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Honeybee
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0 posted 2000-06-03 06:10 PM



As you can probably tell, I absolutely love sunflowers, they are my all-time favourite flower and are just beautiful and unique.

Please tell me which one you prefer, or if they are both okay.


1) ~SEPTEMBER SUNFLOWER HAIKU~

5-7-5

Golden sunflower
glorious September bloom
standing tall with pride


2)  ~SUNFLOWER DELIGHT HAIKU~

5-7-5

Golden in unique bloom
oh glorious sunflower!
for my eyes delight

*By Melissa Honeybee



[This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 06-03-2000).]

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Cerenity
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since 2000-02-16
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1 posted 2000-06-03 06:37 PM


Hi Melissa,

Well they are both wonderful and I am with you about loving sunflowers, I just planted seven different kinds in seeds I hope they grow. I am loving Sunflower Delight for I can sit and stare at them for hours with total enjoyment, thank you so much for sharing these little jems.

Love,  Cerenity

Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2000-06-03 07:22 PM


Melissa~
You know I like Haiku ...
now you know I like sunflowers.
You've given me a double-treat of both.
Thank you for sharing.
I like them both.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~


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Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
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Charlotte, NC
3 posted 2000-06-03 08:11 PM


Hmmm this was a hard choice. I admire people who can write haikus because i can't. i also like sunflowers. i think though that i like your first one better. something about the standing tall with pride really struck a chord with me. but both pieces are lovely!

amy  

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Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."




tracie66
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since 2000-01-18
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4 posted 2000-06-03 08:32 PM


Melissa~
You've done well with both, they are both very beautiful in my eyes.
I love Haikus (can't do them myself) and sunflowers so this is a treat  
Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Honeybee
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Ontario, CANADA
5 posted 2000-06-03 08:39 PM


Marge kindly pointed out to me that the first line of the second haiku is 6 syllables long instead of 5, so the new change is:

golden unique bloom
oh glorious sunflower!
for my eyes delight

*Thanks again Marge!  

Dennis L. White
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since 2000-02-17
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6 posted 2000-06-19 11:52 AM


Melissa,
  I don't know how I missed these GEMS, WOW!
I like them both but if I had to choose one it would be the first one.

Golden sunflower
glorious September bloom
standing tall with pride

You've captured color,shape, time and attributed a proud emotion to your subject.
WRITE ON!
Dennis :^)



Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has past
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)

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