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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 2000-06-06 06:12 PM


If You Should Wander forth

If you should ever wander forth
Beyond the garden’s edge
And leave this place of bounty love
Where we have laid our heads
Then I shall never wish to breathe
The perfume of a rose
Nor gather blossoms for my eyes
Nor worship joy’s repose

For life would vanish if you left
This nest of Eden home
This space profuse with radiant hues
Below God’s azure dome
Without your love, I’d never more
Recline in petal's soft
To study midnight canopies
Of planets posed aloft

If you should disappear one day
Beyond the primrose hedge
For want of just one wishful step
Outside the garden’s edge
I’d never care to turn an ear
To warbler’s lullaby
Nor would I raise my eyes again
To wonders of the sky

I’d never visit with a  star
Except to ask it why

Elizabeth Santos




[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 06-07-2000).]

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Kit McCallum
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1 posted 2000-06-06 06:50 PM


Oh Elizabeth ... absolutely lovely ... twinning again me thinks, for you've touched my heart deeply with this one.

Best wishes dear heart,
/Kit

Denise
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2 posted 2000-06-06 07:16 PM


Absolutely lovely, Elizabeth! Now that's love!  

Denise

angelsamongus
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since 2000-05-27
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3 posted 2000-06-06 07:21 PM


Elizabeth,
This poem is so full of love, it is very beautiful. Thank You for sharing.
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~
Without your love, I’d never more
Recline in petals soft
To study midnight’s canopy
Of planets posed aloft
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~
~Lori

David2
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4 posted 2000-06-06 08:39 PM


Elizabeth,
    I loved the flow in this work. The imagery was wonderful alos as was the thought so eloquently put forth of possible lost love. Very nice work.
               David2

ellie LeJeune
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5 posted 2000-06-06 08:59 PM


Oh, Liz, This is positively exquisite! I know love like this and it is God's greatest gift. So your poem touches me in a very special way too. Thank you sweet and gifted poetess. Love, Ellie

 02



Marge Tindal
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6 posted 2000-06-06 09:11 PM


Elizabeth, dear Elizabeth~
Talk about a romantic tale.
My, my .... this is so lovely

'Beyond the primrose hedge'
how inspiring !

Check your e-mail, sweet friend.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~




 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


Butterflies_dont_cry
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7 posted 2000-06-06 09:21 PM


Liz*
This is wonderful....you weave such beautiful tales.  Your talent is a gift that you seflessly share with all of us, we are very lucky   Thank you!!

EagleOne
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8 posted 2000-06-06 09:28 PM


I am in awe of your talent Elizabeth

 God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown



Martie
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9 posted 2000-06-06 09:49 PM


Liz--this is so lovely...the imagery exquisite!
Elizabeth Santos
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10 posted 2000-06-07 02:17 AM


Thank you all for your kind comments.
I think the rose arbor at my fron door is inspiring my poetry these days. I don't know what I'll do when those petals fall

Liz

First__Knight
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11 posted 2000-06-07 02:26 AM


Devine.....this is.  Simply Devine!!!

 It takes only a minute to get a crush on someone, an hour to like someone, a day to love someone, but it takes a lifetime to forget someone.


tracie66
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12 posted 2000-06-07 03:28 AM


Elizabeth~
This was written from deep within your beautiful heart and soul.
A tender, loving piece.
Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Elizabeth Santos
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13 posted 2000-06-07 03:35 AM


First Knight,
Your "Devine" warms my heart. You've given the most wonderful compliment in one word
Thank you

Tracee,
Somehow you seem to give a self portrait within you comments. Thank you, dear
Liz

Sudhir Iyer
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14 posted 2000-06-07 03:40 AM


Roll, Roll, Roll, lady, you are on a roll, alright!

Amazed by your subtlety in poetry, Dazzled by the luminousity of the light that you shed through your poetry divine, I watch these lines, stupefied, numbed, scratching my head, what I am doing here??? and I thought I could write....

Regards to you Liz,
Great work,
Sudhir.



 Hey you, out there in the cold,
Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me?
Hey you, standing in the aisle,
With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me?
Hey you, don't help them to bury the light.
Don't give in without a fight.
Hey you, out there on your own,
Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me?
Hey you, with your ear against the wall,
Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me?
Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone?
Open your heart, I'm coming home....

by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall

Elizabeth Santos
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15 posted 2000-06-07 04:51 AM


Sudhir,
I am so humbled by a writer such as you offering such praise. I don't know what to say except that these words were not composed by me but were written by God and happen to come out my pen.I know you know what I mean, because you often write the same way.
Thank you, dear poet for your comments.
Liz

Dark Angel
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16 posted 2000-06-07 06:49 AM


Oh Elizabeth, I'm in awe of your talent. This is absolutley beautiful.  

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)



Kevin
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17 posted 2000-06-07 09:08 AM


this should be permanantly fixated atop the forum so all that venture in and out can see it,

beautiful
no other word for it

Elizabeth Santos
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Pennsylvania
18 posted 2000-06-07 09:41 AM


Dark Angel
Thank you, dear

Kevin,
What a lovely comment.
Thanks so much
Liz

Janet Marie
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19 posted 2000-06-07 09:56 AM


If you should ever wander forth
Beyond the garden’s edge
And leave this place of bounty love
Where we have laid our heads
Then I shall never wish to breathe
The perfume of a rose
Nor gather blossoms for my eyes
Nor worship joy’s repose
-------------
Nor would I raise my eyes again
To wonders of the sky

I’d never visit with a  star
Except to ask it why
-------------

Liz,
this poem takes my breath away...
it is SO BEAUTIFUL and PERFECT...
it is exquisite in its grace of emotions
this is one of the most beautiful poems I've
ever read...
the emotions of those last lines are simply enchanting.
thank you for this lovely gift you share with us.
jm

LngJhnAg
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20 posted 2000-06-07 10:06 AM


Liz - this poem reflects the beauty in you so very well.  Everything you write seems... right.  Its getting to where I can't comment on anything you put to pen without sounding repetitious - Do you see all the trouble you're causing me???
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
21 posted 2000-06-07 10:25 AM


Should the rose petals
outside your door
fade and fall
to earthen floor

never fear.

For the passing
of the rose
is God's choosing
and He chose,

so never fear.

For love and rose
will bloom forth again
which gives reason
and verse to your pen.

So never fear.

~~~~~~~~

Small, albeit heartfelt tribute to what you do so beautifully, Elizabeth.  Thank you.

 Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~


LngJhnAg
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22 posted 2000-06-07 10:52 AM


Sunshine - that was beautiful
Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
23 posted 2000-06-07 03:07 PM


Janet Marie,
Your exuberance lights my day, the way you respond to everyone's poetry, and I thank you for taking time and comment on this poem

LngJhn,
You honor me with your remarks. I'm glad you liked this poem. Thanks

Sunshine,
What a beautiful poem you write!
Thank you so much. You are so sweet
Liz

Corinne
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state of confusion
24 posted 2000-06-07 03:56 PM


Wow!  Awash in tears from your sweet, tortuous words...Definitely one of your best, Liz!

Corinne

Elizabeth Santos
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Pennsylvania
25 posted 2000-06-07 05:53 PM


Corinne, If you liked it, I am so pleased. Thanks so much for reading and commenting.
Liz

Lorraine Nisbet
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since 2000-05-18
Posts 218
Jersey City, NJ USA
26 posted 2000-06-07 06:16 PM



Elizabeth~

Totally tender and beautiful!!

~Lorraine

 
A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur


Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
27 posted 2000-06-07 09:41 PM


Lorraine,
Thanks for reading my verses and for
Your lovely comments. It is much appreciated
Liz

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