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In Your Eyes (My first poem-Kit's challenge)

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ESP
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Floating gently on a cloud....


0 posted 06-03-2000 01:02 PM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for ESP


                     In Your Eyes

                     In your eyes...
                     I see hurt buried deep inside.
                     I feel the pain in your heart
                     And see it devestate you,
                     An inner Tornado.

                     I see you in tears...
                     The memories of happy days gone by
                     Running down your face.
                     A flash-flood of grief and misery,
                     Drowning you in Desolation.

                     Yet...
                     You return hatred with love.
                     Contempt with respect:
                     The one who pushed you away is rewarded.
                     With your unconditional love.

                     I understand...
                     Your intense thoughts and feelings,
                     Your intricate pattern of emotion,
                     Your tangled web of life:
                     I know why you are the way you are.

                     I know..
                     Your every feeling
                     And why you feel the way you do:
                     For you are my reflection. We are one.
                     Your eyes are the mirrors to my soul.
                     -----------------------------------------------------


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."
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brian madden
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1 posted 06-03-2000 01:12 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

I know..
Your every feeling
And why you feel the way you do:
For you are my reflection. We are one.
Your eyes are the mirrors to my soul.

Eyes can communicate in ways that words never could. a lovely poem,  

In your eyes...
I see hurt buried deep inside.
I feel the pain in your heart
And see it devestate you,
An inner Tornado.

I see you in tears...
The memories of happy days gone by
Running down your face.
A flash-flood of grief and misery,
Drowning you in Desolation.

a great poem especially the first two verses.


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2 posted 06-03-2000 02:58 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~I so enjoyed this piece.

Yet...
You return hatred with love.
Contempt with respect
The one who pushed you away is rewarded.
With your unconditional love.

Goodness do I know this.
Truly great writing here...thank you.
*Peace.
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3 posted 06-03-2000 05:06 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Lil' Lizzie~
You are good !  
To feel the pain of another is
an admirable quality ...

You little poet, you !
You're a soft soul.
I love you, my friend and 'mentee'.
~*Marge*~


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Kit McCallum
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4 posted 06-03-2000 07:42 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

This is incredible for your first poem ESP!  Absolutely wonderful and full of emotion.  Well done!  You were a poet the moment you picked up the pen I think. Thanks for sharing this with us.

Best wishes,
/Kit
PoetasterD
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5 posted 06-03-2000 08:23 PM       View Profile for PoetasterD   Email PoetasterD   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoetasterD

ESP, I really like this one! I am new to this site and hope to read many more excellent poems from you and the others. This one really touched me for some reason. If you started off this good, I can't wait to read the ones you have written since.

I wish I had kept all of the poems I have written over the years.    I found one from 1981 (I was 15) inspired when my girlfriend broke my heart. It is no where close to the poems submitted for this challenge. It really lacks in quality and depth, but it was a stepping stone along the path to poetic creativity. But what do you expect form a hormone ridden teenager!  

Best wishes,
Poetaster D
tracie66
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6 posted 06-03-2000 10:42 PM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

WOW...Little lizzie   this your first poem, you have such talent and for a first poem all I can say is WOW.
Such a heartfelt piece Lizzie, you have a golden heart sweet one.
Tracie~


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It is the harmony of the universe


ESP
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Floating gently on a cloud....


7 posted 06-04-2000 04:49 AM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

Brian: Thanks for liking the first two verses!
SpitFire: Glad you enjoyed it.
Marge: Thanks my mentor...love you too.
Kit: Thanks for the compliment!
PoetasterD: Enjoyed your comment!!
Tracie: Thanks!! You are so sweet!

Thanks all!! I hoped you would like it!
Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."
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