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I Need Some Input Please!!!!!

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**Tammy**
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Poem #1


The Holyness of the Holy
The Loneliness of the Lonely
The Worthlessness of the Worthless

Holding it inside trying not to let it out,
Is what it's all about
Nobody needs to know
Nobody wants to know

It's what you don't want
you have
and
what you want you
can't have

Poem  #2

The darkness as swallowed me.
Iam forced to go with the flow.
My life is no longer my control.
The senses which I have obtained are now
as useless as the times.
Get a little and lose a lot.


Poem #3

Like a dying tree in a long forgotten forest. Worn away by time and the constant sound os silence. Alone and forgotten about, But now awake and bursting with life, but no one to show off to so spirts dampens and then slowly die. start to fade away, and gradually enter into the final steps of death, then realize the whole point of living, is to die!


Poem #4


Iam stuck with the two of you
   I need nor want either one of you
You do nothing for me
   I feel nothing for you
You won't shut up
   I am stuck with pain inside, that won't let up
It's not likely that I'll have an up day
   But when I do your always there to kick me down
   to make me blue
So for all of the above thank you so much, for making me the way you do!


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Tammy~ Welcome!   Well, for my input, I'd say, one poem at a time, and you sound very angry. Writing helps get it out so I'm glad to see that's what you're doing.   -SEA
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Welcome to Passions Tammy!  My goodness, you've got 4 on the go here ... and quite full of heartfelt emotions.  Hang in there Tammy, people do want to know, to hear, and do care.  You clearly have talent, and it so helps to write it out as you've done.  Keep writing, and take care ...

Best wishes,
/Kit

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Welcome to Passions, Tammy -- This part
of the forum is for reading and enjoying.

We have Critical Analysis for when you
want some honest responses to your post

These poems have lots of anger in
them - I am a true advocate of writing to
clear any problem that happens upon us in
life  -- KEEP writing.  

~netswan
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Tammy*
Welcome to Passions first of all!

All of the poems were deep and painful, the one that struck the biggest cord with me personally was #1, especially the line

Holding it inside trying not to let it out,
Is what it's all about

I live this line often...Your anger and your pain is felt through your work and by letting it out with poetry as your release an amazing thing does happen....you start to heal. Thank you for sharing these!
 
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