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My Life....The Movie #3

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Balladeer
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0 posted 06-01-2000 10:06 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer


If my life were one big movie
Playing on the silver screen
As if someone had followed me
Recording every scene...
Would I be proud to have it there
So grandly on display
Or would I hang my head in shame
And turn my face away?

If everyone were made aware
Of what I am inside
Would it give cause to loud applause
Or would I turn and hide?

If audiences sat and watched
The character I've been
Would they approve of how I've lived
And treated fellow men?

If they could have a chance to see
My feelings deep inside
Would they condone mistakes I've made
Or how I justified?

Would they admire my character
And think I was the best
Or just nod off and fall asleep
Through lack of interest?

The shameful things I've said and done
I'd hate for them to see.
Would faces wrinkle in disgust
To see that side of me?

Would they smile when I was happy?
Feel sad when I was down?
Laugh with me when I was funny
All the times I played the clown?

Would I come across as manly
Like a James Bond or Stallone?
Or just some poor, pathetic soul
Who's always walked alone?

What would the critics have to say
In Entertainment News?
How many stars would they reward
My life in their reviews?

Who would they get to play my part?
DeNiro - maybe Cruise
Or just some two-bit thespian
Who nothing left to lose?

How many days would "My Life" run?
A week - or, maybe, two?
Would it become a major hit
Or disappear from view?

Would I be proud to watch "My Life"
And think it turned out nice?
Or would I think it not well done,
Unworthy of the price?

There is one critic watching me.
He's watched the entire show.
Will I be worthy of His praise?
In time, He'll let me know.

© Copyright 2000 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Rosebud1229
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1 posted 06-01-2000 10:10 PM       View Profile for Rosebud1229   Email Rosebud1229   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rosebud1229

I loved this poem very much. Sometimes our lifes do seem like they are played out in scenes.
doreen peri
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2 posted 06-01-2000 10:19 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

no 'two-bit thespian' will play this part
no deniro, no stallone
only michael can play michael
for his part stands out alone
Corinne
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3 posted 06-01-2000 10:19 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

You are that and so much more
he'll be waiting behind golden doors!

Corinne
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4 posted 06-01-2000 11:24 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

You will get a Heavenly Oscar sir! I know it.
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5 posted 06-02-2000 12:39 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Wait, you said Cruise, then you said a two-bit thespian. Are you repeating yourself?   Enjoyed the poem.

Mike
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6 posted 06-02-2000 08:09 AM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

I know I'd seen your face before!
At the $2 peekshure show.
Godzilla never looked better,
As I proceeded to the front row.

You were very impressive,
The way you set everything alight,
And then you looked at me and said,
"Sir, will this seat be alright?"

Hi ya, Michael - you wrote a great poem there - now all I gotta do is head to the editing room and try to snip some scenes outta my life's movie - thanks for the reminder (you dirty rotten dawg!!!).
netswan
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7 posted 06-02-2000 08:21 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Great Poem Balladeer!

~netswan
Denise
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8 posted 06-02-2000 10:50 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

One of my favorites of yours, thanks for reposting it! I'd give it a 'thumbs up' and four stars!!  

Denise
Severn
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9 posted 06-02-2000 11:09 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Hey Michael...this is AWESOME!

I love this...the flow, the content...everything.

Cool stuff 'deery...

K
Janet Marie
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10 posted 06-02-2000 11:56 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

better be careful sweet 'deer...
your wisdom and class are showing again  
excellent poem, the last verse is pefection.
take care kind poet,
jm

 There are places inside our souls ...
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts ...
that need to be loved this much.
~Janet Marie~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~

JamesMichael
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11 posted 06-02-2000 02:54 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Something for all of us to think about now...enjoyed the message.  James
brian madden
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12 posted 06-02-2000 06:03 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

that was a wonderful performance, very clever and well written.
There is a quote, Oscar Wilde I think, "Theatre is life without the drama".
I don't even what the point of including that quote was. You see the thing about movies is that we are only shown parts of a character, as in life only parts of ourselves are revealed, except to loved ones, only they get the full show unedited.  
an excellent poem. The winnner for the best poetic life is Balladeer, please accept this oscar. and keep the speech short, and no crying that is Tom Hanks gimic.
  

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"I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Libraries gave us power
Then work came and made us free
What price now for a shallow piece of dignity"
Nicky Wire, A design for Life.

manic street preachers
"Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany
Culture, alienation, boredom and despair"
Balladeer
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13 posted 06-02-2000 06:45 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Rosebud....yes, they surely do. Thank you...

Doreen...who needs DeNiro if I can be your hero???

Corrine....Aw, you always know just what to say !

deVine one...thank you but the only Oscar I get has Meyer after it  

bsquirrel..what a low blow!! I can admire a comment like that!  

LongJohn...by the time you get done snippin', you won't have a movie...you'll have a "short" subject!!!

netswan....I thank you for reading, my friend.

Denise...thank you. a thumbs up is always better than a finger up, which is what I'd get from Toerag  

Severn...the movie isn't very long 'cause I'm still REAL young!!!

Janet Marie...Darn! Thanks for warning me. I hate when that happens! Thanks for such a wonderful comment.

James...it IS actually interesting to play around with. The next time you're alone doing whatever, pretend that there are thousands of people watching you and see how you change! Human nature is a wonderful thing. Thanks for reading....

brian....maybe that's why my ex-wife kept mumbling that she wanted her money back! Your point is well made, though. We may see a few minutes in the day of a character's actions. How is he the rest of the time? Thoughts to ponder.....

Sunshine
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14 posted 06-04-2000 12:29 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Well, me is forking over my hard-earned $$$ just for the opportunity to read and see this show again!  Thanks for the repost, 'Deer...I could read your stuff all day/night long!

 Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

Irie
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15 posted 06-04-2000 12:38 PM       View Profile for Irie   Email Irie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irie

I love it.
Kinda makes ya' think about how you're living
your life!
Well done Balladeer! Much enjoyed.  


 ~Sheri
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16 posted 06-04-2000 03:17 PM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

God, I'm inspired!!!!!

 Kathleen
indy31_99@yahoo.com

 
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