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lucky
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since 2000-01-17
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Idaho

0 posted 2000-06-04 03:30 AM


Star tangled among the high-branched leafless cherry
I watched from the lattice deck sparrows tarry

[This message has been edited by lucky (edited 06-11-2000).]
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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

1 posted 2000-06-04 04:53 AM


THIS IS SO RICH...don't even know where to begin--won't try to start...guess we all just got lucky tonite....and yep, I printed it....
Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
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2 posted 2000-06-04 07:10 AM


So flowing ... so picturesque ... so intense ... so well done!  Loved this Lucky!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Mike
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since 1999-06-19
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3 posted 2000-06-04 09:07 AM


Enjoyed.  Have to admit I don't even know your art...  knew a Jim once, but he moved to Tupalo. In any event, twas an good poem you posted for us to read.
Marge Tindal
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Florida's Foreverly Shores
4 posted 2000-06-04 10:50 AM


Lucky~
What's not to like ?
Everything you do is art ..
a canvas of vividity.

'Tiaras arrayed in morning mist'

A crowning for any morning !
You rock BIG TIME, my friend.

Love ya' little
Love ya' arty
Love ya' the same
You little 'smarty' !

*LOL at Mike !
Love ya'
~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


Martie
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California
5 posted 2000-06-04 11:44 AM


Wow!  Lucky...you are just the best, yep!  The best!!
MagnoliaBlue
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since 2000-05-12
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6 posted 2000-06-04 04:19 PM


Lucky...

I don't know about not caring for your art or what that's all about...but I do know that I love this. Well done !
Thanks for the read!!  

MagnoliaBlue

tracie66
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
Australia
7 posted 2000-06-05 07:57 AM


Lucky~
A wonderous piece
This is art (way to go)!!!
I always like the depth of our work.
Tracie~
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Tangled in time
Tangled in line
Tangled in your art so fine

 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe




[This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 06-05-2000).]

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 997
northern mountains, Idaho
8 posted 2000-06-05 06:06 PM


This is such a rich poem - overflowing with feeling and wonderful analogies and metaphors.  There is so much in your mind, honey!  After nearly thirty-eight years, I know that if we live to be a hundred, I'll still be amazed by you.  I love you with all my heart.  And I love your poetry!  (The beautiful art too, goes without saying!)


brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
9 posted 2000-06-05 06:16 PM


I know that it is going to take a while for all of this to sink in with my slow mind and to even begin to understand the whole poem. After two readings this is still somewhat a mystery to me. there is a lot in poem and I am appreciating the wonderful images. I am going to print this one off, if you don't mind. for the moment I will just wow...left me breathless wonderful poem.

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"I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Libraries gave us power
Then work came and made us free
What price now for a shallow piece of dignity"
Nicky Wire, A design for Life.

manic street preachers
"Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany
Culture, alienation, boredom and despair"

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.



hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
10 posted 2000-06-06 10:26 AM


I love your work, but read it anyway   One word...
MASTERFUL!!
This is absolutely wonderful in its use of metaphor, imagery, and internal and external rhyme (just enough to keep the flow going without stressing rhyme at all) Need I say more other than the fact I loved it?

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 06-06-2000).]

poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
11 posted 2000-06-06 11:49 AM


This is probably one of the finest of yours I've read yet...the way you styled this one, made it a bit easier to follow the depth of your thoughts too!     Very very breathtaking imagery...

 "Fantasies enrich our lives to the fullest, but true satisfaction comes from creating your own story in the real world! Live out your fantasies & make a storybook with beautiful pictures for the world to enjoy! -poetFemme


Corinne
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since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167
state of confusion
12 posted 2000-06-06 02:47 PM


I agree with PoetFemmeFetale, the breaking down of the poem into stanzas makes it easier for the eye for follow, and this is a very beautiful poem TO Follow!

Corinne

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