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PoetasterD
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since 2000-06-03
Posts 42
Florida

0 posted 2000-06-03 09:36 PM


Like a child not yet able to speak,
desiring an object just out of reach
Not knowing exactly the action required
to satisfy this basic, most intrinsic desire
Not capable of obtaining it all alone,
and lacking the ability to express in words
This need which is all consuming,
and to another make it known

Like this child is how I often feel
as I so pathetically and wantonly appeal
For this pleasure I so desperately desire
to be singed by passions fire.
To know that which can not be taught,
and express my feelings without words,
to explore the labyrinth of your heart,
but my cries are all for naught



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Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
1 posted 2000-06-03 09:42 PM



Welcome to Passions!!!

This is a powerful piece.  You write with openess and from the heart...there is no better way to write. I'll be sure to look for more of your work!  Thank you for sharing this.


 ~Butterflies are meant to be free~
(a gift from my S.S.)



Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2000-06-03 09:49 PM


PoetasterD~
Welcome to the family of Passion's In Poetry.

Hope to see more of your work.
When the fires of passion singe you,
you will know that it is something
that is learned from experience.
Until then ... keep reaching.
~*Marge*~




 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-06-03 10:03 PM


Not capable of obtaining it all alone,
and lacking the ability to express in words
This need which is all consuming,
and to another make it known
-----------------
To know that which can not be taught,
and express my feelings without words,
to explore the labyrinth of your heart,
but my cries are all for naught
-----------------

WOW..awesome poem...
welcome to Passions PoetTD...
I really like the way you express your emotions and desires in this...
excellent honest expressions,
written with a edge of desperation in your words...

"For this pleasure I so desperately desire
to be singed by passions fire."

very cool line...
and OH how well I know...
great writing
take care, jm


 There are places inside our souls ...
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts ...
that need to be loved this much.
~Janet Marie~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~


PoetasterD
Junior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 42
Florida
4 posted 2000-06-04 07:17 PM


Thank you all for your replies. It is such a rewarding feeling (as I am sure you all know) to have someone read and enjoy your creations. I have written poetry for many years for my own enjoyment, and as a way to express feelings and emotions inspired by events in my life. Only a few of my poems have EVER been seen by anyone other than I. I am glad that I discovered this site and I hope to become a regular visitor and contributor, schedule permitting.....

Best wishes to you all,

Poetaster D

ps) I also welcome any suggestions/critiques that anyone has to offer. I like to learn something new every day    

[This message has been edited by PoetasterD (edited 06-05-2000).]

Lorraine Nisbet
Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218
Jersey City, NJ USA
5 posted 2000-06-04 09:06 PM



Hi PoetasterD,

Enjoyed your poem.  Look forward to seeing more.  Welcome to Passions.

~Lorraine

 
A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur


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