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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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She In the stillness of the dark when comfort should envelop your mind, the old tapes begin to play and they do not treat you kind. She still tugs at your heartstrings, no matter that I wear your ring, she still plays in your memory even tho it's my green eyes you should see. I cannot move over, she shares our bed, even tho it's my voice you hear in your head, is it that I am so like her? even my mirror is no longer sure. Perfume no longer scents my skin for her jasmine invades the wind, and I no longer curl my hair, it's not seen as past me you stare. And should my voice break through the shield, and if only from want, you to me yield, I think it will be well worth the wait so her invisible specter I cannot hate. She still tugs at your sore heartstrings its her memory that creates the sting, and someday when you look in my green eyes, will the love you lost be realized. ©KRJ 3 June 2000 Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
sunshine, I really liked this a very interesting poem, a ghost from the past still haunts the present. I cannot move over, she shares our bed, even tho it's my voice you hear in your head, is it that I am so like her? even my mirror is no longer sure. Perfume no longer scents my skin for her jasmine invades the wind, and I no longer curl my hair, it's not seen as past me you stare. And should my voice break through the shield, and if only from want, you to me yield, I think it will be well worth the wait so her invisible specter I cannot hate. stong conflict in your words, great poem. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers "Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany Culture, alienation, boredom and despair" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Reminds me of when I first broke up with my wife, long time ago, and I would still think about her all the time and compare other women to her. The new women in my life would be ready for a relationship because they had been single for a long time and they would pressure me to get involved with them, but I wasn't ready to let go of her yet. It took me about 2 years to get over her and I lost about 3 opportunities because I wasn't ready, I needed time. I would actually get angry with them for trying to rush me. James |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
well written poem Sun, a very painful place to be in, you have expressed it with grace in this sad but lovely piece. take care, jm There are places inside our souls ... that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts ... that need to be loved this much. ~Janet Marie~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Gentlemen, thank you so much for reading this, and for your responses. Sometimes we ladies think we are the only ones who get hurt...meanwhile, at least the two of you, and me, know differently... Janet Marie, you snuck in on me...thank you for your comment... < !signature--> Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 06-03-2000).] |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow - poignant message, Sunshine. Painful and beautiful piece here... Ver well done.  Michael |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Oh Sunshine, Print him a copy of this poem to read. WOW-we-cazowie! Great job. marcy |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Michael, sure would like to see you post a response to this... Marcy, love the "wow..."...thanks... Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
oooooh now this has bite, poor you! There's a song about a woman who was treated like a painting on all.... "Maybe He'll Notice Me Now" reminds me of this. Good job ~Heather |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Heather, thank you for the "biting" comment... glad you enjoyed the read... Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
It's a hollow feeling, and a difficult situation to be in. God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Quite true, EagleOne, but it is as you make it... Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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