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My favorite poem (JMs challenge)

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sea_of_okc
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since 06-15-99
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Oklahoma City, OK, USA


0 posted 06-07-2000 12:25 PM       View Profile for sea_of_okc   Email sea_of_okc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for sea_of_okc

Earthbound this husk that I call me
Container for what once flew free
Not bound by laws of gravity
Nor with these eyes of mine did see

Once did I see through eyes of grace
Standing in His holy place
Beheld with awe His perfect face
Before the dawn of human race

Sometimes I think I see Him still
His voice my heart and mind does fill
Instructs me as I do His will
Provides me with unearthly skill

He guards me with celestial might
Reveals to me the paths of right
Gives me strength and will to fight
Pervasive evil, mankind's blight

My goal His kingdom to restore
For eighty years or so before
I knock again upon His door
To be transformed and fly once more


 Steven Seaman
To thine own self be true...


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Corinne
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since 10-28-1999
Posts 5247
state of confusion


1 posted 06-07-2000 12:36 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Fantastic journey - thank you for sharing with us!

Corinne
Janet Marie
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since 01-22-2000
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2 posted 06-07-2000 04:54 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

wow this is a very cool poem...
great and ambitious rhyme scheme
excellent imagery
well written
thank you for posting it up for the challenge
later-sea-gator  
jm

 I think I could need - this in my life
I think I'm just scared - that I know too much
I can't relate and that's a problem
I'm feeling ...
If you're gone - maybe it's time to go home
There's an awful lot of breathing room
But I can hardly move
If you're gone - baby you need to come home
cuz there's a little bit of something me...
In everything in you.
~MB20~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~

poetFemmeFatale
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since 07-25-99
Posts 2961
Arkansas


3 posted 06-07-2000 07:12 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Wow, I love the first two lines of this...You used some completely unique terms...(husk, container) which really set the mood for the rest of the poem. Kind of gives the reader that "emptiness" in the beginning, of what the speaker is feeling.  This is superb, I can definately see why it's your favorite. Bravo sir on looking inside the soul.  Have I told you lately that I'm glad you're back?  ROFLMAO
Balladeer
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4 posted 06-07-2000 07:42 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Nice work, Sea....and it IS good to see you back! Stick around for a while  

You're bound to get a good comment from Poet Femme by writing about anything "husky"!  
Elizabeth
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America the beautiful


5 posted 06-08-2000 11:45 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

*applauds* Very nicely done Sea!

Elizabeth


 I'm grabbing my hat and coat
I'm leaving the cat a note
Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town!


ethome
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since 05-14-2000
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New Brunswick Canada


6 posted 06-08-2000 01:37 PM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

Nicely done!  Great theme!
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