07 09:51 PM


And the beat goes on
And the beat goes on
And now we sit and wait for the rebuttal
To entertain all us cyber addicts
Great little poem, Balladeer
Liz

Tennessee Angel
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since 2000-06-03
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Tennessee
4 posted 2000-06-07 10:26 PM


Absolutely Priceless!!  I love to watch two men in the heat of battle.  LOL  I'll wait patiently for LngJhn's response and may the best man win.

 "That man has shown himself great who has never grieved in evil days and never bewailed his destiny." --Seneca

RainbowGirl
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since 1999-07-31
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5 posted 2000-06-08 09:03 AM


ROFL...that feels good now all we need is our Toe to show up...

Thanks for the 7mb dl...it's still coming...LOL

HUSG

LngJhnAg
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6 posted 2000-06-08 09:11 AM


Oh dear, O' 'Deer - you have run me through with your wicked pen.  And all these wicked poets expect a response as villifying as yours - I will responde, but only with kindness - Great poem, ya devil.
Lorelei54
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7 posted 2000-06-08 09:36 AM


Great comeback 'deer...without someone to egg him on, I fear he'd tease me more..and it is like the old times...but without poor Toe..we need to plan a weekend of reality sometime guys!
WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
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Illinois
8 posted 2000-06-08 10:16 AM


ROFL 'deer!' Leave it to you to have rats whizzin.

Oh, how I miss these words of war,
And laughing so hard I'm on the floor!

Way to go DEER!

Balladeer
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9 posted 2000-06-08 04:26 PM


Janet Marie....yep, that has always been a fault of mine, holding back my feelings   Spanking, did you say? OH, BOY!!!

deVine One...yes, those were the days for sure. Maybe a revival is in order......

Elizabeth....that's right...the beating goes on! I bless your addiction.  

T Angel.....two men? I was referring to LongJohn. We're one man short! Glad you came by  

Rainbow.... So right! We could all use that (Don't tell him I said so) Is it there yet?

Long John...I would expect no less from a man of your class and limited vocabulary   I can hear you scheming now, you devil.......!!

Lorelei...sounds great to me! Let's hunt that disappearing Toe down and do it!

dovey...My true pal! I can always count on you for support in my war against the dark forces. May the farce be with us!!

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