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Changing Seasons (for J.M.'s challenge)

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Butterflies_dont_cry
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0 posted 06-05-2000 06:47 AM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry



I've come to a place
In my life today
Where sadness and pain replace
The happiness you brought my way

You said you'd never go
That you'd be here
I trusted you so
And you took away my fear

You broke my dreams
And crushed my soul
I'm alone it seems
And will never be whole

I thought you were my reason
For life and breath
The changing season
Now becomes my inner death

You killed the hope and the dreams
You laughingly took it all away
Without second thought it seems
As if you knew it would end this way

So walk away, don't look back
And give no thought to me
While I lay here in the black
Hiding so you won't see

Soon the season will turn
And then I'll once again shine
But give me a moment to burn
In the pain that you have made mine


This is my favorite because it was my turning point, in life and in poetry...Thank you S.S. for making me dig!!


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Kit McCallum
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1 posted 06-05-2000 06:54 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Our favorites seem to be the poems that had a sentimental attachment, same with mine that I posted Butterflies.  This was a wonderful verse ... I particularly liked your last verse:

"Soon the season will turn
And then I'll once again shine
But give me a moment to burn
In the pain that you have made mine"

Positive outlook at the end to move forward ... well done!

Best wishes,
/Kit
EagleOne
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Between a laugh and a tear...


2 posted 06-05-2000 07:27 AM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

Butterfly.....This one still overwhelms me when I read it.........

 God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown


ESP
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Posts 2574
Floating gently on a cloud....


3 posted 06-05-2000 07:32 AM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

Butterflies DC, this is a beautiful poem...no problem in seeing why it would be a favorite, I can feel the positive shining in thru the pain. Lovely!!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."
Janet Marie
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4 posted 06-05-2000 08:16 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

now that wasn't so hard was it LOL
(ducking as SS throws shoe at screen)  

perfect pick girl...
heres to digging deep and turning points...
heres to butterflies taking flight
thanx for picking one for me...
love ya girl
later,
me

 I think I could need - this in my life
I think I'm just scared - that I know too much
I can't relate and that's a problem
I'm feeling ...
If you're gone - maybe it's time to go home
There's an awful lot of breathing room
But I can hardly move
If you're gone - baby you need to come home
cuz there's a little bit of something me...
In everything in you.
~MB20~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~

Aimster
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since 02-19-2000
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Charlotte, NC


5 posted 06-05-2000 08:55 AM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

Butterflies DC~

This was an excellent choice to
JM's challenge. I really loved this poem-
full of such sadness YET also full of such
hope for tomorrow. I am glad that you had
a turning point and dug down deep into your
inner-self...that is not an easy thing to do
I admire you and wish you much love and
happiness for the future. Now if Janet would
let us take a breather...that'd be nice lol.
Just kidding Jan...ya know I love you. Great poem you got here.
Amy  


 "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."



Butterflies_dont_cry
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6 posted 06-05-2000 02:56 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Thank You to All      

brian madden
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7 posted 06-05-2000 05:48 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

WOW words straight for the heart. thanks for sharing a wonderful poem, I really love the last verse. We all have to have time alone to release our pain before we continue living.


Soon the season will turn
And then I'll once again shine
But give me a moment to burn
In the pain that you have made mine

 ------------------------
"I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Libraries gave us power
Then work came and made us free
What price now for a shallow piece of dignity"
Nicky Wire, A design for Life.

manic street preachers
"Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany
Culture, alienation, boredom and despair"

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.


amazon_lover
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since 04-09-2000
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8 posted 06-05-2000 05:54 PM       View Profile for amazon_lover   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for amazon_lover

Hi
They were really beautiful words. I begin to love nature when I lost my love. Eventhough I'm alone I'm beginning to like it for it'll change only with seasons but human minds take only a fraction of a second to change. It's all sh**.

Sincerely
A_L
Dark Angel
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9 posted 06-05-2000 07:07 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Butterflies DC beautiful words straight from your heart and soul.. Gorgeous! Well Done  

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)


 
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