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Lorelei' Song
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Lorelei' Song |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion 
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The eastward lands sloped away down to the roiling sea, And I, alone, stood there mute, as her song called out to me. Another place, some future time, waited for me there, And so I proceeded downward into the salt sea air. The clouds sped by in silent flight, tendrilled wings aspread, Faithfully leading me eastward a little farther yet. In her call I swore I heard the promise of sweeter climes, And so I proceeded downward into the salt sea brine. The waves caressed my waist then chest as I followed on Drawing me ever into her irresistibly sweet song. The chill that met my body wet went deeper to my soul, As I in burning need surrendered the last of my control. Another step, deeper yet, the waves lapped higher still, The song drew me onward yet, as if against my will. I could swear I saw her there, her arms outstretched for me, My maiden fair, sweet Lorelei, in the roiling sea. The sea pushed urgently back at me, slowing me in my stride, But still I struggled nearer to my temptress Lorelei. The waves crested at my neck, the taste of salt was there, But I proceeded onward to where she waited there. My final steps took me too deep for me to catch my breath, But oh how sweet her arms would feel, though it would mean my death. She came to me with mirthful laugh and took me to her breast And then I kissed sweet Lorelei, and reached my final quest. The waves roll on from night to dawn, along that hidden sea, Calling out to men who wait for their Lorelei to sing. And in the air, if you pause there, you'll hear us lost men cry, For the sweet and tender love of the lovely Lorelei. |
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Lorelei54 Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 458 |
Oh sweet sailor of mine...your words leave me speechless, almost breathless at the beauty you write...I pray our marriage is the final quest you speak of...as to me, it is the death of being alone and the fulfillment of being one with you... ily |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
WOW THIS IS BEAUTIFUL. such wonderful devotion and excellent imagery Lucky lady the the lovely Lorelei. very lucky. take care, jm There are places inside our souls ... that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts ... that need to be loved this much. ~Janet Marie~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Geesh..Make me teary eyed this early in the day will ya!  I adored this, and as I can see, am sure your wife deeply loves it. How sweet that you two both love to write. Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Ah! Lovely sir. You and Lorelei have been missed here! Good to see your recent posts.  |
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Jana Tovey Member
since 2000-05-30
Posts 257USA |
What a haunting story and Lorelei is such a haunting name. The sea was his friend, but he didn't heed it's advice. Good poem. Thanks for sharing it. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You hit a homer with this one, Mike. The words are good, the images are terrific and the story is tragically romantic. Nice work! ...but ya gotta stop having those wet dreams, yanno? |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is absolutely wonderful, Mike! Wow! Simply beautiful! Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LongJohn~ My, my ! What a beautiful tale of the legend of the sweet Loreli ... who came to life for you. Quite the awesome tale, sir. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Splendid poetry. Enjoyed. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
A wonderful tribute to two legends! Corinne |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
magnificent! and almost as sweet as she is Beutifully written piece and a keepsake forever |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
What a wonderful story beautifully told! |
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