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Jana Tovey
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since 2000-05-30
Posts 257
USA

0 posted 2000-06-04 09:12 AM


When we meet don’t tell me what profession you’re in
don’t tell me about your hobbies or the books you’ve read
don’t even tell me what music you like to listen to...
These things don’t truly define you.

Tell me, instead, what your dreams are filled up with
and in the long part of the night, when you can’t sleep,
what do you ache for, what do you long to do,
what place do you long to be at?

Tell me of the deep sorrows that have touched your soul
and of how you coped with them...did you face them
and grow from them...or did they defeat you,
causing you to lie down and die within?

If we meet and you can not tell me these things,
we might as well walk on...I will not pry them from you
they must come freely and honestly, from your heart,
else we will never truly know one another.

© Copyright 2000 Jana Tovey - All Rights Reserved
Mike
Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462

1 posted 2000-06-04 09:16 AM


Nicely written.  Enjoyed.  Unfortunately, most of us do hide behind our little walls and not reveal our inner selves.
netswan
Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
2 posted 2000-06-04 09:39 AM


Lovely Poem, Jana - wonderful of you to
want to know a person so well!

~netswan

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-06-04 09:39 AM


jana...
I HAD to read this just by the title alone...
ache is my middle name...*smile*
I love the premise of this...
and this is why I love poetry so much...
whe can share these things of ourselves
in our poem and our words that we might not
other wise be able to
wonderful writing
take care
jm(queen of ache)

 I think I could need - this in my life
I think I'm just scared - that I know too much
I can't relate and that's a problem
I'm feeling ...
If you're gone - maybe it's time to go home
There's an awful lot of breathing room
But I can hardly move
If you're gone - baby you need to come home
cuz there's a little bit of something me...
In everything in you.
~MB20~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~


Honeybee
Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA
4 posted 2000-06-04 09:46 AM



My God, this is an amazing poem. It was the title that caught my eye, and I am glad that it did.  You have shed new light on relationships, to truly want ot know someone, their soul and their longings. I re-read your poem twice, it is that good.  And if you don't mind, I am printing it out to keep in my poetry book.  I love it!  This poem encompasses so much and it is truly wise indeed and gives a different perspective.  Thanks for posting this.  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee


[This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 06-04-2000).]

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