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This Slivered Moon

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Martie
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This Slivered Moon


I could see the slivered moon
in the western sky resplendent
and in the shadow thus displayed
reverence spoke as purple iris
knelt together petals folded  
and behind them in the bower
sunflowers bowed like dolls with yellow hair
tired from sunlight’s hold on watching.

And then the magic evening breezes
touched the sage and released such magic
frog voices spilled from off the mountains
across the canyon’s echoed chamber
and stillness folded in my vision
and brought me too complete delighting
quenched the hunger of my spirit
touched my moonlit face beguiling.

Oh slivered moon with shadowed light
dream me perfect in your drenching
breeze this spirit with this loving
touch of magic moving heaven
beguile my skin to soft with light
engorge my sleep with fragrant dream
keep me in your quiet watch
as day succumbs to nighttime’s peace.



 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)


[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 06-05-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
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1 posted 06-05-2000 09:09 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie~
Oh, my !  
How absolutely beautiful ...
and my favorite subject !  
You are the best !
Unequivocally ... the best !

'frog voices spilled from off the mountains
across the canyon’s echoed chamber
and stillness folded in my vision
and brought me too complete delighting'

And you, dear poetess ... have brought me
to complete delighting !
God, this is beautiful ....
I effuse, I know .... but oh, my !

'sunflowers bowed like dolls with yellow hair
tired from sunlight’s hold on watching'

If I don't stop now ... I'll end up copying
the entire poem ! !

It's printing now ... and tomorrow it
goes in a frame for my office.
Beautiful, Martie.
Love you ... and thank you for this gift.
~*Marge*~




 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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2 posted 06-05-2000 09:16 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Martie,

What an absolutely beautiful picture you have painted!!!  Thank you for sharing it.  Just lovely.  I hope that you have very sweet dreams, my friend.  Fabulous writing!  

Lone Wolf


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3 posted 06-05-2000 10:11 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Another classic, Martie!  So beautiful, truly!

Corinne
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4 posted 06-05-2000 10:23 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

This is ridiculous. NO  ONE continually writes this good! You have a team of writers living in your house...don't lie to me!

This is precious... the moon and you...two heavenly bodies...the perfect combination.
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5 posted 06-05-2000 10:29 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

This is absolutely enchanting, Martie!  I am totally in love with this....especially the last verse.  Pure magic.  

 *Krista Knutson*

"Thought is real, physical is the illusion..." Albert from ~What Dreams May Come~


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6 posted 06-05-2000 11:34 PM       View Profile for Dusk Treader   Email Dusk Treader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dusk Treader

Wow this is beautiful!  Your metaphors are quite amazing and the imagery is astounding!  *Applauds*

 Abrahm Simons

"In a moment lies eternity
And in a kiss resides forever" - Krista Knutson my bestest friend!
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7 posted 06-06-2000 12:15 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Martie... you have graced us with a slice of
slendor.  I have reread three times now and am still in awe.  What an absolutely beautiful poem.
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8 posted 06-06-2000 02:58 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

where do you live my dear poet...
cause I need to come and look out your window
my view here is missing something...
oh i know--
YOUR poetic vision...*smile*
*sigh*
ok me and my poet envy will go to bed now
sweet dreams martie-gator  
jm

btw...did i mention this poem was exquisite..
and perfect...
Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 06-06-2000 04:24 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Poetic Perfection
Plus all those things Marge said
You truly are the best, my dear
You left me with wondrous visions, the moon from your eyes is a moon that no one else sees, and then you write it
Love liz
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10 posted 06-06-2000 05:14 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Oh MArtie, Beautiful, beautiful!

and this...
Oh slivered moon with shadowed light
dream me perfect in your drenching
breeze this spirit with this loving
touch of magic moving heaven
beguile my skin to soft with light
engorge my sleep with fragrant dream
keep me in your quiet watch
as day succumbs to nighttime’s peace.

*sighhhh*
Keep them coming!!  

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)


Kit McCallum
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11 posted 06-06-2000 05:37 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Simply beautiful Martie ... I echo all above comments ... lovely verse!

Best wishes,
/Kit
Elizabeth Santos
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12 posted 06-06-2000 09:43 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sorry, but the slivered moon isn't sinking just yet, so I'm putting it high in yhe sky
Liz
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Oh, this is lovely...shine on  
Denise
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14 posted 06-06-2000 10:20 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Martie this is absoulutely beautiful! Such a lovely picture you have created!

Denise
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Thank you so much all you loved and lovely poets for such wonderful comments about this poem.  Marge, thank you dear for sending me a printable version and for hanging it on your wall..how very special, and Liz for replying twice...wow!  What a great start to a new day!
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16 posted 06-06-2000 08:56 PM       View Profile for Wicked Witch of the East   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wicked Witch of the East

'Tis a beautiful poem you've written here that deserves a bump back up to the top.
Elizabeth Santos
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17 posted 06-07-2000 04:35 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Another day's gone by
And the slivered moon rises high in the sky once more
So that all the world may come know the wonders of a slivered moon through Martie's eyes.
And that is truly a wonder to behold

Liz
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Hey witchy--you're not so wicked after all...thanks for the bump.

Liz--I'm so glad that you like this poem...no one ever replied three times before...thanks sweet lady!
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19 posted 06-07-2000 06:11 PM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

I am new here at this forum but I have to say that when it comes to honest heartfelt poetry that this is down to earth and beautiful. No self righteous display of incongruous vocabulary, just very tastefully done.
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