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~An "If Only" Wish~

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Butterflies_dont_cry
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If only I had one wish to make
I would turn back times tarnished hand
Id give you my heart to take
Id meet you again on the white sand

But this time I would listen to you
And hear all that you really said
This time I would treasure you
And follow close as you lead

Id hold onto a bit of me
Not exposing the shadows within
I would only permit that you see
The pureness and not the sin

Id give you room to love
Content with the space you crave
Id cherish the gift from above
Finding peace with what you gave

Or perhaps rein my heart
So I wouldn't feel this pain
To be strong when you depart
Not crying out in vain

If only I could travel back
This time making things right
If only I hadnt lost track
While bathing in your light

If onlys are made for lost fools
Sadly my wishes are much the same
Ill use faith and hope as healing tools
But for now I will hold onto the blame

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bsquirrel
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1 posted 06-02-2000 12:25 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Wow, you make ended love as beautiful as love itself. And that's a tall order!   My one minor gripe -- and it's not on the poem -- is the line about hiding the sin and only showing the pure. That's not giving your all to love; it's wearing a convenient mask so you won't be hurt. And believe me, masks are a biiiiiig waste of time! Enjoyed the poem immensely.

Mike
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2 posted 06-02-2000 12:30 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

never hold on to the blame...
leave it out on the curb along with the shame ...
"IF ONLY'S" ...only weight down your wings
time to look ahead and see what fate and destiny bring ...
------------
YOU KNOW I Love this poem..right?

"If only I hadnt lost track
While bathing in your light"

OH MAN do I love that line!!

you know that I know that you know...ya know?
so much emotion is this one girl...
its now one of my favs by you...
excellent writing SS, truly!!
loves ya, jm


There are places inside our souls ...
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts ...
that need to be loved this much.
~Janet Marie~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~





[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 06-02-2000).]
Aimster
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3 posted 06-02-2000 01:10 AM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

BDC--

this was so heartbreakingly sad yet beautiful. full of such heartfelt emotion making me want to reach for a kleenex literally. thanks so much for sharing such a huge depth of yourself with us.

take care!
amy  

 
"Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

netswan
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4 posted 06-02-2000 07:41 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

butterfly - you never to cease to amaze
me  - beautiful poem -    ah, the lessons
we learn in life -- but you know they
are there for a reason -

Wonderful Poem and well written.

~netswan
Kit McCallum
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5 posted 06-02-2000 08:05 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Wonderful poem Butterflies.  The "if only's" in life can be so heart-wrenching.  It's so hard to stop one's self from playing back the movie and trying to change the ending.  Beautifully expressed ...

Best wishes,
/Kit
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6 posted 06-02-2000 08:13 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

ButterfliesDC~
'If Only' ... there wasn't so much
truth for many in what you write.
Don't hold on to the blame ...
it gets too heavy, hon.
Let it go ... and catch the flow of hope
and let the healing begin.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~


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tracie66
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Butterflies~
Soo sad sweetheart don't take the blame it will consume your beautiful heart, let it go and move on.

Hugs
Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


TerryW
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8 posted 06-02-2000 11:14 AM       View Profile for TerryW   Email TerryW   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TerryW's Home Page   View IP for TerryW

Holly~
     A true wish from a true heart.  I know how that feeling can be, to want to just turn back the hands of time.  But the hands are still moveing, and I will safely bet there are better things in store......



Love Ya~

 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.
Butterflies_dont_cry
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Mike* Thank you for your kind reply, and yes a mask only numbs the feeling of love, but in this case I think I would have been better keeping it on.

J.M.* I know   and you know the comfort that I find in that   thank you so much.

Amy* Thank you...and stop that or you'll make me cry too    

Netswan* I hope I never stop amazing...lol and you are right all things are for a reason...Sometimes I wish I knew the reason before the lesson though  

Kit* Thank you   if you find a "re-do" button for life let me know  

Marge* Your reply is so special...thank you for looking out for me, and for reading.

Tracie* Thank you for the wise advice!!  It hasn't consumed me but it is a part of me.  Thank you for reading and for the **hugs**  

Terry* Thank you, I'm sure the rainbow is coming!!
 
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