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My Life....The Movie #3
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My Life....The Movie #3 |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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If my life were one big movie Playing on the silver screen As if someone had followed me Recording every scene... Would I be proud to have it there So grandly on display Or would I hang my head in shame And turn my face away? If everyone were made aware Of what I am inside Would it give cause to loud applause Or would I turn and hide? If audiences sat and watched The character I've been Would they approve of how I've lived And treated fellow men? If they could have a chance to see My feelings deep inside Would they condone mistakes I've made Or how I justified? Would they admire my character And think I was the best Or just nod off and fall asleep Through lack of interest? The shameful things I've said and done I'd hate for them to see. Would faces wrinkle in disgust To see that side of me? Would they smile when I was happy? Feel sad when I was down? Laugh with me when I was funny All the times I played the clown? Would I come across as manly Like a James Bond or Stallone? Or just some poor, pathetic soul Who's always walked alone? What would the critics have to say In Entertainment News? How many stars would they reward My life in their reviews? Who would they get to play my part? DeNiro - maybe Cruise Or just some two-bit thespian Who nothing left to lose? How many days would "My Life" run? A week - or, maybe, two? Would it become a major hit Or disappear from view? Would I be proud to watch "My Life" And think it turned out nice? Or would I think it not well done, Unworthy of the price? There is one critic watching me. He's watched the entire show. Will I be worthy of His praise? In time, He'll let me know. |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
I loved this poem very much. Sometimes our lifes do seem like they are played out in scenes. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
no 'two-bit thespian' will play this part no deniro, no stallone only michael can play michael for his part stands out alone |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
You are that and so much more he'll be waiting behind golden doors! Corinne |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You will get a Heavenly Oscar sir! I know it. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Wait, you said Cruise, then you said a two-bit thespian. Are you repeating yourself?  Enjoyed the poem.Mike |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
I know I'd seen your face before! At the $2 peekshure show. Godzilla never looked better, As I proceeded to the front row. You were very impressive, The way you set everything alight, And then you looked at me and said, "Sir, will this seat be alright?" Hi ya, Michael - you wrote a great poem there - now all I gotta do is head to the editing room and try to snip some scenes outta my life's movie - thanks for the reminder (you dirty rotten dawg!!!). |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Great Poem Balladeer! ~netswan |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
One of my favorites of yours, thanks for reposting it! I'd give it a 'thumbs up' and four stars!! Denise |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hey Michael...this is AWESOME! I love this...the flow, the content...everything. Cool stuff 'deery... K |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
better be careful sweet 'deer... your wisdom and class are showing again  excellent poem, the last verse is pefection. take care kind poet, jm There are places inside our souls ... that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts ... that need to be loved this much. ~Janet Marie~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Something for all of us to think about now...enjoyed the message. James |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
that was a wonderful performance, very clever and well written. There is a quote, Oscar Wilde I think, "Theatre is life without the drama". I don't even what the point of including that quote was. You see the thing about movies is that we are only shown parts of a character, as in life only parts of ourselves are revealed, except to loved ones, only they get the full show unedited. an excellent poem. The winnner for the best poetic life is Balladeer, please accept this oscar. and keep the speech short, and no crying that is Tom Hanks gimic. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers "Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany Culture, alienation, boredom and despair" |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Rosebud....yes, they surely do. Thank you... Doreen...who needs DeNiro if I can be your hero??? Corrine....Aw, you always know just what to say ! deVine one...thank you but the only Oscar I get has Meyer after it  bsquirrel..what a low blow!! I can admire a comment like that! LongJohn...by the time you get done snippin', you won't have a movie...you'll have a "short" subject!!! netswan....I thank you for reading, my friend. Denise...thank you. a thumbs up is always better than a finger up, which is what I'd get from Toerag Severn...the movie isn't very long 'cause I'm still REAL young!!! Janet Marie...Darn! Thanks for warning me. I hate when that happens! Thanks for such a wonderful comment. James...it IS actually interesting to play around with. The next time you're alone doing whatever, pretend that there are thousands of people watching you and see how you change! Human nature is a wonderful thing. Thanks for reading.... brian....maybe that's why my ex-wife kept mumbling that she wanted her money back! Your point is well made, though. We may see a few minutes in the day of a character's actions. How is he the rest of the time? Thoughts to ponder..... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well, me is forking over my hard-earned $$$ just for the opportunity to read and see this show again! Thanks for the repost, 'Deer...I could read your stuff all day/night long! Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
I love it. Kinda makes ya' think about how you're living your life! Well done Balladeer! Much enjoyed. ~Sheri |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
God, I'm inspired!!!!! Kathleen indy31_99@yahoo.com |
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