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If You Should Wander Forth

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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 06-06-2000 06:12 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

If You Should Wander forth

If you should ever wander forth
Beyond the gardenís edge
And leave this place of bounty love
Where we have laid our heads
Then I shall never wish to breathe
The perfume of a rose
Nor gather blossoms for my eyes
Nor worship joyís repose

For life would vanish if you left
This nest of Eden home
This space profuse with radiant hues
Below Godís azure dome
Without your love, Iíd never more
Recline in petal's soft
To study midnight canopies
Of planets posed aloft

If you should disappear one day
Beyond the primrose hedge
For want of just one wishful step
Outside the gardenís edge
Iíd never care to turn an ear
To warblerís lullaby
Nor would I raise my eyes again
To wonders of the sky

Iíd never visit with a  star
Except to ask it why

Elizabeth Santos




[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 06-07-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Elizabeth Santos - All Rights Reserved
Kit McCallum
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1 posted 06-06-2000 06:50 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Oh Elizabeth ... absolutely lovely ... twinning again me thinks, for you've touched my heart deeply with this one.

Best wishes dear heart,
/Kit
Denise
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2 posted 06-06-2000 07:16 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Absolutely lovely, Elizabeth! Now that's love!  

Denise
angelsamongus
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3 posted 06-06-2000 07:21 PM       View Profile for angelsamongus   Email angelsamongus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit angelsamongus's Home Page   View IP for angelsamongus

Elizabeth,
This poem is so full of love, it is very beautiful. Thank You for sharing.
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~
Without your love, Iíd never more
Recline in petals soft
To study midnightís canopy
Of planets posed aloft
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~
~Lori
David2
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4 posted 06-06-2000 08:39 PM       View Profile for David2   Email David2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for David2

Elizabeth,
    I loved the flow in this work. The imagery was wonderful alos as was the thought so eloquently put forth of possible lost love. Very nice work.
               David2
ellie LeJeune
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5 posted 06-06-2000 08:59 PM       View Profile for ellie LeJeune   Email ellie LeJeune   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ellie LeJeune

Oh, Liz, This is positively exquisite! I know love like this and it is God's greatest gift. So your poem touches me in a very special way too. Thank you sweet and gifted poetess. Love, Ellie

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6 posted 06-06-2000 09:11 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Elizabeth, dear Elizabeth~
Talk about a romantic tale.
My, my .... this is so lovely

'Beyond the primrose hedge'
how inspiring !

Check your e-mail, sweet friend.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~




 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Butterflies_dont_cry
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7 posted 06-06-2000 09:21 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Liz*
This is wonderful....you weave such beautiful tales.  Your talent is a gift that you seflessly share with all of us, we are very lucky   Thank you!!
EagleOne
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8 posted 06-06-2000 09:28 PM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

I am in awe of your talent Elizabeth

 God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown


Martie
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9 posted 06-06-2000 09:49 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Liz--this is so lovely...the imagery exquisite!
Elizabeth Santos
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10 posted 06-07-2000 02:17 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Thank you all for your kind comments.
I think the rose arbor at my fron door is inspiring my poetry these days. I don't know what I'll do when those petals fall

Liz
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11 posted 06-07-2000 02:26 AM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

Devine.....this is.  Simply Devine!!!

 It takes only a minute to get a crush on someone, an hour to like someone, a day to love someone, but it takes a lifetime to forget someone.

tracie66
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12 posted 06-07-2000 03:28 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Elizabeth~
This was written from deep within your beautiful heart and soul.
A tender, loving piece.
Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Elizabeth Santos
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13 posted 06-07-2000 03:35 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

First Knight,
Your "Devine" warms my heart. You've given the most wonderful compliment in one word
Thank you

Tracee,
Somehow you seem to give a self portrait within you comments. Thank you, dear
Liz
Sudhir Iyer
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14 posted 06-07-2000 03:40 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Roll, Roll, Roll, lady, you are on a roll, alright!

Amazed by your subtlety in poetry, Dazzled by the luminousity of the light that you shed through your poetry divine, I watch these lines, stupefied, numbed, scratching my head, what I am doing here??? and I thought I could write....

Regards to you Liz,
Great work,
Sudhir.



 Hey you, out there in the cold,
Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me?
Hey you, standing in the aisle,
With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me?
Hey you, don't help them to bury the light.
Don't give in without a fight.
Hey you, out there on your own,
Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me?
Hey you, with your ear against the wall,
Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me?
Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone?
Open your heart, I'm coming home....

by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall
Elizabeth Santos
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15 posted 06-07-2000 04:51 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sudhir,
I am so humbled by a writer such as you offering such praise. I don't know what to say except that these words were not composed by me but were written by God and happen to come out my pen.I know you know what I mean, because you often write the same way.
Thank you, dear poet for your comments.
Liz
Dark Angel
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16 posted 06-07-2000 06:49 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Oh Elizabeth, I'm in awe of your talent. This is absolutley beautiful.  

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)


Kevin
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17 posted 06-07-2000 09:08 AM       View Profile for Kevin   Email Kevin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kevin

this should be permanantly fixated atop the forum so all that venture in and out can see it,

beautiful
no other word for it
Elizabeth Santos
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18 posted 06-07-2000 09:41 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Dark Angel
Thank you, dear

Kevin,
What a lovely comment.
Thanks so much
Liz
Janet Marie
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19 posted 06-07-2000 09:56 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

If you should ever wander forth
Beyond the gardenís edge
And leave this place of bounty love
Where we have laid our heads
Then I shall never wish to breathe
The perfume of a rose
Nor gather blossoms for my eyes
Nor worship joyís repose
-------------
Nor would I raise my eyes again
To wonders of the sky

Iíd never visit with a  star
Except to ask it why
-------------

Liz,
this poem takes my breath away...
it is SO BEAUTIFUL and PERFECT...
it is exquisite in its grace of emotions
this is one of the most beautiful poems I've
ever read...
the emotions of those last lines are simply enchanting.
thank you for this lovely gift you share with us.
jm
LngJhnAg
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20 posted 06-07-2000 10:06 AM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Liz - this poem reflects the beauty in you so very well.  Everything you write seems... right.  Its getting to where I can't comment on anything you put to pen without sounding repetitious - Do you see all the trouble you're causing me???
Sunshine
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21 posted 06-07-2000 10:25 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Should the rose petals
outside your door
fade and fall
to earthen floor

never fear.

For the passing
of the rose
is God's choosing
and He chose,

so never fear.

For love and rose
will bloom forth again
which gives reason
and verse to your pen.

So never fear.

~~~~~~~~

Small, albeit heartfelt tribute to what you do so beautifully, Elizabeth.  Thank you.

 Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

LngJhnAg
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22 posted 06-07-2000 10:52 AM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Sunshine - that was beautiful
Elizabeth Santos
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23 posted 06-07-2000 03:07 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Janet Marie,
Your exuberance lights my day, the way you respond to everyone's poetry, and I thank you for taking time and comment on this poem

LngJhn,
You honor me with your remarks. I'm glad you liked this poem. Thanks

Sunshine,
What a beautiful poem you write!
Thank you so much. You are so sweet
Liz
Corinne
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24 posted 06-07-2000 03:56 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Wow!  Awash in tears from your sweet, tortuous words...Definitely one of your best, Liz!

Corinne
 
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