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I Walked Right Out the Front Door

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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 06-05-2000 09:44 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

I walked out of his heart

I could tell by his demeanor
By the wrinkles on his brow
That he didnít seem to need me
As I needed him somehow

He chose another love it seems
His eyes shown pewter steel
He pursed his lips and nodded
Like he blew a business deal

My love was not intentional
He knew that from the start
The day I tripped and fell
Into his unsuspecting heart

It was just so warm and soothing there
A home that I would choose
I had settled back in comfortís bliss
Just kicking up my shoes

The day she came, no need explain
What I could figure out
I politely said good by to him
And found my own way out

I heard that he was  married
And he never spoke my name
For his heart could only hold one love
And one it  full contained

One day we meet by accident
He seemed to beg me hear
How truly blessed his life was
Full of love all of those years

But his brow was etched with sorrow
And his eyes an icy mist
As he told of his unhappiness
Though his heart seemed full of bliss

He said I know this sounds so strange
But I swear to God above
That though my heart is empty
It still overflows with  love

I said your heartís the only one
In which Iíd ever dwell
He looked at me with peircing eyes
As they began to swell

I said I walked out your front door
That day she had me part
Then sprinting round the back
Crawled though a window of your heart

Elizabeth Santos

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Sunshine
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1 posted 06-05-2000 09:50 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Oh, this is very, very good...and revenge at its best!  You go, Elizabeth!

 Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

WhtDove
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2 posted 06-05-2000 10:23 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Oh Liz! I have no words to define this one!
It all just came together, the rhyme, the words, all of it. Left a big footprint on my heart.  This was awesome, I love it!
angelswing
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3 posted 06-05-2000 10:32 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelswing

'Sniff'
What a truly spectacular poem, I loved reading every line of it, it read like a story . With all the badness around me that poem just brought me away from it all - the stress, the pain and the worry . I can't thank you enough for the sanctuary your poetry has offered me .
L.of.L. Tom .



 Insanity is a perfectly normal responce to an abnormal world -R.D.Laing.-
passing shadows
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4 posted 06-05-2000 11:02 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

nice, Elizabeth...I suppose I've been on both sides of what you are writing of. It's very well expressed.

 ~shadows dance by the light within~

SpitFire
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5 posted 06-05-2000 11:10 AM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Elizabeth,...this here poem tells quite a story.  Wonderful writing.  Truly a great read.  Thanks.
Poertree
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6 posted 06-05-2000 11:13 AM       View Profile for Poertree   Email Poertree   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poertree

Liz this is really very good, the meter and rhyme are excellent, it just flows on and on faultlessly .. i must say though i'm a little confused by sunshine's comments ..lol... are we reading the same poem!!??  

I got from this exactly the opposite of "revenge" .. more like immediate forgiveness and an overwhelming continuing love even in the face of loss, then eventually a coming together again .. the last stanza was just great ...

quote:
I said I walked out your front door
That day she had me part
Then sprinting round the back
Crawled though a window of your heart


... i love happy endings           

wonderful job Liz

Philip



[This message has been edited by Poertree (edited 06-05-2000).]
Corazon
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7 posted 06-05-2000 11:48 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

wow, this is beautiful writing....the tricks the heart can play, and the lessons we learn from the pain...sigh...beautifully written
Martie
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8 posted 06-05-2000 01:19 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Wow!  Liz...this is masterfully done, dear...and the last line...superb!!
Corinne
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9 posted 06-05-2000 01:39 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Life can be so complicated, can it not?

This poem is heart aching and soul taking, most excellent!

Corinne
Sudhir Iyer
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10 posted 06-05-2000 02:31 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Liz,

U DUNNIT again, WOW, what else can I say, 'xcept this is beautifully done...

regards, sudhir

 Hey you, out there in the cold,
Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me?
Hey you, standing in the aisle,
With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me?
Hey you, don't help them to bury the light.
Don't give in without a fight.
Hey you, out there on your own,
Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me?
Hey you, with your ear against the wall,
Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me?
Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone?
Open your heart, I'm coming home....

by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall
Alle'cram
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11 posted 06-05-2000 11:28 PM       View Profile for Alle'cram   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alle'cram

Liz, Wow, I just love it. It flows with so much story! Great, great job on this piece.
No hesitation, boldly walked out the door.........Loved it. marcy
Tennessee Angel
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12 posted 06-05-2000 11:32 PM       View Profile for Tennessee Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tennessee Angel

Oh, Perfection!  

"I'll leave...but I'll be damned if you'll ever forget me."

What games the heart can play.

 "That man has shown himself great who has never grieved in evil days and never bewailed his destiny." --Seneca
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13 posted 06-05-2000 11:47 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Ho hum. So what? Another great poem by that Santos woman. Big deal. It happens every day!! BORING!!!!

Liz, please keep boring me for years to come!!!
Elizabeth Santos
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14 posted 06-06-2000 04:09 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Gosh, your responsses overwhelm. Thank you all so much for reading and commenting. Philip got the story right and Tom, when things get to be too much, poetry is a great outlet. It allows you to vent the spirit and it truly does take you away from all those troubles, many of which aren't important. and those that are can often reap a new perspective. Glad you enjoyed
Liz
Kit McCallum
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15 posted 06-06-2000 06:11 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Beautifully written story, and great content ... loved the flow and rhythm Elizabeth!

Best wishes,
/Kit
Denise
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16 posted 06-06-2000 09:33 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very beautiful, Elizabeth! But of course!  

Denise
Elizabeth Santos
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17 posted 06-06-2000 09:41 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Kit,
THanks so much, Glad you liked it

Denise, Thank you dear,
All is well here. Thanks for everything
Liz
 
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