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The Reason is Unfolded
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The Reason is Unfolded |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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This poem is one of my favorites... The Reason is Unfolded The path is serpentine and sometimes furtive to unsure feet treading. Sometimes I can see the breath of beginning down the slope across the tarn of newness nestled. It is like the tremble and flux of a smoky song, a nebulous thing, unsure of direction. Look back, down into the vortex of a mother’s birthing scream, look down into the eyes of fear and say how? How do I keep climbing life’s frail rock and stony ridge and the moon so close now it’s portence is holy and lingering and I will never see it again like this? I think and see frailty in the thinness of the skin that breaks and bleeds my effort. Oh, but when I sing the sky smiles and this heart of days is listening, listening still to answers that beauty defines and tomorrow is high, a ridge, so clever in it’s serendipity that I hear and finally understand that the answer is to question and the reason is unfolded from simple strive. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
WOW, a powerful poem. Life be harsh at times but we must rise to the challenge. wonderful piece. Look back, down into the vortex of a mother’s birthing scream, look down into the eyes of fear and say how? How do I keep climbing life’s frail rock and stony ridge and the moon so close now it’s portence is holy and lingering and I will never see it again like this? I think and see frailty in the thinness of the skin that breaks and bleeds my effort. I especially loved the last few lines. that I hear and finally understand that the answer is to question and the reason is unfolded from simple strive. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers "Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany Culture, alienation, boredom and despair" |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful, Martie! Absolutely beautiful! Your talent is amazing! It was great talking to you today on the phone! Now I can put a voice as well as a face to your poetry! Great Southern Cal accent ya got there too!  Denise |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I think and see frailty in the thinness of the skin that breaks and bleeds my effort. Oh, but when I sing the sky smiles and this heart of days is listening, listening still to answers that beauty defines and tomorrow is high, a ridge, so clever in it’s serendipity that I hear and finally understand that the answer is to question and the reason is unfolded from simple strive. ----------------- Martie, this is amazing...truly such deep reflections.. thank you for sharing this wisdom for the challenge... take care-kind poet jm I think I could need - this in my life I think I'm just scared - that I know too much I can't relate and that's a problem I'm feeling ... If you're gone - maybe it's time to go home There's an awful lot of breathing room But I can hardly move If you're gone - baby you need to come home cuz there's a little bit of something me... In everything in you. ~MB20~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Exquisite, wonderful, splendorous, a masterpiece, in case you haven't figured out my friend, I think this is one heck of a poem. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
I can see why this is one of your favorites, it is a fantastic poem, Martie! Corinne |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
brian--yes, life can be harsh...but that's also what makes it so sweet. Denise--wonderful talking to you too...such deep tones to you, Philadelphia girl. Janet Marie--I am always so tickled by your sweet replies. Mike--Have you been playing with your dictionary again?...thanks for all those words of praise...You're the best! Corinne--I'm so glad you liked it. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ 'It is like the tremble and flux of a smoky song, a nebulous thing, unsure of direction.' Well, you sure found 'direction' with this one. Enchanting thoughts to mesmerize. 'Oh, but when I sing the sky smiles and this heart of days is listening' ROCKing along ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Another masterpiece, another gem One more treasure from your pen From the southern Cal expressions To Denises's deepest tones In between I sat there listening To two poets on the phone With perceptions of a hungry hawk Without the eagle eyes The two hewned in on every word Consumed each others lives Then Pepper got into the scene And she and martie talked a while About a lot of things With laughter they just carried on In giddy schoolgirl pranks While I sat calmly in between them Filling in the blanks It was lots of fun Denise, Shannon, and Martie Love you much Liz |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes, I think 'masterpiece' fits perfectly |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marge--You rock too, sweet lady...and you have the best hush puppie recipe around!! Liz--I loved talking to you and Denise--thanks for thinking of me. passing shadows--thank you so much for such a lovely comment! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Martie, I do so love your poetry so much, you make me take such deep breaths. Wonderful, Beautiful as always. Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhMartieSis~ 'Oh, but when I sing the sky smiles and this heart of days is listening, listening still to answers that beauty defines and tomorrow is high, a ridge, so clever in it’s serendipity that I hear and finally understand that the answer is to question and the reason is unfolded from simple strive.' Such beauty you are !!!! *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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