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Lie Beside the Lie

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Marina
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0 posted 06-06-2000 07:14 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Marina

Lie beside the Lie


I took what dreams may come
And you, what you needn’t see
My heart allowed a window
And you, let yours run free

Each night we reveal
Our innermost desires
A promise of a future
But all of you, is what I require

A question of truth
In a bizarre situation
Whose right, the heart or the head
With the body giving into temptation

So tell me, what I need know
How can there be a “We”?
And do you lie beside the lie
Or does she?


Marina June 2000

© Copyright 2000 Marina Crossley - All Rights Reserved
amazon_lover
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1 posted 06-06-2000 07:19 PM       View Profile for amazon_lover   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for amazon_lover

Hi marina,
Love shows through your heart but with skepticism. You may find it out with time.

Sincerely
A_L
Aimster
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2 posted 06-06-2000 08:19 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

~Marina~

wow!! this was excellent. i really
enjoyed this read greatly. you write
your feelings and questions well
m'friend. i hope your love works out
for you and you find much happiness.
take care,
amy  


 "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."



Kit McCallum
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3 posted 06-06-2000 08:23 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Many questions drawn between the lines ... I hope you will find the answers you seek Marina.  Beautifully penned!

Best wishes,
/Kit
Lone Wolf
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4 posted 06-06-2000 08:25 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Marina,

Wonderful expression here.  So many questions you have....I hope the answers are revealed to you.  Funny that at times you think you know someone, only to find out later that they misrepresented themselves.  Truly the lowest of the low.  I am sure your questions will be answered.  Great writing.

Lone Wolf


 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith
PoetasterD
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5 posted 06-06-2000 08:28 PM       View Profile for PoetasterD   Email PoetasterD   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoetasterD

Marina,

I like this one very much. I actually got a feeling similar to a poem I submitted, "She & Her". If you get a chance, check it out and let me know  

Best wishes,
Poetaster D
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6 posted 06-06-2000 09:07 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Marina,

WOW I shutter to think what might have inspired this piece.

Very well written and expressed

 All my love,
Jeffrey

I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

EagleOne
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7 posted 06-06-2000 09:41 PM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

Wow Marina! I love the way you have done this. Powerful stuff!  excellent!

 God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown


Janet Marie
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8 posted 06-06-2000 11:23 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

I took what dreams may come
And you, what you needn’t see
My heart allowed a window
And you, let yours run free

Each night we reveal
Our innermost desires
A promise of a future
But all of you, is what I require
--------------
Whose right, the heart or the head
With the body giving into temptation
--------------------
And do you lie beside the lie
Or does she?
-----------------

oh girl ....I love this poem...
i got a chill when I read it...
its so achingly perfect
you wrote my ache in this gem...
excellent expression here
later poet-gator
jm



 I think I could need - this in my life
I think I'm just scared - that I know too much
I can't relate and that's a problem
I'm feeling ...
If you're gone - maybe it's time to go home
There's an awful lot of breathing room
But I can hardly move
If you're gone - baby you need to come home
cuz there's a little bit of something me...
In everything in you.
~MB20~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~

First__Knight
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9 posted 06-07-2000 02:15 AM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

I found myself in amazement at this.....It is really good.  Love the line..

And do you lie beside the lie
Or does she?


Excellent




 It takes only a minute to get a crush on someone, an hour to like someone, a day to love someone, but it takes a lifetime to forget someone.

Dark Angel
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10 posted 06-07-2000 07:39 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Very very good Marin, love those last two line. Well Done!  

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)


Sudhir Iyer
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11 posted 06-07-2000 08:37 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

This actually 'cuts like a knife'. Sceptic truth, disturbing question, fine poetry.

Marina, this one is truly a good one ...

Take Care,
regards, sudhir

 Hey you, out there in the cold,
Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me?
Hey you, standing in the aisle,
With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me?
Hey you, don't help them to bury the light.
Don't give in without a fight.
Hey you, out there on your own,
Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me?
Hey you, with your ear against the wall,
Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me?
Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone?
Open your heart, I'm coming home....

by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall
Kevin
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12 posted 06-07-2000 08:53 AM       View Profile for Kevin   Email Kevin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kevin

Awesome title
Awesome verse

Still thinking about it,

thanks for the read
Danny Holloway
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13 posted 06-07-2000 11:55 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

~~Marina, nice writing. Your work is never disappointing.  Lots of emotion and soulful expression.


 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

JamesMichael
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14 posted 06-07-2000 03:49 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Marina very well written but I must admit I don't understand the presentation...are you having an affair with a married man?   Silly me..for asking...Made me think about this...I don't want only half of you...all of you is what I require...cause half a glass of wine could never quench my thirst..it would only wet my desire......   James
Corinne
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15 posted 06-07-2000 04:25 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Your best yet, Marina.

Corinne
Marina
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16 posted 06-08-2000 11:49 AM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Your responses for this one are a little overwhelming, so ley me just sat THANK YOU to all of you.  As always your posts mean a great deal to me.

Marina
Gemini
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17 posted 06-08-2000 10:26 PM       View Profile for Gemini   Email Gemini   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gemini

Marina, Just now read your poem and your feelings and mine have a common thread.  I feel for what you have written.  You expressed this very well.
Marina
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18 posted 06-09-2000 01:00 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Gemini, thank you for your response.  Good luck!

Marina
 
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