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First Poem Challenge.....untitled

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Jeffrey Carter
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State of constant confusion!


0 posted 06-02-2000 01:02 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Untitled

How can I say "I love you?"
then turn and  walk away
I know I once told you
I would forever be true
There would never be another
my heart belonged to you
But people change as time goes by
This I cannot change
Even when I hold her tight
my love for you remains

My first attempt at poetry when I was 18
somewhere around 1991


 All my love,
Jeffrey

I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

© Copyright 2000 Jeffrey D. Carter - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth
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1 posted 06-02-2000 01:07 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Good first poem, Jeffrey. Things can be so confusing, can't they?

Elizabeth


 And this I say to you: why? Why? Just tell me why, so I can understand. Why?


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2 posted 06-02-2000 01:16 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very good, Jeffrey!  

Denise
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3 posted 06-02-2000 01:21 PM       View Profile for MagnoliaBlue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for MagnoliaBlue

Oh, there's always that first love, huh?

Nice writing.    

MBlue
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4 posted 06-02-2000 01:32 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

a great start Jeff, thanks for sharing.
WOW 91 I still a babe just 10 or 11, seems like a life time ago.

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"I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Libraries gave us power
Then work came and made us free
What price now for a shallow piece of dignity"
Nicky Wire, A design for Life.

manic street preachers

La Tristesse Durera (Scream to a Sigh)
"Life has been unfaithful And it all promised so so much
I am a relic I am just a petrified cry Wheeled out once a year, a cenotaph souvenir
The applause nails down my silence
La tristesse durera
Scream to a sigh, to a sigh
I see liberals I am just a fashion accessory
People send postcards
And they all hope I'm feeling well I retreat into self-pity, it's so easy Where they patronise my misery
La tristesse durera
Scream to a sigh, to a sigh
I sold my medal
It paid a bill
It sells at market stalls Parades Milan catwalks
The sadness will never go Will never go away
Baby it's here to stay

Janet Marie
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5 posted 06-02-2000 02:43 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

I love this sweet little poem Jeff..
we love so intensly at that age and we think were never gonna feel like that again.
very impressive first poem
later jeff-gator
jm

 There are places inside our souls ...
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts ...
that need to be loved this much.
~Janet Marie~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~

Marina
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6 posted 06-02-2000 06:09 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

You were just too cute even then!!!  Imagine some NC country girl, up and breaking your poor schoolboy heart!

Marina

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7 posted 06-02-2000 08:24 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Jeffrey,

Nice work, my friend!!  Some things just cannot be changed.  

LW


 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith
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8 posted 06-02-2000 09:07 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Ah, you were young and in love. Very good!! I like it.  
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9 posted 06-03-2000 02:36 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Jeffrey~
Wonderful lines  
great first poem
Love Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


netswan
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10 posted 06-03-2000 04:35 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

What a sweet and sad first poem, Jeffrey.
Well done --

~netswan
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11 posted 06-03-2000 07:21 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

"Even when I hold her tight
my love for you remains"

Almost bittersweet Jeffrey ... ahhh to be young and in love ... wonderful first poem, and well done!  Thanks so much for sharing this with us.

Best wishes,
/Kit
 
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