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Is this the end? (repost)

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Nate Dogg
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since 11-15-1999
Posts 1691
Georgia, Fulton


0 posted 06-07-2000 05:37 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

This some of my earliest work that really caught some people's eyes and let realize my skills as poet. I hope you all enjoy it.... especially the ones who never read it before!

I'm lying in this hospital bed,
with three bullets in my head
as the pain is tearing through my brain,
causing me to cry out to the Lord in vain.
I told the Lord that if he plans to take me,
then let me leave quietly.
I never thought that I would be,
on the recieving end,
of a bullet from my best friend.
We let money and women come in between
so therefore, there wasn't much trust between us.
Obviously, my friend needs to see a pschiatrist
and I never thought he was like this.
He was angel in disguise,
that unvieled his true identity
right before my own eyes.
This is the result,
of all those years he smoked crack.
I know that he wishes that,
he could have those years back
because all that crack,
flipped his brain like an acrobat,
and now he's trapped like Daniel,
was in the lion's den.
Because of him, my life's descending
and is close to an ending.
Before I go, I would lke to thank everybody,
who was positive and all the ones,
that really cared for me and loved me.
I hope you all stay strong,
reach mountain peaks and hold on.
At my last breath, I closed my eyes,
and told the world, my final goodbye.

 Nathan
© Copyright 2000 Nate Dogg - All Rights Reserved
Moon Dust
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1 posted 06-07-2000 05:58 PM       View Profile for Moon Dust   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Moon Dust

I seem to be remembering that I did one simelar to it. I like it

 We are all poets, its just some people dont know it yet.
SpitFire
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since 04-19-2000
Posts 2428


2 posted 06-07-2000 06:11 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Nate,...this is very chilling and gripping work here.  Wow,...this poem took me for a ride!  Such a tragic tale told in such a truly talented way.  Thanks for sharing it. *Peace.
JamesMichael
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since 11-16-1999
Posts 31622
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA


3 posted 06-08-2000 05:55 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Excellent writing Nate...enjoyed reading this again.   James
Marge Tindal
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4 posted 06-08-2000 06:35 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Nathan, my friend~
I may have missed this one the first
time around ... it tells a tragic tale.
I found it gripping.
~*Marge*~


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Kit McCallum
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since 04-30-2000
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5 posted 06-08-2000 06:51 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

This was a powerful and thought-provoking verse Nate ... too often a tragedy repeated.  Well written!

Best wishes,
/Kit
sarahC
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since 06-07-2000
Posts 84
Michigan


6 posted 06-08-2000 08:39 AM       View Profile for sarahC   Email sarahC   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sarahC

I really liked this poem Nate...too true of the world we live in today, power, women, money, greed, I'll have to give this topic some thought and do some writing on it myself,,,,nice work for sure!  
hippie_teen
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since 05-18-2000
Posts 18
Escondido, CA, USA


7 posted 06-08-2000 09:52 AM       View Profile for hippie_teen   Email hippie_teen   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hippie_teen

This is a wonderful poem, but more importantly, nice name!  Perhaps I'm bias, for my name too, is Nathan, but a great name none the less!  Your last name wouldn't happen to be, "hale," would it?  Just kidding, you are a far greater writer than Nathan Hale!
Aimster
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since 02-19-2000
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Charlotte, NC


8 posted 06-08-2000 10:41 AM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

Nate~
Hi. I haven't ever read any of your
work before so thanks much for posting.
this is a VERY powerful piece of poetry
you have here. very intense, very real-
like. i felt like i was in the hospital
room with this person. excellent piece!!
take care,
amy  


 "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."



Nate Dogg
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since 11-15-1999
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Georgia, Fulton


9 posted 06-08-2000 04:59 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Thank you Maria, for your nice comments.
Thank you Spitfire, for wonderful comments.
Thank you James, for your great comments.
Thank you Marge, for your sweet comments.
Thank you Kit, for you great comments.
Thank you Sarah, for your good comments.
Thank you Nathan, for your comments and I'm sure that you're a great poet in your own right.
Thank you Aimster,
for your wonderful comments.

 Nathan
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