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Farewell

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Rhavin
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0 posted 06-02-2000 12:23 AM       View Profile for Rhavin   Email Rhavin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rhavin

The crimson fluid that runs through these veins
Is the same liquid that will be dispelled when Iím slain
As the swordís blade twists in my flesh
Iíve made to many mistakes now to regret
Tears of contentment flood my eyes
No longer do I have to wish to die
As I lye on the ground in a pool of dripping blood
It mixes into the dirt and becomes a warm mud
Not knowing what hurts worse, I wipe the blood from my face
With my arms outstretched I welcome deathís embrace

The clouds darken, and a storm rumbles in
The story unfolds, but I donít know where to begin
People walk by, and stare in awe
They think as they pass that glory I sought
But in truth it was more like a love hate connection
With not much more than a solitude redemption
The pain in my soul has been lifted off my chest
No more nights crying as I watch the stars from the crest
Farewell to my life filled with this lingering pain
Nothing more to tell, Iím dead where I lay


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Temptress
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1 posted 06-02-2000 03:48 PM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

Painful, but powerful.   Very good writing.


 Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau"


netswan
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2 posted 06-03-2000 05:25 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Welcome to Passions, Rhavin!

dark - deep poem -- well written

~netswan
JamesMichael
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3 posted 06-03-2000 05:57 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

This is a perfect description of a situation I went thru about 9 years ago...it was no fun for me and I hope this was in your past.  James
Janet Marie
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4 posted 06-03-2000 02:40 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

wow, this is exceptional writing
dark and painful indeed, but the emotions and the ryhme are expressed with poetic precision.
I hope you find your release in your writing
welcome to passions
I look forward to more of your work,
take care, jm

 There are places inside our souls ...
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts ...
that need to be loved this much.
~Janet Marie~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~

 
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