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paradise in a bottle

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My words become unclipped from my tongue
Like the dying words of an unknown sonnet,
Spoke in the voice of a man who's seen too much,
Too much to understand.

The brown bottle sweats in my hand.
Inside lies my best kept secret:
A paradise in a bottle to fog out the pictures
I never took the time to learn.

The liquid is warm. Blood warm.
Salty and hot in my mouth. burning
the insides of my unclipped, drenched,
Unsober, wavering, lie-soaked tongue.

I can imagine a cool palm breeze
Under cool palm shadows on the hot sand of a beach.
Already, that dream and others like it
Are so far out of reach.

Little paradise in a little bottle.
Take me home to sleep.

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1 posted 06-05-2000 11:52 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

My words become unclipped from my tongue
Like the dying words of an unknown sonnet,
Spoke in the voice of a man who's seen too much,
Too much to understand.
The brown bottle sweats in my hand.
Inside lies my best kept secret:
A paradise in a bottle to fog out the pictures
I never took the time to learn.
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Already, that dream and others like it
Are so far out of reach.

Little paradise in a little bottle.
Take me home to sleep.
------------

Mike,
it is for this reason--
the warm tingle in my spine,
the lump in my throat,
the feeling deep in my stomach, and heart, that I read poetry...
that I breathe poetry...
it is poems like this that are my oxygen
I thank you for this breath of poetry.
butterfly slippers
bsquirrel
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2 posted 06-06-2000 12:02 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Thanks for reading. I wrote this today at work after someone gave me a little plastic bottle with a fake palm tree, some sand and mini-shells in it. It's so cool, I was instantly inspired. Of course, the poem has nothing to do with that as much as just drinking, but the title and the "palm shadows on hot sand of a beach" or whatever, came from that.

I went to bed at 1 a.m. last night (this morning). I'm not going to repeat THAT mistake.  

Goodnight, B.S. And god bless (even if you didn't sneeze).

Mike
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3 posted 06-06-2000 01:04 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

well, sigh...this one DOES NOT go on the refrigerator...(full of frosty brown bottles...)but I like, Mike, very much...the voice you use is perfect, without moralizing...awesome, agin, m'friend....
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4 posted 06-06-2000 02:21 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

See, I was about to go to sleep, but a friend called. No, really.   Anyway, I could go for a cold one right now. I have nothing wrong with beer every once in a while. Yum!

'night, S'en.

Mike
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5 posted 06-06-2000 06:47 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Geez, I can relate to this one Mike ... seems everyone takes vacations in our office except me (the woes of a business owner I guess). I even had my nephews bring me back a little bottle of sand from Florida, it sits on my desk at work. If it weren't 6:30 am here ... I'd join you in a cold one!

Best wishes,
/Kit
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6 posted 06-07-2000 12:24 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Kit,
I'd love to.   Here's to you. Man, work is tiring.

Mike
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7 posted 06-08-2000 05:32 PM       View Profile for MagnoliaBlue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for MagnoliaBlue

Hey bsq...

Loved reading your poem,

while I was having a

cold one.  

Thanks!

MagnoliaBlue


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8 posted 06-08-2000 11:40 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Jeez, everyone's able to afford cold ones but me!   Oh well. Glad you enjoyed.

Mike
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Good, realistic, unsweetened poetry....gotta love it. This Bud's for you, sir......
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10 posted 06-08-2000 11:59 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Bal,
I will gladly drink to that.

Mike
 
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