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You, a River

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Dark Angel
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0 posted 06-05-2000 01:15 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Dark Angel




You
   a river,
fields and woodland
          surrounded,
     here I reside
       in spirit

Like a swan
    that glides
  imperfectly upon
       the rise and fall
of you, I struggle to feed
and survive from
   the banks of
        your flow

I'll travel your waters
   upstream
             and
                 down
    like a water-bird
     I will live
        the rush
                 of you




 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)


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Poet deVine
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1 posted 06-05-2000 01:19 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Such serenity and flow...a lovely poem..makes me literally write slower..smile...listen for the rush of water.  Beautiful!  
Irish Rose
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2 posted 06-05-2000 07:28 AM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

this was simply a waterfall of emotion, I loved it!!!!

 Kathleen
indy31_99@yahoo.com

tracie66
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3 posted 06-05-2000 07:36 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

WOW...This is very well written
May your rivers always run deep and never become dry.
Happy days  
Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


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4 posted 06-05-2000 07:39 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

DarkAngel~
Absolutely BEAUTIFUL !
What a flow of emotion ...
I love the way your thoughts carried me.
~*Marge*~


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Sudhir Iyer
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5 posted 06-05-2000 07:45 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Dark Angel,

This is a nice one here, I am glad I read it.
Loved these lines:
I'll travel your waters
   upstream
             and
                 down
    like a water-bird
     I will live
        the rush
                 of you

Regards, sudhir


 Hey you, out there in the cold,
Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me?
Hey you, standing in the aisle,
With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me?
Hey you, don't help them to bury the light.
Don't give in without a fight.
Hey you, out there on your own,
Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me?
Hey you, with your ear against the wall,
Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me?
Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone?
Open your heart, I'm coming home....

by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall
WhtDove
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6 posted 06-05-2000 10:18 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Angel girl, your words leave a rush of emotion. This is totally awesome!!

'I will live the rush of you.'  Most excellent line!
angelswing
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7 posted 06-05-2000 10:26 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelswing

I loved the poem, it has a great rythem and the deep metaphors made me shiver with delight, absolutely beutiful in everyway . Why is it I can never find this feeling myself ? Thanks for making me juder .
L.of.L. Tom .
( I am going to try doing a smiley so it may not work ) .

;-)


 Insanity is a perfectly normal responce to an abnormal world -R.D.Laing.-
SpitFire
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8 posted 06-05-2000 12:52 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~What a beautiful, beautiful poem.
*I will live
the rush
of you....
*I love this.  Take care. *Peace.
Martie
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9 posted 06-05-2000 01:33 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Oh, I think this is one of my favorites of yours...just so perfectly well-done!! Bravo!
Dark Angel
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10 posted 06-05-2000 08:03 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Sharon, thanks so very much hon   and also for the beautiful E-card    your comments always mean so much.

Irish Rose, glad you loved it! Thank you!  

Tracie, Thanks hon  

Marge, I'm glad to hear that my thoughts did carry you   Thank you!  

Sudhir, glad you liked, thank you!  

Hey Angel girl, Thank you for your lovely reply  

Angelswings, Wow, glad to have made you shuder!!  Thank you for your lovely reply, I do appreciate it so.  

Spitfire, Thank you, Peace  

WOW, thank you Martie!  

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)


Lone Wolf
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11 posted 06-05-2000 08:11 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

DA,

I am riding that wave of water behind you, my friend.  Great images and beaultiful writing!!  

Lone Wolf


 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith
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12 posted 02-15-2001 12:25 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

This is stunning, and I want this one, Maree! Into my library!
Jamie
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13 posted 04-01-2001 05:56 PM       View Profile for Jamie   Email Jamie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jamie's Home Page   View IP for Jamie

me too---

"Or, like the thief of fire from heaven,
Wilt thou withstand the shock?
And share with him - the unforgiven-
His vulture and his rock?"

"lord by

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