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The First Poem (the challenge)

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Poet deVine
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0 posted 06-02-2000 08:42 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Poet deVine

The first line of a poem I wrote
Was “To be or not to be”
What’s that you say, Shakespeare wrote that?
Well, I really thought it was me!

Perhaps this line was my first
“She was a Phantom of delight!”
William Wordsworth wrote that line!?
Are you sure that you are right?

I must have written down that verse
My first, my premiere line
Those lines are great, perfect words
Could only come from deVine!

“Gaily bedight, a gallant knight”
The first line of my poem “Eldorado”
Oh, are you sure it was penned
By Edgar Allan Poe?

What was the line I wrote
In the first poem I ever created
Thrown out because I was sure
When read, it would be hated.

I think back to that innocent time
To the year when I was eight
No words are in that memory
They are lost by an act of fate.


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1 posted 06-02-2000 08:44 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Ah, that's a shame.   This is very clever, Sharon, I love it!

Denise
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2 posted 06-02-2000 08:46 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

"The caring prayers, the shaking shock" was my first line, and it better not be (supposedly) someone else's!   Too bad you don't have your first poem, PdV, we're missing out on something!

Elizabeth


 And this I say to you: why? Why? Just tell me why, so I can understand. Why?


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3 posted 06-03-2000 12:05 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Thank you! I have been reading everyone's first poem and decided to write this. I didn't start writing poetry seriously until I was 35! I do have my first, but it's not suitable for this forum!  
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4 posted 06-03-2000 12:10 AM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

This was great deVine. . .I knew that you were behind these somehow!!  

And I want to know. . . what forum IS your first poem suitable for???  

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

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5 posted 06-03-2000 12:32 AM       View Profile for Jana Tovey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jana Tovey

Totally endearing.  The tender age of 8...innocence before it crosses that final threshold.
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6 posted 06-03-2000 12:49 AM       View Profile for Jester59701   Email Jester59701   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jester59701

Excellent as usual PdV!
I love the way your mind works!
(Gratuitous mentorated pratronizations aside)
                   Jester ':~)
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7 posted 06-03-2000 01:41 AM       View Profile for Eloise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Eloise

Enjoyed this very much PDV as always.
netswan
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Cute Sharon --

Wow, such talent and didn't start writing
til you were 35.  Well, I, for one am sure
glad you started  

~netswan
brian madden
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I used to get a lot of my best images from different poems or even songs. Anyway a clever poem,  lovely enjoyed the read.

I think back to that innocent time
To the year when I was eight
No words are in that memory
They are lost by an act of fate.

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"I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Libraries gave us power
Then work came and made us free
What price now for a shallow piece of dignity"
Nicky Wire, A design for Life.

manic street preachers
"Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany
Culture, alienation, boredom and despair"
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10 posted 06-03-2000 07:29 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Wonderful response in the spirit of "the first poem" Poet deVine!  I'm so glad you picked up the pen at 35 ... this was terrific!

Best wishes,
/Kit
 
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