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0 posted 06-04-2000 03:30 AM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for lucky

Star tangled among the high-branched leafless cherry
I watched from the lattice deck sparrows tarry

[This message has been edited by lucky (edited 06-11-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Dale W. Gwaltney - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 06-04-2000 04:53 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

THIS IS SO RICH...don't even know where to begin--won't try to start...guess we all just got lucky tonite....and yep, I printed it....
Kit McCallum
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2 posted 06-04-2000 07:10 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

So flowing ... so picturesque ... so intense ... so well done!  Loved this Lucky!

Best wishes,
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3 posted 06-04-2000 09:07 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Enjoyed.  Have to admit I don't even know your art...  knew a Jim once, but he moved to Tupalo. In any event, twas an good poem you posted for us to read.
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4 posted 06-04-2000 10:50 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

What's not to like ?
Everything you do is art ..
a canvas of vividity.

'Tiaras arrayed in morning mist'

A crowning for any morning !
You rock BIG TIME, my friend.

Love ya' little
Love ya' arty
Love ya' the same
You little 'smarty' !

*LOL at Mike !
Love ya'

 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~

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5 posted 06-04-2000 11:44 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Wow! are just the best, yep!  The best!!
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6 posted 06-04-2000 04:19 PM       View Profile for MagnoliaBlue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for MagnoliaBlue


I don't know about not caring for your art or what that's all about...but I do know that I love this. Well done !
Thanks for the read!!  

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7 posted 06-05-2000 07:57 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

A wonderous piece
This is art (way to go)!!!
I always like the depth of our work.

Tangled in time
Tangled in line
Tangled in your art so fine

 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

[This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 06-05-2000).]
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8 posted 06-05-2000 06:06 PM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

This is such a rich poem - overflowing with feeling and wonderful analogies and metaphors.  There is so much in your mind, honey!  After nearly thirty-eight years, I know that if we live to be a hundred, I'll still be amazed by you.  I love you with all my heart.  And I love your poetry!  (The beautiful art too, goes without saying!)

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9 posted 06-05-2000 06:16 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

I know that it is going to take a while for all of this to sink in with my slow mind and to even begin to understand the whole poem. After two readings this is still somewhat a mystery to me. there is a lot in poem and I am appreciating the wonderful images. I am going to print this one off, if you don't mind. for the moment I will just wow...left me breathless wonderful poem.

"I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Libraries gave us power
Then work came and made us free
What price now for a shallow piece of dignity"
Nicky Wire, A design for Life.

manic street preachers
"Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany
Culture, alienation, boredom and despair"

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.

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10 posted 06-06-2000 10:26 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

I love your work, but read it anyway   One word...
This is absolutely wonderful in its use of metaphor, imagery, and internal and external rhyme (just enough to keep the flow going without stressing rhyme at all) Need I say more other than the fact I loved it?

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 06-06-2000).]
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11 posted 06-06-2000 11:49 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

This is probably one of the finest of yours I've read yet...the way you styled this one, made it a bit easier to follow the depth of your thoughts too!     Very very breathtaking imagery...

 "Fantasies enrich our lives to the fullest, but true satisfaction comes from creating your own story in the real world! Live out your fantasies & make a storybook with beautiful pictures for the world to enjoy! -poetFemme

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state of confusion

12 posted 06-06-2000 02:47 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

I agree with PoetFemmeFetale, the breaking down of the poem into stanzas makes it easier for the eye for follow, and this is a very beautiful poem TO Follow!

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