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First Poem Challenge: The Chosen One

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Lone Ranger
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0 posted 06-02-2000 05:08 PM       View Profile for Lone Ranger   Email Lone Ranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Ranger

I wrote this poem when I was 13, but I must say the it was a really wierd poem hope you guys like it...


As I walk through the valley of destiny
I realize that faith is nothing but a light
Guiding us into the darkness of the night
Even if God tell us
That it is the key to paradise
I will still believe
That faith is nothing but a disguise
Of the rainbow that turns into light

The only certainty that we all have
Is that everything in the world has an end
And while all of us are fighting trying to offend
The great lord is up there telling us what to do
When I die I'd like Heaven to be my next home
But if for some reason Hell is my fate
I'll accept it and confront anything that might come

What dreams may come?
This is a thing anyone should doubt
In the terror of the gloom you'd easily be caught
But if in your heart there is only love
Then you must be the chosen one to get past
Throught the place where only darkness reside
There only your courage will serve you, at last

When you wish something
All of the universe conspire
So you can accomplish your desire
Because dreams are not an illusion
They are simply the eyes of the future
Of a kid that never lied
Lessons we can't learn saying good bye

The parents are the knowledge themselves
They are people we should never blame
From Pandora thet's where the sins had came
Says the proverb "Curiosity killed the cat"
As I say this happened in the light
Someone opened Pandora's box
Turning the day into an immortal night

 "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free
It was always thus and always thus will be"
Prof. Keating
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JOY 14
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1 posted 06-02-2000 05:33 PM       View Profile for JOY 14   Email JOY 14   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JOY 14's Home Page   View IP for JOY 14

interesting...No. I mean it in the best way possible.  My, what runs through our minds at 13.  That was only a few years ago for me, but shhh. Don't tell.  I've convinced everyone here I'm older than the hills.

ha.ha. that insanity creeps up on me every once in a while.  

Joy
brian madden
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2 posted 06-02-2000 05:39 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

I would say weird, I too had a thing for heaven and hell and did believe that fate lay in hell. Your poem has alot more clarity than my early poems did and for a poem wrote at the age of 13 it addresses some important issues in its own way.

The only certainty that we all have
Is that everything in the world has an end
And while all of us are fighting trying to offend
The great lord is up there telling us what to do
When I die I'd like Heaven to be my next home
But if for some reason Hell is my fate
I'll accept it and confront anything that might come

really enjoyed the poem especially the above verse.




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Jana Tovey
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3 posted 06-02-2000 05:49 PM       View Profile for Jana Tovey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jana Tovey

You were doing some really heavy thinking at 13.  I think this is a pretty good poem...a bit dark, but if I recall, 13 is that age of darkness just before the dawn.
Lone Ranger
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4 posted 06-02-2000 10:05 PM       View Profile for Lone Ranger   Email Lone Ranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Ranger

Thank you guys for your kind replies...
and you know, you guys soeak like 13 was a LONG time ago... well i'm 15( but that's between us...)
so it wasn't so long ago...
but yet you're right it was a really heavy thinking for that age...
thankes for the reply...


 "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free
It was always thus and always thus will be"
Prof. Keating
Dead Poets Society
netswan
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5 posted 06-03-2000 05:21 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Simply amazing -  Well done Lone Ranger,
I am very glad you started writing.

~netswan
Poet deVine
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6 posted 06-03-2000 11:54 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I like it. I'd like to know why you wrote it? Why poetry and not prose? Just curious as to why someone begins to write poetry.  
prinzezz15_4eva
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7 posted 06-03-2000 12:03 PM       View Profile for prinzezz15_4eva   Email prinzezz15_4eva   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for prinzezz15_4eva

I really liked this...I had some similiar thoughts at 13...maybe not that deep but similiar. This was a really great poem...I look forward to reading more.
prinzezz15_4eva
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8 posted 06-03-2000 12:03 PM       View Profile for prinzezz15_4eva   Email prinzezz15_4eva   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for prinzezz15_4eva

I really liked this...I had some similiar thoughts at 13...maybe not that deep but similiar. This was a really great poem...I look forward to reading more.
Lone Ranger
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9 posted 06-03-2000 03:53 PM       View Profile for Lone Ranger   Email Lone Ranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Ranger

Thanks netswan, Poet Dvine & Prinzez
oh, and why did I started writting... well it was kindda weird , I was just going to take a bath and suddenly I had the idea of writing poems, strange but true...
and prinzez , I really liked your poems and really related to them you are very good

 "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free
It was always thus and always thus will be"
Prof. Keating
Dead Poets Society
Lone Ranger
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10 posted 06-03-2000 03:54 PM       View Profile for Lone Ranger   Email Lone Ranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Ranger

Thanks netswan, Poet Dvine & Prinzez
oh, and why did I started writting... well it was kindda weird , I was just going to take a bath and suddenly I had the idea of writing poems, strange but true...
and prinzez , I really liked your poems and really related to them you are very good

 "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free
It was always thus and always thus will be"
Prof. Keating
Dead Poets Society
Kit McCallum
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11 posted 06-03-2000 08:04 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

This was an intriguing and thought-provoking firt poem Lone Ranger ...

"When you wish something
All of the universe conspire
So you can accomplish your desire
Because dreams are not an illusion
They are simply the eyes of the future"

I loved these lines above particularly ... wonderful thoughts. Well done!

Best wishes,
/Kit
Lone Ranger
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12 posted 06-03-2000 08:12 PM       View Profile for Lone Ranger   Email Lone Ranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Ranger

Thanks for reading Kit...
and I agree with you this is a very intriguing poem...
Wonder what was going through my head those times...

 "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free
It was always thus and always thus will be"
Prof. Keating
Dead Poets Society
Phreakzoid[PsI]
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13 posted 06-04-2000 10:25 PM       View Profile for Phreakzoid[PsI]   Email Phreakzoid[PsI]   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Phreakzoid[PsI]

Very strange poem, deep thoughts!
enjoyed reading it!

 "Be you, and be all you need"
Phreakzoid[PsI]
Angelical Face
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14 posted 06-04-2000 10:27 PM       View Profile for Angelical Face   Email Angelical Face   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Angelical Face

Very provoking poem here, wow, you had a deep thinking for the age of 13!
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