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MagnoliaBlue
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since 2000-05-12
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0 posted 2000-06-02 12:26 PM


~WHY~

Why does the
  Mere thought of
   You make me cry?

When it used
  To dearly warm
   My heart just to
    Have you nearby.


Why does reading
  Your letters and sweet words
   Make my heart weep?

When I have them all
  Bound up in safeties keep.


We shared we played
  We made shadows on the wall

   Such sweet tender union between us
    Now it is such bittersweet recall.


You told me goodbye
  You shattered the glass

   Through which everything
    Was so clear as it came to pass.


Why does the
  Mere thought of
   You make me cry?

When it used
    To dearly warm
      My heart
       just
        to
         Have
          you
           nearby?

©1980~CJB~


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[This message has been edited by MagnoliaBlue (edited 06-02-2000).]

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mystery
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since 2000-02-21
Posts 79

1 posted 2000-06-02 02:49 PM


This is a very gentle poem and nicely written. Not only did I enjoy it, but I can also relate!
Temptress
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since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136
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2 posted 2000-06-02 04:13 PM


Sad poem. Sometime these questions are never answered. Thats the hardest part sometimes.
Nice work.


 Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau"



Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA
3 posted 2000-06-02 05:41 PM



Well written with a great presentation. It's painful to remember the happy times and then be reminded that you can never relive those times again and that you just have to let go.  I am very sorry for what you are dealing with now.  Keep writing poems, over time, you will heal and release your tensions and overwhelming emotions.  I wish you the best in future love  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee

Jana Tovey
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since 2000-05-30
Posts 257
USA
4 posted 2000-06-02 05:45 PM


Good poem, lovely style.  The last few lines were like tears dropping down...nice effect.
MagnoliaBlue
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since 2000-05-12
Posts 367

5 posted 2000-06-02 05:59 PM


Thank you everyone for the comments.

Jana...I am happy you read the effect correctly...tears are what I was going for.

Melissa...I am OK as this was written in 1980. Thanks for your sweet thoughts.

MBlue

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