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The One Not Written (for JM's challenge)

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 06-04-2000 01:16 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

This is my heart,
incomplete--
and every meet of soul  
so sweet...
This one,
all would understand.
With these words
would I feel the hand
of ying coupled within the yang.

All the words
of heart, unspoken,
promise of my birth
unbroken---
for every word I've left unsaid
I've left my soul twice as dead...

Favorite?
I've penned none yet.
'Til pray me, I,
my soul to rest...
If any words
be pondered, deep--
I pray the Lord my soul to keep..


© Copyright 2000 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 06-04-2000 01:30 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie



I think its poetic and perfect you would be the first to post to this...
I LOVE this poem,
every word is kissed with your grace...
with that gentle vunerability
that I so adore about your poetry.
*blowing kisses to the south*
me loves ya, jm


 I think I could need - this in my life
I think I'm just scared - that I know too much
I can't relate and that's a problem
I'm feeling ...
If you're gone - maybe it's time to go home
There's an awful lot of breathing room
But I can hardly move
If you're gone - baby you need to come home
cuz there's a little bit of something me...
In everything in you.
~MB20~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~

Kit McCallum
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2 posted 06-04-2000 07:24 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

"If any words
be pondered, deep--
I pray the Lord my soul to keep.."

This was wonderful Serenity ... I really enjoyed this!

Best wishes,
/Kit
brian madden
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3 posted 06-04-2000 07:39 AM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Loved this serenity,

All the words
of heart, unspoken,
promise of my birth
unbroken---
for every word I've left unsaid
I've left my soul twice as dead...

and even when we write poetry we discard words and images that are poems in their own right.
a wonderful response to the challenge.




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"I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Libraries gave us power
Then work came and made us free
What price now for a shallow piece of dignity"
Nicky Wire, A design for Life.

manic street preachers
"Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany
Culture, alienation, boredom and despair"
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4 posted 06-04-2000 08:15 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Serenity~
Very nicely done ...
I liked -

'for every word I've left unsaid
I've left my soul twice as dead'

Love ya'
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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netswan
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5 posted 06-04-2000 08:50 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Sweet as Pie, Serenity - lovely

~netswan
serenity blaze
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6 posted 06-05-2000 09:48 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Thanks again to all.  Having much fun just keeping up with challenges...Hugs to my friends, Janet Marie, Marge...aw, what the hell---GROUP HUG!!!
spiked
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7 posted 06-05-2000 07:27 PM       View Profile for spiked   Email spiked   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spiked

Very nicely done Serenity
You have much life in you, Let it breathe
Rich
sea_of_okc
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8 posted 06-05-2000 08:39 PM       View Profile for sea_of_okc   Email sea_of_okc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sea_of_okc

U tryin to make me cry or what?
A very moving piece, I can relate well to it at this juncture of my life. Thanks for sharing... HUGS
Steve
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9 posted 06-06-2000 12:51 AM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

serenity, loved it, very much.....
but I must ask what does this mean....

would I feel the hand
of ying coupled within the yang.

Well whatever it really means, my brain interpreted another way...  
serenity blaze
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10 posted 06-06-2000 04:58 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Rich---I AM breathing dammit!  It just keeps
       coming out like panting...(I'm not bad
       I'm just written that way...)((Rich))

Steve--no tears, t'nite...hugs to you (Steve)


Parker-Helluva a visual, eh?  (can't slip
       ANYTHING by you...)  without yer
       permission, anyway...hee hee
WhtDove
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11 posted 06-06-2000 09:44 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Serenity I missed this, as I've missed much around here lately. Sorry!
I like this and the words just hit home. To pick a favorite line, would be to choose them all, they all spoke to me  
serenity blaze
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12 posted 06-06-2000 02:26 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Thank you White Dove---I have noticed that you have not been hopping about as much lately---have missed your cheerful song....thank you again...
 
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