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~An "If Only" Wish~
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~An "If Only" Wish~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 If only I had one wish to make I would turn back times tarnished hand I’d give you my heart to take I’d meet you again on the white sand But this time I would listen to you And hear all that you really said This time I would treasure you And follow close as you lead I’d hold onto a bit of me Not exposing the shadows within I would only permit that you see The pureness and not the sin I’d give you room to love Content with the space you crave I’d cherish the gift from above Finding peace with what you gave Or perhaps rein my heart So I wouldn't feel this pain To be strong when you depart Not crying out in vain If only I could travel back This time making things right If only I hadn’t lost track While bathing in your light “If only’s” are made for lost fools Sadly my wishes are much the same I’ll use faith and hope as healing tools But for now I will hold onto the blame |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Wow, you make ended love as beautiful as love itself. And that's a tall order!  My one minor gripe -- and it's not on the poem -- is the line about hiding the sin and only showing the pure. That's not giving your all to love; it's wearing a convenient mask so you won't be hurt. And believe me, masks are a biiiiiig waste of time! Enjoyed the poem immensely.Mike |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
never hold on to the blame... leave it out on the curb along with the shame ... "IF ONLY'S" ...only weight down your wings time to look ahead and see what fate and destiny bring ... ------------ YOU KNOW I Love this poem..right? "If only I hadn’t lost track While bathing in your light" OH MAN do I love that line!! you know that I know that you know...ya know?  so much emotion is this one girl... its now one of my favs by you... excellent writing SS, truly!! loves ya, jm < !signature--> There are places inside our souls ... that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts ... that need to be loved this much. ~Janet Marie~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 06-02-2000).] |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
BDC-- this was so heartbreakingly sad yet beautiful. full of such heartfelt emotion making me want to reach for a kleenex literally. thanks so much for sharing such a huge depth of yourself with us. take care! amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
butterfly - you never to cease to amaze me - beautiful poem - ah, the lessons we learn in life -- but you know they are there for a reason - Wonderful Poem and well written. ~netswan |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful poem Butterflies. The "if only's" in life can be so heart-wrenching. It's so hard to stop one's self from playing back the movie and trying to change the ending. Beautifully expressed ... Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ButterfliesDC~ 'If Only' ... there wasn't so much truth for many in what you write. Don't hold on to the blame ... it gets too heavy, hon. Let it go ... and catch the flow of hope and let the healing begin. Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Butterflies~ Soo sad sweetheart don't take the blame it will consume your beautiful heart, let it go and move on. Hugs Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Holly~ A true wish from a true heart. I know how that feeling can be, to want to just turn back the hands of time. But the hands are still moveing, and I will safely bet there are better things in store...... Love Ya~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Mike* Thank you for your kind reply, and yes a mask only numbs the feeling of love, but in this case I think I would have been better keeping it on. J.M.* I know and you know the comfort that I find in that thank you so much.Amy* Thank you...and stop that or you'll make me cry too Netswan* I hope I never stop amazing...lol and you are right all things are for a reason...Sometimes I wish I knew the reason before the lesson though Kit* Thank you if you find a "re-do" button for life let me know Marge* Your reply is so special...thank you for looking out for me, and for reading. Tracie* Thank you for the wise advice!! It hasn't consumed me but it is a part of me. Thank you for reading and for the **hugs** Terry* Thank you, I'm sure the rainbow is coming!! |
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