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In Your Eyes (My first poem-Kit's challenge)
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In Your Eyes (My first poem-Kit's challenge) |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
In Your Eyes In your eyes... I see hurt buried deep inside. I feel the pain in your heart And see it devestate you, An inner Tornado. I see you in tears... The memories of happy days gone by Running down your face. A flash-flood of grief and misery, Drowning you in Desolation. Yet... You return hatred with love. Contempt with respect: The one who pushed you away is rewarded. With your unconditional love. I understand... Your intense thoughts and feelings, Your intricate pattern of emotion, Your tangled web of life: I know why you are the way you are. I know.. Your every feeling And why you feel the way you do: For you are my reflection. We are one. Your eyes are the mirrors to my soul. ----------------------------------------------------- "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I know.. Your every feeling And why you feel the way you do: For you are my reflection. We are one. Your eyes are the mirrors to my soul. Eyes can communicate in ways that words never could. a lovely poem, In your eyes... I see hurt buried deep inside. I feel the pain in your heart And see it devestate you, An inner Tornado. I see you in tears... The memories of happy days gone by Running down your face. A flash-flood of grief and misery, Drowning you in Desolation. a great poem especially the first two verses. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers "Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany Culture, alienation, boredom and despair" |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~I so enjoyed this piece. Yet... You return hatred with love. Contempt with respect The one who pushed you away is rewarded. With your unconditional love. Goodness do I know this. Truly great writing here...thank you. *Peace. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lil' Lizzie~ You are good ! To feel the pain of another is an admirable quality ... You little poet, you ! You're a soft soul. I love you, my friend and 'mentee'.  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This is incredible for your first poem ESP! Absolutely wonderful and full of emotion. Well done! You were a poet the moment you picked up the pen I think. Thanks for sharing this with us. Best wishes, /Kit |
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PoetasterD Junior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 42Florida |
ESP, I really like this one! I am new to this site and hope to read many more excellent poems from you and the others. This one really touched me for some reason. If you started off this good, I can't wait to read the ones you have written since. I wish I had kept all of the poems I have written over the years.  I found one from 1981 (I was 15) inspired when my girlfriend broke my heart. It is no where close to the poems submitted for this challenge. It really lacks in quality and depth, but it was a stepping stone along the path to poetic creativity. But what do you expect form a hormone ridden teenager! Best wishes, Poetaster D |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
WOW...Little lizzie this your first poem, you have such talent and for a first poem all I can say is WOW.Such a heartfelt piece Lizzie, you have a golden heart sweet one. Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Brian: Thanks for liking the first two verses! SpitFire: Glad you enjoyed it. Marge: Thanks my mentor...love you too. Kit: Thanks for the compliment! PoetasterD: Enjoyed your comment!! Tracie: Thanks!! You are so sweet! Thanks all!! I hoped you would like it! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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