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the eye of the needle

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Corazon
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0 posted 06-06-2000 10:06 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Corazon

the eye of the needle

I pull words from
somewhere
and from that same somewhere
deep within
something pushes them
seeking recognition
threading words through
the tiny opening
that refuses closure
stringing them out
piling them into poems
begging
gasping
for understanding
I pull
they push
I collect words
gather the strings
I need gather
I must
for stop they donít
and go back
inside they wonít
and see I cannot
the aching place
from whence they come
and lest it overfill
and explode
stand I with pockets stuffed
picking poems
and no where to put
one more single word
but the ache stills not
pushes its words
some sense to make
it cries out
for me to stop
the insanity
the words
the ache

© Copyright 2000 zoe d. - All Rights Reserved
SpitFire
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1 posted 06-06-2000 12:58 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Holy Moly,...this here is so powerfully written.  I love it. I like the freestyle...I like the emotion...the expression.  Well done. Thank you.  The concept used is great...Take care. *Peace.
amazon_lover
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2 posted 06-06-2000 01:03 PM       View Profile for amazon_lover   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for amazon_lover

Hi
I'm beginning to see the profoundity in poem and I liked it. Thanks for the read. Great poem.

Sincerely
A_L
Sudhir Iyer
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3 posted 06-06-2000 01:06 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

POWERFUL is the singular word to describe this one!

I try hard,
they swirl,
increase force,
to no avail,
force from within,
inner strength,
threaded corners,
don't let go,
words that I
want to place,
in trajected lines,
dejected soul,
painful cries,
slam
dunk
push
pull,
slap
on face
by fate...


sorry for all that, but a powerful piece like this makes me flip off... hope you did not mind the intruding thoughts....

regards, sudhir

[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 06-06-2000).]
Corazon
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4 posted 06-06-2000 01:28 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

spitfire thank you...I never know how my poems will read until I see them reflected int the readers words...

amazonLover, glad you liked  

sudhir, thank you sir, and no...how could I mind an exclamation point to my poem? loved your spontaneous combustion....very powerful in itself!
wayoutwalt
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5 posted 06-06-2000 01:41 PM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

great job corazon try to get this word into that needle...supercalifradgilisticexpealidocious (sp?)
Alle'cram
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6 posted 06-06-2000 02:02 PM       View Profile for Alle'cram   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alle'cram

Corazon,
  This poem, had to click onto it when I saw the title. Wow, this is too much, for I just started doing a study of "the eye of the needle", from the Bible. When I saw your title and read your message, I was in awe for what you said in verse. When I finish my study, if you like, I will email you my thoughts.  Thanks for this one.  Marcy
Corazon
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7 posted 06-06-2000 02:12 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

walt.....ok here goes....you push and I will pull   thanks for the read

alle...thank you much, glad you enjoyed, and yes would like very much for you to mail me your thoughts  
Parker
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8 posted 06-06-2000 02:39 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Corazon, I have to echo the above wow's.... You and Doreen should team up for a poem. Lately I've noticed your styles just plow through and bam I'm exhausted, but satisfied...  

Parker
Corazon
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9 posted 06-07-2000 09:14 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

parker, well can't say that leaving a man exhausted but satisfied is something I am against   thanks  
RainbowGirl
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10 posted 06-07-2000 06:51 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Sweetheart: Just keep your eyes on the cotton, cause when the thread won't go through the needle, maybe the needle is blunt....

LOL at exhausted, give me one of those table tennis balls on elastic or maybe a yoyo...

HUSG
Corazon
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11 posted 06-08-2000 10:02 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

thanks rg...I know...in other words keep trying its got to get better huh? having good friends helps   thanks lady
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