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Tennessee Angel
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0 posted 06-03-2000 11:12 PM       View Profile for Tennessee Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Tennessee Angel

Passing on the street...you would notice him,
For he walks with an air of importance.
Something in his stride makes you step back.
You don't know what he's thinking.
His face is a mask.
He smiles easily, but it doesn't reach his eyes.
You don't know why...sadness, mere apathy?
You are not expected to know for you have never met.
But me...I should know.
How disturbing----
That I know not much more than a stranger.

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Irish Rose
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1 posted 06-03-2000 11:33 PM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

very intriguing, and haunting I like this one

 Kathleen
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Butterflies_dont_cry
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2 posted 06-03-2000 11:44 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

You have me thinking on this one TA, that's always a mark of good work   it's very sad to know someone and realize that you really don't know them.  A very deep piece, thank you for sharing it.
Dark Angel
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3 posted 06-04-2000 04:50 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

TA, this is very good, I enjoyed it muchly.  

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)


lotharingia
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4 posted 06-04-2000 05:00 PM       View Profile for lotharingia   Email lotharingia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit lotharingia's Home Page   View IP for lotharingia

I really enjoyed this poem and I know exactly what you mean. Often It can be the other way round to, that someone thinks they know you, but you know that really they don't, they just see what they want to. Makes you wonder who's at fault. It's so strange that it's so difficult for us to get through to one another sometimes. Strange too that some people are afraid of being understood.
brian madden
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5 posted 06-04-2000 05:01 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

It is disturbing to pass people by and see little life in in their eyes, I once saw a few heroin addicts on the street, their eyes were bulging and they had these vacant stares very disturbing. well I am ranting here. really enjoyed your poem, very haunting.

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"I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Libraries gave us power
Then work came and made us free
What price now for a shallow piece of dignity"
Nicky Wire, A design for Life.

manic street preachers
"Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany
Culture, alienation, boredom and despair"
Tennessee Angel
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6 posted 06-04-2000 05:05 PM       View Profile for Tennessee Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tennessee Angel

Thank you all for your comments.  It's interesting.  What I was thinking when I wrote this poem isn't the same thing that I think when I read it now.  I get so much more out of it now and I'm not sure that makes any sense.  But anyhow, Thanks.

 "That man has shown himself great who has never grieved in evil days and never bewailed his destiny." --Seneca
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7 posted 06-04-2000 05:17 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~TA, this is a great piece.  When a smile doesn't reach the eyes...there is this emptiness there...this unfinished sort of look.  Also,...to think you know someone and then to realize that you can't figure all of them out or don't know all you thought is also unfinished in a way.  Great poem anyhow,...even if I am way off base. I like this.  *Peace.
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8 posted 06-05-2000 03:48 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Tenn. Ang.,

Always good to get some fresh young talent into the pool -- and I'm saying this as if I weren't barely a year older than you!   Great read, and I love your careful word choices. Thanks for sharing.

Mike
 
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