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My Father, My Hero!

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Sudhir Iyer
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0 posted 06-07-2000 12:40 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

My dear friends,

This poem is my 500th post here, but more importantly it is my first poem about my father...I revere and respect him to the fullest possible extent... but that doesn't seem to be enough to me, so I wish to give him a nice poem as a gift for Father's day (June 18th)...So please let me know if this is appropriate and what can be changed to make it appropriate and better....

I thank your support in advance... Here goes...

My Father, My Hero
----------------------
A passing thought, a vision, I saw an image deep in his eyes,
A source of love, tender affection, given without compromise.
I recall the many times that he had stood, by my side,
and prodded me on with great vigour and even greater pride.

His voice ever confident, firm and yet fair,
Always speaking with patience, tenderness and care.
The power, the might of his hands was so sure,
I knew, with his presence, there was nothing I wouldn't endure.

'Tis true, my teachers provided me educational insight,
Whilst mother, she dedicated her flaming love, her caring light,
Yet, he laid the foundation that let me stand upright,
He was the one who taught me what was right.

He's the grandest of men to have stepped on this earth,
Most commanding of generals, a most serene  personality.
Although he's neither royal by stature nor a high priest by birth,
He will remain forever, the emperor for my supreme loyalty.

A man of great dignity, honour and strength,
Merits are noble, and of admirable length.
Displaying greater valour in climbing life's unfair stairs,
Oft showing the grandeur of life lived, with steps ever so fair.

He's the one, who strengthened my tiny, unsure paces
The one, who gave me courage, to fly in free spaces
He's far greater than any man that I know, 'tis true
He's my dad, my friend, my mentor, my hero too.

A year from now, when sixty, he'll look not more than forty
A pool of wisdom, filled with life's measures aplenty,
I bow in deep respect and seek out his footprints,
Steps that I take will follow as ever his confident sprints.

-------07/06/2000-------




 Hey you, out there in the cold,
Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me?
Hey you, standing in the aisle,
With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me?
Hey you, don't help them to bury the light.
Don't give in without a fight.
Hey you, out there on your own,
Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me?
Hey you, with your ear against the wall,
Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me?
Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone?
Open your heart, I'm coming home....

by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall




[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 06-07-2000).]
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Sunshine
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1 posted 06-07-2000 01:31 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Two very fortunate people...your father and you.

This is what I would change...but on the other hand...you can leave it as it is, for it is straight from your heart...


A passing thought, a vision, I saw an image deep in his eyes,
A source of love, tender affection, given without compromise.
I recall the many times that he had stood still, by my side,
and prodded me on with great vigour and even greater pride.

His voice ever confident, firm, and yet fair,
Always he spoke with patience, tenderness, and care.
The power, the might of his hands so sure,
I knew, in his presence, there was nothing I wouldn't endure.

'Tis true, my teachers provided me educational insight,
Whilst mother, she dedicated her flaming love, her caring light,
Yet, he laid the foundation that let me stand upright,
He was the one who taught what was right.

He's the grandest of men to have stepped on this earth,
Most commanding of generals, serene of personalities.
Although he's neither royal by stature nor a high priest by birth,
He will remain forever, the emperor for my supreme loyalty.

A man of great dignity, honour and strength,
Merits are noble, and of admirable length.
Displaying greater valour in climbing life's unfair stairs,
Oft showing the grandeur of life lived, with steps ever so fair.

He's the one, who strengthened my tiny, unsure paces
The one who gave me courage, to fly in free spaces
He's far greater than any man I know, 'tis true
He's a dad, a friend, a mentor ... a hero too.

A year from now, when sixty, he’ll look not more than forty
A pool of wisdom, filled with life's measures aplenty,
I bow in deep respect, and seek out his footprints,
Steps that I take will follow as ever his confidence sprints


Your father will love this piece, whatever you choose to do.  Happy Fathers Day to him!


 Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~



[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 06-07-2000).]
Sudhir Iyer
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2 posted 06-07-2000 01:49 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Karilea,
Thanks for spending your most valuable time for presenting me with a delightful poetic insight and making me improve my poem...I have changed a few lines, which I felt should be after reading what you wrote a few times and re-reading my poem... some lines I just let them be..

Thanks a lot once again, really...

Many regards,
Sudhir

[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 06-07-2000).]
Sunshine
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3 posted 06-07-2000 01:53 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

You are more than very welcome.  He will be SO pleased...

 Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

Sudhir Iyer
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4 posted 06-08-2000 03:40 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

I hope he is ...
I hope you are right..

Thanks.

regards, sudhir
tracie66
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5 posted 06-08-2000 05:42 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Sudhir~
This is truly a most wonderful and beautiful piece. You must have the upmost respect and admiration for your father to have penned such a piece as this and I admire you for it.
I can see the love, respect, admiration and loyalty in your words.
This is a masterpiece, a treasure and your dad will be blown away by it I'm sure.
Luv Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Kit McCallum
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6 posted 06-08-2000 06:04 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Your respect and admiration for your father simply shines throughout this wonderful verse Sudhir ... it will be something your father will treasure always. What an incredible relationship you share, you are truly blessed.  I find it is so important to share these feelings "now", and let people know how much we appreciate them "today". Excellent tribute to your father Sudhir!

Best wishes,
/Kit
Sudhir Iyer
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7 posted 06-08-2000 01:16 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Tracie, Kit,
I am really grateful to you for reading and showering your ever-so-lavish praises... Thanks a lot...

Regards,
Sudhir
JamesMichael
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8 posted 06-09-2000 05:27 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Sudhir I have just read about two men to be respected.  You have eloquently displayed your love, admiration and respect for your father.   James
netswan
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9 posted 06-09-2000 06:08 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Sudhir, you are so lucky to have a father
to respect and to give such love.  This
piece is perfect -- Your father might
have to hide his tears --)

And, your father is lucky to have a son
who realizes his dad is one of his greatest
treasures.    This is lovely.  

~netswan
ethome
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10 posted 06-09-2000 06:36 AM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

It does my heart good to read a poem like this, filled with such heartfelt respect and so nicely done. Bravo! a tribute to the importance of the family unit..

 
Sudhir Iyer
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11 posted 06-09-2000 01:37 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

James, thats a huge thing you say here...I am honoured and I bow down to thank you for the respect that you show for me....

netswan, thanks a lot, truly, many thanks.

ethome, thank you too.

Each of you posting a response is worth more than a million in hard currency to me. Because of your words, my respect to my dad even grows further... I hope that you understand how happy I feel to read your responses, most particularly to this poem...

Humbly yours,
Sudhir.
amazon_lover
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12 posted 06-09-2000 01:40 PM       View Profile for amazon_lover   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for amazon_lover

a glowing tribute to you dad..I wish everyone has a dad as yours...guess how mine would be...it'll be a satire!!!!!!!!!!!!

Sincerely
A_L
Sudhir Iyer
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13 posted 06-09-2000 04:54 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

A_L,
Thanks for reading...
I am waiting for the satire now...

Keep writing,
Take Care,
Sudhir
amazon_lover
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14 posted 06-09-2000 04:56 PM       View Profile for amazon_lover   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for amazon_lover

not so soon..it'll take time..
Sudhir Iyer
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15 posted 06-18-2000 11:48 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Bringing this poem back to the top for two reasons:
** Today is father's day, and
** My dad liked this one, (He did Karilea, he did!) and thanks for all of you for your kind words, and your best wishes...

Once again regards and thanks to all...

Sudhir

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