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~Two Sunflower Haikus~

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Honeybee
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As you can probably tell, I absolutely love sunflowers, they are my all-time favourite flower and are just beautiful and unique.

Please tell me which one you prefer, or if they are both okay.


1) ~SEPTEMBER SUNFLOWER HAIKU~

5-7-5

Golden sunflower
glorious September bloom
standing tall with pride


2)  ~SUNFLOWER DELIGHT HAIKU~

5-7-5

Golden in unique bloom
oh glorious sunflower!
for my eyes delight

*By Melissa Honeybee



[This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 06-03-2000).]
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Cerenity
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1 posted 06-03-2000 06:37 PM       View Profile for Cerenity   Email Cerenity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerenity

Hi Melissa,

Well they are both wonderful and I am with you about loving sunflowers, I just planted seven different kinds in seeds I hope they grow. I am loving Sunflower Delight for I can sit and stare at them for hours with total enjoyment, thank you so much for sharing these little jems.

Love,  Cerenity
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Melissa~
You know I like Haiku ...
now you know I like sunflowers.
You've given me a double-treat of both.
Thank you for sharing.
I like them both.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~


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Hmmm this was a hard choice. I admire people who can write haikus because i can't. i also like sunflowers. i think though that i like your first one better. something about the standing tall with pride really struck a chord with me. but both pieces are lovely!

amy  

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Because once you're there
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Melissa~
You've done well with both, they are both very beautiful in my eyes.
I love Haikus (can't do them myself) and sunflowers so this is a treat  
Tracie~


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It is the harmony of the universe


Honeybee
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5 posted 06-03-2000 08:39 PM       View Profile for Honeybee   Email Honeybee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Honeybee

Marge kindly pointed out to me that the first line of the second haiku is 6 syllables long instead of 5, so the new change is:

golden unique bloom
oh glorious sunflower!
for my eyes delight

*Thanks again Marge!  
Dennis L. White
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6 posted 06-19-2000 11:52 AM       View Profile for Dennis L. White   Email Dennis L. White   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dennis L. White

Melissa,
  I don't know how I missed these GEMS, WOW!
I like them both but if I had to choose one it would be the first one.

Golden sunflower
glorious September bloom
standing tall with pride

You've captured color,shape, time and attributed a proud emotion to your subject.
WRITE ON!
Dennis :^)



Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has past
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)
 
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