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sea_of_okc
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0 posted 06-05-2000 07:14 PM       View Profile for sea_of_okc   Email sea_of_okc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for sea_of_okc

Lost and alone I silently shout
Searching all over but no one's about
A landscape so black that I cannot see
I believe I may wander throughout eternity

Bleak and barren with no sign of hope
Not sure how long I'll be able to cope
I can't help but think that nobody cares
I'm stuck in this place with naught by my fears

A wall on my left and one to my right
A tumble of rocks in the darkness of night
I trudge on through this infernal maze
Don't know where I am, just lost in the haze

Without meaning or purpose walls have been built
The ground is a mixture of ashes and silt
Finally a door, so I enter the room
Silent and empty and cold as a tomb

I sit to reflect and tears fill my eyes
A gut-wrenching sob as I realize
This hopelessly empty, barren, black hole
This landscape I'm in, my very own soul...



 Steven Seaman
To thine own self be true...


© Copyright 2000 Steven Thomas Seaman - All Rights Reserved
Tennessee Angel
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since 06-03-2000
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1 posted 06-05-2000 07:16 PM       View Profile for Tennessee Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tennessee Angel

Oooo...kinda sent chills down my spine there.  I loved how desciptive it was!  Nice work!

 "That man has shown himself great who has never grieved in evil days and never bewailed his destiny." --Seneca
amazon_lover
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2 posted 06-05-2000 07:20 PM       View Profile for amazon_lover   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for amazon_lover

Hi SOK,
It's a bad situation. I feel exactly the same way empty walls and minds moving around,life is a misery . Just live untl you find better times.

Sincerely
A_L
Lone Wolf
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3 posted 06-05-2000 07:24 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Sea,

What powerful writing and images you conjure up in your poem.  Wow....fabulous writing.  I hope you realize that you are never truly alone.  You may be surprised at just how many people care about you.  Hang in there...there will be sunshine one day.  

Lone Wolf


 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith
Janet Marie
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4 posted 06-06-2000 11:08 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

dark and powerful imagery here Sea,
both visual and emotional
excellent rhyme flow as well
liked the landscape metaphor too
you have expressed these emotions
painfully well.
we do build up walls of protection around us
when we've been hurt.
hopefuly we heal in time and dont linger too long in the isolation
I believe our writing helps us to heal.
take care, jm

 I think I could need - this in my life
I think I'm just scared - that I know too much
I can't relate and that's a problem
I'm feeling ...
If you're gone - maybe it's time to go home
There's an awful lot of breathing room
But I can hardly move
If you're gone - baby you need to come home
cuz there's a little bit of something me...
In everything in you.
~MB20~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~

amazon_lover
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5 posted 06-06-2000 11:13 AM       View Profile for amazon_lover   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for amazon_lover

Hi Sea
Isolation is what we've created in ourself. World is beautiful around us and enjoy it. Step up out of your prison and reach with your soul to heavens above.

Sincerely
A_L
wayoutwalt
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6 posted 06-06-2000 11:33 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

hey sea!!! wavin at sea..long time no sea..hehe anyways very good poem as usual sea when sea cries its a salty sea o man i better stop it sea yeah sea what are yuh a copper sea yeah yeah
poetFemmeFatale
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7 posted 06-06-2000 11:53 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Hey Sea of OKC....this one is quite chilling to say the least.  You painted some powerful dark imagery there.  I could see you in that tomb man...
I love how you wrapped this thing up at the end too.  You certainly have a way with words from within.  Keep writing, if you're really needing to vent.  Soooo glad to see you back.  Have I told you that enough yet??  
Sunshine
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8 posted 06-06-2000 11:56 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Sea, this was quite powerful, and very lonely...vivid imagery...well done!

 Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

Aimster
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9 posted 06-06-2000 02:23 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

sea~
this one just SCREAMED out to me
and i had to read it twice. wow!
such vivid imagery and intense emotion
you have woven into this one. if this
is "real life" i hope you
know you are not alone.
and if it isn't well you convey the
message and feelings extremely well. at
any rate awesome piece of poetry.
take care and best wishes.
amy  


 "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."



sea_of_okc
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10 posted 06-06-2000 05:09 PM       View Profile for sea_of_okc   Email sea_of_okc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sea_of_okc

Thank you all for your comments and support    I guess we all write from our experiences but before you worry too much about me be assured I have already been thru the darkness and emerged on the other side, just did not write about it until now. There were a series of 'endings' in my life recently but now I am looking forward to new beginnings.

Femme - you can never tell me enough

Walt - very nice to see you again too
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